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Comment from gramalot8
Mystery Author, this is very well written and should do very well in the contest. If I read it right, she didn't give him the pills and now maybe he'll live with the donor available. Hope that is what you meant. Good luck in the contest.
reply by the author on 04-Jan-2011
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Mystery Author, this is very well written and should do very well in the contest. If I read it right, she didn't give him the pills and now maybe he'll live with the donor available. Hope that is what you meant. Good luck in the contest.
Comment Written 23-Nov-2010
reply by the author on 04-Jan-2011
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My apologies for my tardiness but my thanks is just as sincere...Wishing you the bestin 2011. Smiles, Carol
Comment from empire76
nice one. I like the contrast between the very emotional bulk of the story and the upbeat end. I wonder if they'll ever talk about what almost happened
Nice one
Empi
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nice one. I like the contrast between the very emotional bulk of the story and the upbeat end. I wonder if they'll ever talk about what almost happened
Nice one
Empi
Comment Written 23-Nov-2010
reply by the author on 04-Jan-2011
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My apologies for my tardiness but my thanks is just as sincere...Wishing you the bestin 2011. Smiles, Carol
Comment from bhogg
Great tenson for a write of so few words. It wasn't clear if she gave him the pills or not, so I guess I'll just be left hanging! Well done, regards, Bill
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Great tenson for a write of so few words. It wasn't clear if she gave him the pills or not, so I guess I'll just be left hanging! Well done, regards, Bill
Comment Written 23-Nov-2010
reply by the author on 04-Jan-2011
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My apologies for my tardiness but my thanks is just as sincere...Wishing you the bestin 2011. Smiles, Carol
Comment from Connie P
This is the best entry I've read so far. You have a lot of drama packed in to the allowed 100 words. You should fare well in this contest.
Good luck,
Connie
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This is the best entry I've read so far. You have a lot of drama packed in to the allowed 100 words. You should fare well in this contest.
Good luck,
Connie
Comment Written 23-Nov-2010
reply by the author on 04-Jan-2011
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My apologies for my tardiness but my thanks is just as sincere...Wishing you the bestin 2011. Smiles, Carol
Comment from MizKat
Wow - This is really good. Just think if she'd given him the pills he would have killed himself needless. I really think you told a fantastic story. Kat
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Wow - This is really good. Just think if she'd given him the pills he would have killed himself needless. I really think you told a fantastic story. Kat
Comment Written 23-Nov-2010
reply by the author on 04-Jan-2011
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My apologies for my tardiness but my thanks is just as sincere...Wishing you the bestin 2011. Smiles, Carol
Comment from Judith Ann
I had to read this a couple of times before I understood what was happening. At least, I think I understand now. A hundred words is not much to work with, is it? I like this story, and I like the happy ending too.
The doctor said-"
"If you love me-" Your use of dashes is kind of through me, but I understand your use of them. Good luck in the contest. -Judy
reply by the author on 04-Jan-2011
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I had to read this a couple of times before I understood what was happening. At least, I think I understand now. A hundred words is not much to work with, is it? I like this story, and I like the happy ending too.
The doctor said-"
"If you love me-" Your use of dashes is kind of through me, but I understand your use of them. Good luck in the contest. -Judy
Comment Written 23-Nov-2010
reply by the author on 04-Jan-2011
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My apologies for my tardiness but my thanks is just as sincere...Wishing you the bestin 2011. Smiles, Carol
Comment from Matoshka
The flame of faith is all over this. Please help me, I could feel his pain and despair giving up. I felt her clinging on the hope and the Dr coming in saying we have a donor. What a beautiful write of hope and faith in the mist of despair.this is an inspiring write. Good luck in the contest.
reply by the author on 04-Jan-2011
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The flame of faith is all over this. Please help me, I could feel his pain and despair giving up. I felt her clinging on the hope and the Dr coming in saying we have a donor. What a beautiful write of hope and faith in the mist of despair.this is an inspiring write. Good luck in the contest.
Comment Written 23-Nov-2010
reply by the author on 04-Jan-2011
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My apologies for my tardiness but my thanks is just as sincere...Wishing you the bestin 2011. Smiles, Carol
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You are so welcome Carol. Blessings.
Comment from Mustang Patty
Wrenching tale of the decision faced by so many spouses, and family members each day. When is it okay to let go? When should we give up hope? Well done.
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Wrenching tale of the decision faced by so many spouses, and family members each day. When is it okay to let go? When should we give up hope? Well done.
Comment Written 23-Nov-2010
reply by the author on 04-Jan-2011
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My apologies for my tardiness but my thanks is just as sincere...Wishing you the bestin 2011. Smiles, Carol
Comment from Juliette Chamberlain
You set the whole scenario very successfully and manage to convey the pain and misery of the situation very well.
Your final two lines are inspirational, and validate her decision.
Somehow 'she whimpered' seems out of place! Would 'she groaned' or even 'she whispered,' be a reasonable alternative?
Juliette
reply by the author on 04-Jan-2011
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You set the whole scenario very successfully and manage to convey the pain and misery of the situation very well.
Your final two lines are inspirational, and validate her decision.
Somehow 'she whimpered' seems out of place! Would 'she groaned' or even 'she whispered,' be a reasonable alternative?
Juliette
Comment Written 23-Nov-2010
reply by the author on 04-Jan-2011
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My apologies for my tardiness but my thanks is just as sincere...Wishing you the bestin 2011. Smiles, Carol
Comment from highlander104
Wow! Great entry for this prompt full of emotion leading up to your shocker of an ending. Good luck in the contest.
Jean K.
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Wow! Great entry for this prompt full of emotion leading up to your shocker of an ending. Good luck in the contest.
Jean K.
Comment Written 23-Nov-2010
reply by the author on 04-Jan-2011
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My apologies for my tardiness but my thanks is just as sincere...Wishing you the bestin 2011. Smiles, Carol
