Carrie's Prayer
100 word dash contest entry15 total reviews
Comment from highlander104
Good entry for this prompt. Excellent detail and the story carries through to the end. I especially like the second line. I think at times we all feel that way. Good luck.
Jean K.
reply by the author on 24-Nov-2010
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Good entry for this prompt. Excellent detail and the story carries through to the end. I especially like the second line. I think at times we all feel that way. Good luck.
Jean K.
Comment Written 23-Nov-2010
reply by the author on 24-Nov-2010
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We sure do. Thanks
Comment from sweetwoodjax
wow, that is a horrific ending. it must be a terrible thing to be in so much pain as to pray for death. you captured emotions very well. good luck in the contest
reply by the author on 24-Nov-2010
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wow, that is a horrific ending. it must be a terrible thing to be in so much pain as to pray for death. you captured emotions very well. good luck in the contest
Comment Written 23-Nov-2010
reply by the author on 24-Nov-2010
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I hope you never stand witness to that kind of hopelessness.
Comment from jmdg1954
Excellently done author... you had charector, conflict and resolution, and, I liked thestoryline with that twist at the end. I saw no "additional" words that could be curtailed from the story... nicely done,
John
reply by the author on 22-Nov-2010
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Excellently done author... you had charector, conflict and resolution, and, I liked thestoryline with that twist at the end. I saw no "additional" words that could be curtailed from the story... nicely done,
John
Comment Written 22-Nov-2010
reply by the author on 22-Nov-2010
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Thanks, tough exercise.
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I guess it's supposed to be...
Comment from Ntorious
I think you picked a great picture to match the story of 100 words.
You were very descriptive with your words.
You also provided good visuals; while reading it I felt like I was there.
The story kept me on edge all the way through.
I liked how you made the reader think she was diagnosed with a disease at first
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reply by the author on 22-Nov-2010
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I think you picked a great picture to match the story of 100 words.
You were very descriptive with your words.
You also provided good visuals; while reading it I felt like I was there.
The story kept me on edge all the way through.
I liked how you made the reader think she was diagnosed with a disease at first
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Comment Written 22-Nov-2010
reply by the author on 22-Nov-2010
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thanks
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welcome
Comment from K. L. Bauman
Death seems to be the topic for all the stories I read tonight! This was a mixture of being morbid, and happy. You did a great job using only 100 words. Carrie and her story were clear, as was the ending. I didn't see any spags.
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reply by the author on 22-Nov-2010
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Death seems to be the topic for all the stories I read tonight! This was a mixture of being morbid, and happy. You did a great job using only 100 words. Carrie and her story were clear, as was the ending. I didn't see any spags.
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Comment Written 22-Nov-2010
reply by the author on 22-Nov-2010
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Thanks
