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Viewing comments for Chapter 16 "tanka (autumn turns to winter)"keep your hope alive....
26 total reviews
Comment from Jen Gentry
Nicely done ode to the changing seasons. I very much enjoyed it as fall can not come soon enough for me this year. GOod luck.
reply by the author on 30-Sep-2010
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Nicely done ode to the changing seasons. I very much enjoyed it as fall can not come soon enough for me this year. GOod luck.
Comment Written 30-Sep-2010
reply by the author on 30-Sep-2010
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thank you christa :)
Comment from sheilanewton
I was asked to write more, but you know, I felt as though I'd said everything in a couple of short lines.
The undulating rhythm and use of good language throughout, made this an exceptional poem - and I was privileged to read it.
How about that, for a nice expansion?
reply by the author on 30-Sep-2010
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I was asked to write more, but you know, I felt as though I'd said everything in a couple of short lines.
The undulating rhythm and use of good language throughout, made this an exceptional poem - and I was privileged to read it.
How about that, for a nice expansion?
Comment Written 30-Sep-2010
reply by the author on 30-Sep-2010
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lol thanx sheila! :)
Comment from Ritsal
Hey, not sure if I'm reading this right but I believe it should be winter's effect instead of affect. Nice entry. Good luck in the contest.
Best wishes,
Rita
reply by the author on 29-Sep-2010
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Hey, not sure if I'm reading this right but I believe it should be winter's effect instead of affect. Nice entry. Good luck in the contest.
Best wishes,
Rita
Comment Written 29-Sep-2010
reply by the author on 29-Sep-2010
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will go fix! thanx! :)
Comment from percival86jack
The dreaded Canadian winter lies ahead of me. Each year ant this time, I want to dig a hole, climb in and hibernate until spring... your autumn poem was well written and stirred up thoughts of the coming season! Good luck in the contest... hugs and sweet thoughts, Jack xxxxxxxxxxxxx
reply by the author on 26-Sep-2010
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The dreaded Canadian winter lies ahead of me. Each year ant this time, I want to dig a hole, climb in and hibernate until spring... your autumn poem was well written and stirred up thoughts of the coming season! Good luck in the contest... hugs and sweet thoughts, Jack xxxxxxxxxxxxx
Comment Written 26-Sep-2010
reply by the author on 26-Sep-2010
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hehehe thanx jack! :)
Comment from Cedar
I love your description of autumn, especially the
first two lines. This piece is very well written
and should do great in the contest.
reply by the author on 26-Sep-2010
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I love your description of autumn, especially the
first two lines. This piece is very well written
and should do great in the contest.
Comment Written 26-Sep-2010
reply by the author on 26-Sep-2010
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thanx cedar :)
Comment from rosah
loved this entire poem, love the analogies you used here for autumn, also really love the cat, and saying, in your profile, thank you for sharing, blessings.
reply by the author on 26-Sep-2010
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loved this entire poem, love the analogies you used here for autumn, also really love the cat, and saying, in your profile, thank you for sharing, blessings.
Comment Written 26-Sep-2010
reply by the author on 26-Sep-2010
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hehe thanx rosah! :)
Comment from Magics02
I stumbled upon this little tanka (I never heard of one) and wanted to tell you I just liked the way it is readable and says alot in short lines. Look forward to reading more of you. Magiccs02
reply by the author on 26-Sep-2010
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I stumbled upon this little tanka (I never heard of one) and wanted to tell you I just liked the way it is readable and says alot in short lines. Look forward to reading more of you. Magiccs02
Comment Written 25-Sep-2010
reply by the author on 26-Sep-2010
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thank you magic! :)
Comment from telespectral
What a great Tanka poem. I like how you describe the changes from autumn to winter. Beautifully written with such a strong and wonderful feeling of nature.
reply by the author on 25-Sep-2010
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What a great Tanka poem. I like how you describe the changes from autumn to winter. Beautifully written with such a strong and wonderful feeling of nature.
Comment Written 24-Sep-2010
reply by the author on 25-Sep-2010
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thankyathankya :)
Comment from amada
I think the idea of "leaves fall like tears" is very fresh and original. Great Tanka, it has a melancholic touch, as Fall truthful is. Best wishes in the contest.
reply by the author on 24-Sep-2010
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I think the idea of "leaves fall like tears" is very fresh and original. Great Tanka, it has a melancholic touch, as Fall truthful is. Best wishes in the contest.
Comment Written 24-Sep-2010
reply by the author on 24-Sep-2010
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thank you amada :)
Comment from InHisownwrite
I like this tanka.....
Love all the imagery...
(leaves fall like tears).... (through branches bared)....
(bent like arms)......
my favorite: waving a rainbow of hope......
That's a great hope.... There is always an incoming season... Love it! Bryan
reply by the author on 24-Sep-2010
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I like this tanka.....
Love all the imagery...
(leaves fall like tears).... (through branches bared)....
(bent like arms)......
my favorite: waving a rainbow of hope......
That's a great hope.... There is always an incoming season... Love it! Bryan
Comment Written 24-Sep-2010
reply by the author on 24-Sep-2010
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thanx bryan! :)