Another Pretty Face
Viewing comments for Chapter 8 "Chapter 3 Part three"Can love survive small town gossip?
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Comment from fairy77
That was so well written.Your an author and it shows.The relationship between Joe and Sara is very nice and they obviously really like and trust each other.Roy was the disturbing one,but I think Sara has no regrets for the lovely daughter she raised.I'm going to look for the continuation of this story.Its just getting interesting.
Good descriptive,good dialogue,good plot and good puctuation.Congrats on your success.beth
reply by the author on 25-Jul-2010
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That was so well written.Your an author and it shows.The relationship between Joe and Sara is very nice and they obviously really like and trust each other.Roy was the disturbing one,but I think Sara has no regrets for the lovely daughter she raised.I'm going to look for the continuation of this story.Its just getting interesting.
Good descriptive,good dialogue,good plot and good puctuation.Congrats on your success.beth
Comment Written 25-Jul-2010
reply by the author on 25-Jul-2010
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Thank you for your kind review and words. I appreciate both.
Comment from Rama Rao
You don't need any support from us. You are at your best writing about romance. The entire scene of the ball room and outside came alive thanks to your narrative and crisp dialogues. Not a word out of place. It was like a gorgeous woman sashaying before an appreciative audience.
Well done. Excellent work. Press on.
reply by the author on 25-Jul-2010
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You don't need any support from us. You are at your best writing about romance. The entire scene of the ball room and outside came alive thanks to your narrative and crisp dialogues. Not a word out of place. It was like a gorgeous woman sashaying before an appreciative audience.
Well done. Excellent work. Press on.
Comment Written 25-Jul-2010
reply by the author on 25-Jul-2010
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Thank you for your kind words and the review. I appreciate both. You have a virtual hug coming your way.
Comment from Triumphant
Loved your very real life drama that must have happened to a million girls on prom night. I did think the beginning was a little slow paced. I would have liked to see a little spunk from Sara. She was brave enough to keep a real life and not hide after her pregnancy... for character consistency, I think her character would also have spoken up for herself with the jerk. You did a good accordion job between past events and the current time.
reply by the author on 24-Jul-2010
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Loved your very real life drama that must have happened to a million girls on prom night. I did think the beginning was a little slow paced. I would have liked to see a little spunk from Sara. She was brave enough to keep a real life and not hide after her pregnancy... for character consistency, I think her character would also have spoken up for herself with the jerk. You did a good accordion job between past events and the current time.
Comment Written 24-Jul-2010
reply by the author on 24-Jul-2010
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Thank you for your kind review. Sara has a very low self esteem because she has been put down by the town for 15 years. She's slowly coming into her own.
Comment from Rain Chapman
Hello Barbara,
So, now I'm wondering if the jerk is Roy or Rick, and I'm also wondering if you are going to put in an extremely satisfying scene where Joe kicks his butt, lol. Boy, this group is a very narrow minded bunch, I want to wade in and start shaking some of them for how they treat her. Great chapter.
Rain:^)
reply by the author on 24-Jul-2010
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Hello Barbara,
So, now I'm wondering if the jerk is Roy or Rick, and I'm also wondering if you are going to put in an extremely satisfying scene where Joe kicks his butt, lol. Boy, this group is a very narrow minded bunch, I want to wade in and start shaking some of them for how they treat her. Great chapter.
Rain:^)
Comment Written 24-Jul-2010
reply by the author on 24-Jul-2010
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Thank you for your kind review. Joe will make sure justice is done. Thank you for your kind review.
Comment from zmacgirl
It's always hard to pick up in the middle of a story but this read really easily. Now I've gotta go catch up with the other chapters so I can know whats going on here. I'm dying to find out who the father is and I really like Joe!!
reply by the author on 24-Jul-2010
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It's always hard to pick up in the middle of a story but this read really easily. Now I've gotta go catch up with the other chapters so I can know whats going on here. I'm dying to find out who the father is and I really like Joe!!
Comment Written 24-Jul-2010
reply by the author on 24-Jul-2010
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Thank you for your kind reveiw and words.
Comment from MitchellScott
Barbara, your writing has really drawn me into the story. This isn't really my style but I have enjoyed reading and getting to know the characters.
reply by the author on 24-Jul-2010
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Barbara, your writing has really drawn me into the story. This isn't really my style but I have enjoyed reading and getting to know the characters.
Comment Written 24-Jul-2010
reply by the author on 24-Jul-2010
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Thank you for reading and reviewing my style. I understand that not everyone enjoyed romance and I do appreciate you sticking around.
Comment from RebelRose
Boy, talk about jerks. That Roy is certainly a first class one. He needs to grow up. Will the father be revealed at the dance? I thought at first it may be Roy from the way he was acting. Great chapter.
reply by the author on 24-Jul-2010
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Boy, talk about jerks. That Roy is certainly a first class one. He needs to grow up. Will the father be revealed at the dance? I thought at first it may be Roy from the way he was acting. Great chapter.
Comment Written 24-Jul-2010
reply by the author on 24-Jul-2010
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The father will not be revealed until later in the story. I am giving clues all along. Thank you for you kind review.
Comment from zoocq
Thank you Barbara for your continuing story about Joe, Sara and small town pettiness. I enjoy the easy flow of your writing and the glimpses into peoples' souls with your decriptions and their actions. Keep it up!
reply by the author on 24-Jul-2010
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Thank you Barbara for your continuing story about Joe, Sara and small town pettiness. I enjoy the easy flow of your writing and the glimpses into peoples' souls with your decriptions and their actions. Keep it up!
Comment Written 24-Jul-2010
reply by the author on 24-Jul-2010
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Thank you for your kind review I appreciate it.
Comment from McMac
This was an absolutely amazing story...Im Trying to find words suitable to compliment this story.
The story had many high points throughout the entire text.
I have nothing but great things to say about this story.
No wonder its an all time best and a recognized story. WOW!!!
reply by the author on 24-Jul-2010
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This was an absolutely amazing story...Im Trying to find words suitable to compliment this story.
The story had many high points throughout the entire text.
I have nothing but great things to say about this story.
No wonder its an all time best and a recognized story. WOW!!!
Comment Written 24-Jul-2010
reply by the author on 24-Jul-2010
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Thank you for your kind words and review. I appreciate them both.
Comment from samandlancelot
I like the way you shared Sara's story with Joe.
and raised her daughter, Cassie (add comma) by herself.
I always enjoy a smart aleck being put in his place. You brought us through that scene nicely.
Patricia
reply by the author on 24-Jul-2010
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I like the way you shared Sara's story with Joe.
and raised her daughter, Cassie (add comma) by herself.
I always enjoy a smart aleck being put in his place. You brought us through that scene nicely.
Patricia
Comment Written 24-Jul-2010
reply by the author on 24-Jul-2010
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Thank you for your kind review. I will take care of that comma.
