Comment from Tillom Gliss

Excellent

Well, I am new to this flash fiction genre so I don't have much to compare but I must say that I did not expect to get chills or feel awe when reading a story of 100 words! Great work! Certain to be a strong contender in the contest!

 Comment Written 23-Nov-2010

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reply by the author on 23-Nov-2010

What a nice review! I appreciate you reading and your kind feedback. Stories are my genre of choice, but I've never written one with a 100 word constraint. It's not easy.

Comment from gramalot8

Excellent

Mystery Author, this is a very well written story and should do very well in the contest. I wonder how true this storyline could be in the life of a soldier? Good luck in the contest.

 Comment Written 23-Nov-2010

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reply by the author on 23-Nov-2010

Thank you very much for reading and for your kind feedback!

Comment from adewpearl

Excellent

You have dramatic setting, immense conflict, strong emotion, and a moving, thought-provoking ending - and all in 100 words - good luck in the contest :-) Brooke

 Comment Written 23-Nov-2010

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reply by the author on 23-Nov-2010

Thanks for reading and thanks for the kind feedback!

Comment from Lekatt

Excellent

How true I know this is having had a near death experience. An experiencer is often told "it's not your time." I loved this story great write.

 Comment Written 23-Nov-2010

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reply by the author on 23-Nov-2010

I very much appreciate that you read and for your kind feedback

Comment from dejohnsrld (Debbie)

Excellent

It is difficult to get all the required elements in
such a short piece, but you did it well. I wish you
luck in the contest! Debbie

 Comment Written 23-Nov-2010

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reply by the author on 23-Nov-2010

Thanks Debbie - while my genre of choice is stories, I have to admit that the 100 words is quite a restraint. Thanks for reading and your positive feedback!

Comment from Juliette Chamberlain

Excellent

You paint a perfect picture of that foxhole in the desert.
How frightening to realise that one is the last of an eight man team to survive.
No wonder he prayed for a quick and painles death, and yet, how conforting was that still small voice, "...It's not you time."

Well told in just 100 words.

Juliette

 Comment Written 23-Nov-2010

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reply by the author on 23-Nov-2010

Thank you for the kind feedback. I've never tried a format this short before. It does make it tough.

Comment from empire76

Excellent

Interesting piece. I'm not sure if it was your intention but I did chuckle at the end there. Not a resolution that brings peace of mind, is it? LOL

Good one

Empi

 Comment Written 23-Nov-2010

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reply by the author on 23-Nov-2010

Thanks for reading and your kind feedback!

Comment from Connie P

Excellent

Whew, this one gave me chills. A definite contender for the contest. I can't imagine being in such a situation with a dead comrade at my side.
Good luck,
Connie

 Comment Written 23-Nov-2010

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reply by the author on 23-Nov-2010

Thanks Connie - I appreciate you reading and for the kind feedback.

Comment from MizKat

Excellent

Your flash fiction is written well and tells a good story in just 100 words. I really enjoyed reading it. Keep up the fantastic work. Kat

 Comment Written 23-Nov-2010

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reply by the author on 23-Nov-2010

Thanks Kat - first time I tried one this short. It really isn't easy. I do appreciate your feedback.

Comment from Writingfundimension

Good

I'm sending in another review with a higher review level reflecting your willingness to make changes and gratitude for the input. This should offset the other (and I really need to learn how to do this the right way - perhaps you know how that is done?

This rating does not count towards story rating or author rank.
The highest and the lowest rating are not included in calculations.

 Comment Written 23-Nov-2010

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reply by the author on 23-Nov-2010

Thanks for reading. Don't know if it would change your rating, but I did make that change, primarily to avoid two sentences, close together, starting with "There".

reply by the author on 23-Nov-2010

I think it reads much better as well, so appreciate the input. It doesn't look like your rating changed, but I do appreciate the feedback.

reply by Writingfundimension on 23-Nov-2010

I did try - four times! Anyway, I think the most important thing is how it will look to the judges. Best of luck!

reply by the author on 23-Nov-2010

Thanks for making mine a better entry!