The Heir Apparent
Viewing comments for Chapter 9 "Underestimating Betrayal"A family learns their father is a serial killer
26 total reviews
Comment from Southern Writer
Well, Billy certainly is a little puke,isn't he?
Liked the paragraph about walking down the street with everyone going about their normal day, while James and Charlie's world is destroyed. We've all had moments like that.
reply by the author on 23-Jan-2011
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Well, Billy certainly is a little puke,isn't he?
Liked the paragraph about walking down the street with everyone going about their normal day, while James and Charlie's world is destroyed. We've all had moments like that.
Comment Written 23-Jan-2011
reply by the author on 23-Jan-2011
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Yes, Billy is definitely a sicko. Glad you liked this one.
Comment from lola29
OMG! James is having to deal with so much; really too much for someone of his age. I honestly don't know how his family would keep it together as well as they have without him. He is a rare human being and I only wish I had someone like him as a friend.
Sasha, you've written another excellent chapter that pulls your readers into the story, allowing to feel some of the ugliness soaking into this family.
reply by the author on 23-Jan-2011
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OMG! James is having to deal with so much; really too much for someone of his age. I honestly don't know how his family would keep it together as well as they have without him. He is a rare human being and I only wish I had someone like him as a friend.
Sasha, you've written another excellent chapter that pulls your readers into the story, allowing to feel some of the ugliness soaking into this family.
Comment Written 23-Jan-2011
reply by the author on 23-Jan-2011
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Thanks. I am so pleased you continue to like this story despite its dark nature.
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You are such a brilliant writer. You are able to expose the darkness for what it really is--fear of the unknown.
Comment from Kathryn Varuzza
Great chapter.
Interesting.
Chilling.
Heartfelt.
Powerful.
Good dialogue.
Good descriptions.
Great way to end it.
Katie
reply by the author on 23-Jan-2011
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Great chapter.
Interesting.
Chilling.
Heartfelt.
Powerful.
Good dialogue.
Good descriptions.
Great way to end it.
Katie
Comment Written 23-Jan-2011
reply by the author on 23-Jan-2011
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Thanks so much for the awesome review.
Comment from barbara.wilkey
I like the way you added scenes and sights of Seattle. It adds a human flavor to the story.
"The 'and' is gone forever isn't it?" (comma after forever)
"Keep it together Charlie. (comma befor Charlie)
reply by the author on 23-Jan-2011
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I like the way you added scenes and sights of Seattle. It adds a human flavor to the story.
"The 'and' is gone forever isn't it?" (comma after forever)
"Keep it together Charlie. (comma befor Charlie)
Comment Written 23-Jan-2011
reply by the author on 23-Jan-2011
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Thanks for catching the spags. I always look forward to your review.
Comment from vickib
Super chapter! I didn't see that coming, I thought someone would start something while they were out. Hey I may have missed this, but what is the time frame? Is it present time? I think the paper should be 50 cents or 75 cents because it hasn't been a quarter for ahwile. Now I'm micro reviewing aren't I? I can't help it if it's so good that I have to dig around to find something. LOL! I like how you talked about being mad at everyone around them being so happy don't they know what's going on. I remember feeling that way so many times. Great job Val, XO Vicki
reply by the author on 23-Jan-2011
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Super chapter! I didn't see that coming, I thought someone would start something while they were out. Hey I may have missed this, but what is the time frame? Is it present time? I think the paper should be 50 cents or 75 cents because it hasn't been a quarter for ahwile. Now I'm micro reviewing aren't I? I can't help it if it's so good that I have to dig around to find something. LOL! I like how you talked about being mad at everyone around them being so happy don't they know what's going on. I remember feeling that way so many times. Great job Val, XO Vicki
Comment Written 23-Jan-2011
reply by the author on 23-Jan-2011
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I haven't been back to the States since 2006 so you could very well be right....I'll have to google the price of a newspaper in Seattle for 2009. Thanks for the great review, I always look forward to and appreciate your comments.
Comment from RKagan
You have brought to light so much that we don't think about when one of these criminals is caught. The family suffers greatly as your posts reveal. This is a really insightful novel into the minds of people faced with a horrific situation. Great job. Waiting for your next post. I think this might be one of the best I have read all year. Even including books not on FS and I read lots of books. great job.
reply by the author on 23-Jan-2011
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You have brought to light so much that we don't think about when one of these criminals is caught. The family suffers greatly as your posts reveal. This is a really insightful novel into the minds of people faced with a horrific situation. Great job. Waiting for your next post. I think this might be one of the best I have read all year. Even including books not on FS and I read lots of books. great job.
Comment Written 23-Jan-2011
reply by the author on 23-Jan-2011
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I wanted to show the other side, the one few people think about. Glad you like it so far.
Comment from InterestingRon
Hi Smurphy
Another great easy flowing read.
You have certainly created a villain with that Billy. What a piece of work! I felt like hissing.
It's astonishing, and so true, how people can be so cruel to others in trouble.
Another little gem.
Ron
reply by the author on 23-Jan-2011
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Hi Smurphy
Another great easy flowing read.
You have certainly created a villain with that Billy. What a piece of work! I felt like hissing.
It's astonishing, and so true, how people can be so cruel to others in trouble.
Another little gem.
Ron
Comment Written 23-Jan-2011
reply by the author on 23-Jan-2011
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It is amazing what people will do for their 15 minutes of fame. Glad you liked this one.
Comment from detailz29
This chapter is attention grabbing! Jumping in here, in the middle catches my attention enough to want to read your book from beginning to end.I like the clean choice of words. I don't have to think to hard to see and picture what is going on. Very enjoyable!
reply by the author on 23-Jan-2011
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This chapter is attention grabbing! Jumping in here, in the middle catches my attention enough to want to read your book from beginning to end.I like the clean choice of words. I don't have to think to hard to see and picture what is going on. Very enjoyable!
Comment Written 23-Jan-2011
reply by the author on 23-Jan-2011
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Thanks so much. I hope you do go back and read the beginning, I think you will find it interesting.
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Comment from c_lucas
Lies by the so call in the know has caused more than one juvenil suicide. This is very well written with a smooth flow of words, making for an easy read.
reply by the author on 23-Jan-2011
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Lies by the so call in the know has caused more than one juvenil suicide. This is very well written with a smooth flow of words, making for an easy read.
Comment Written 23-Jan-2011
reply by the author on 23-Jan-2011
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So true. Betrayal cuts so deep. Thanks, I'm pleased you liked this one.
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So very true. Pleased you liked this one.
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You'rel welcome. Sasha. Charlie
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You're welcome, Sasha. Charlie
Comment from Tellis
It amazes me how cruel people will treat others who are having a bad time. That slime Billy should be sued. Excellent chapter.
Tellis
reply by the author on 23-Jan-2011
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It amazes me how cruel people will treat others who are having a bad time. That slime Billy should be sued. Excellent chapter.
Tellis
Comment Written 23-Jan-2011
reply by the author on 23-Jan-2011
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I cover that in the next chapter. Glad you liked this one.
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I cover that in the next chapter. Glad you liked this one.