Jack and Chloe
finding a good life together27 total reviews
Comment from Nicnac
What a charming piece, Connie! I love a story that surprises me. :) Who knew? LOL
I first thought the narrator was a cantankerous elderly lady, then I thought - wait, it must be a snooty young woman. I literally laughed out loud when I realized she was a dog.
A delightful read from a fabulous author.
I have no suggestions. This is perfect.
Congratulations on your win! I'm happy for you. :)
Nic
reply by the author on 05-Aug-2010
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What a charming piece, Connie! I love a story that surprises me. :) Who knew? LOL
I first thought the narrator was a cantankerous elderly lady, then I thought - wait, it must be a snooty young woman. I literally laughed out loud when I realized she was a dog.
A delightful read from a fabulous author.
I have no suggestions. This is perfect.
Congratulations on your win! I'm happy for you. :)
Nic
Comment Written 05-Aug-2010
reply by the author on 05-Aug-2010
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Thank you, Nic, for all your encouraging comments. I'm glad the story surprised you as that was my intent. I just hoped it would work. I was so surprised and so happy to win! Thanks again. :-) Connie
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It was my pleasure. :)
Comment from findingmyroom
Congratulations on your contest win! This story is adorable, a unique take on the opening line. You create sympathetic characters, and I love it that they are dogs... Great job!
reply by the author on 05-Aug-2010
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Congratulations on your contest win! This story is adorable, a unique take on the opening line. You create sympathetic characters, and I love it that they are dogs... Great job!
Comment Written 05-Aug-2010
reply by the author on 05-Aug-2010
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Thank you so much for your positive review and for your congratulations. Connie
Comment from Amfunny
Excellent story and a big congratulations to you for such a well written story. I really enjoyed reading and reviewing this. Congrats on your first place win!!!!!
reply by the author on 05-Aug-2010
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Excellent story and a big congratulations to you for such a well written story. I really enjoyed reading and reviewing this. Congrats on your first place win!!!!!
Comment Written 05-Aug-2010
reply by the author on 05-Aug-2010
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Thank you! I am so thrilled--couldn't sleep all night, I was so excited. Congratulations to you too for landing second place with a great story! Connie
Comment from JoAnna77
This is a lovely story - I like the way it only gradually dawns on the reader that the speaker is a dog! The story reads well and I like the dialogue between the dogs and the happy ending.
reply by the author on 21-Jul-2010
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This is a lovely story - I like the way it only gradually dawns on the reader that the speaker is a dog! The story reads well and I like the dialogue between the dogs and the happy ending.
Comment Written 21-Jul-2010
reply by the author on 21-Jul-2010
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Thank you so much for reading and reviewing. I'm glad you liked it. Connie
Comment from Fireshadow
Connie C, this is a wonderful story with a surprising Disney-like twist in the middle that really captured my attention and held it to the end. Your narrative and dialogue flow smoothly and the storyline is absolutely beautiful and tender. I loved it. Very well done ! Amarillys
reply by the author on 18-Jul-2010
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Connie C, this is a wonderful story with a surprising Disney-like twist in the middle that really captured my attention and held it to the end. Your narrative and dialogue flow smoothly and the storyline is absolutely beautiful and tender. I loved it. Very well done ! Amarillys
Comment Written 18-Jul-2010
reply by the author on 18-Jul-2010
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Thank you so much for your lovely review and for the six-star rating. I do appreciate your reading it. Best to you. Connie C
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Thank you so much for your lovely review and for the six-star rating. I do appreciate your reading it. Best to you. Connie C
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Thank you so much for your lovely review and for the six-star rating. I do appreciate your reading it. Best to you. Connie C
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Thank you so much for your lovely review and for the six-star rating. I do appreciate your reading it. Best to you. Connie C
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Good luck in the contest !
Comment from patwannabe
Hi Connie, this is cute. I guess I'm not used to dogs talking so it took me a little more than half the story to pick up on the characters. That's good writing.
Had to even go back and re-read the first part. Yep. I missed the clues.
Well done, no SPaG. pat
reply by the author on 18-Jul-2010
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Hi Connie, this is cute. I guess I'm not used to dogs talking so it took me a little more than half the story to pick up on the characters. That's good writing.
Had to even go back and re-read the first part. Yep. I missed the clues.
Well done, no SPaG. pat
Comment Written 18-Jul-2010
reply by the author on 18-Jul-2010
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Thank you, Pat, for reading and reviewing. I'm glad you thought it was cute. Connie C
Comment from KYPollard/El Gato
Oh, now, this is too charming for words, my friend. And is very well written. I love the twist. It was my pleasure to read you today. Good luck in the contest.
reply by the author on 18-Jul-2010
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Oh, now, this is too charming for words, my friend. And is very well written. I love the twist. It was my pleasure to read you today. Good luck in the contest.
Comment Written 18-Jul-2010
reply by the author on 18-Jul-2010
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Thank you so much for your kind review and that wonderful six-star rating! I'm glad you liked the twist at the end; I was hoping it would work. Thanks again. :-) Connie C
Comment from Juliette Chamberlain
Oh, this is so cute. Of course, as you intended, I thought at first that she was a beautiful young girl abandoned by her boyfriend.
Pomeranians really do have a mind of their own, and are quite capable of making their desires known.
That was quite a ploy to get Jack noticed - with the desired results.
Juliette
reply by Anonymous Member on 18-Jul-2010
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Oh, this is so cute. Of course, as you intended, I thought at first that she was a beautiful young girl abandoned by her boyfriend.
Pomeranians really do have a mind of their own, and are quite capable of making their desires known.
That was quite a ploy to get Jack noticed - with the desired results.
Juliette
Comment Written 18-Jul-2010
reply by Anonymous Member on 18-Jul-2010
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Thank you so much, Juliette, for your great review. Connie C
Comment from Sally Carter
Connie, I absolutely LOVE this. I have written hardly any stories and want to learn, and this is such a superb example. Jack and Chloe completely won my heart - and I'm not even a specially doggy person!
For starters, I noticed no nits at all, which made reading a pleasure uninterrupted by distractions of punctuation or spelling.
I think I twigged quite early on that this was not a human relationship, but that did not spoil the story at all. In fact, it rather enhanced it. Little touches like Chloe turning her back on Jack and looking upwards. I could just see her in her pen.
Clever teasing in the broken relationship with Brad. And then Jack is such a charmer! What a touching blend of humour and sadness. Beautifully done.
"It's okay, Sweetie, who wants an old dog like me anyway?" he says sullenly. Just broke my heart!
I can't think of many stories I have read that I have enjoyed more. A huge bravo from me.
Sally
reply by Anonymous Member on 18-Jul-2010
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Connie, I absolutely LOVE this. I have written hardly any stories and want to learn, and this is such a superb example. Jack and Chloe completely won my heart - and I'm not even a specially doggy person!
For starters, I noticed no nits at all, which made reading a pleasure uninterrupted by distractions of punctuation or spelling.
I think I twigged quite early on that this was not a human relationship, but that did not spoil the story at all. In fact, it rather enhanced it. Little touches like Chloe turning her back on Jack and looking upwards. I could just see her in her pen.
Clever teasing in the broken relationship with Brad. And then Jack is such a charmer! What a touching blend of humour and sadness. Beautifully done.
"It's okay, Sweetie, who wants an old dog like me anyway?" he says sullenly. Just broke my heart!
I can't think of many stories I have read that I have enjoyed more. A huge bravo from me.
Sally
Comment Written 18-Jul-2010
reply by Anonymous Member on 18-Jul-2010
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Thank you, Sally, for all your wonderful comments and for the six-star rating. I am a converted dog lover (always just loved cats until I married a dog owner). I love writing about animals. I see that you have become a fan of mine. I am so humbled by that, and I hope I don't disappoint you in the future. Thank you again for all the praise of my story. Have a wonderful day, my friend. You have certainly made mine! Connie :-)
Comment from adewpearl
What a cute story - I really had no idea it was going to take the twist it did - I enjoy being "tricked" so successfully - I love the dialogue and interaction between the narrator and Jack in the first section, and I was really rooting for him, and then when he said he was going to check out the next day, I thought he was a guy contemplating suicide, perhaps because he was mortally ill. I am so glad it turned out to be a couple of dogs at a shelter and they both got their happy ending!!! :-) Brooke
reply by Anonymous Member on 18-Jul-2010
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What a cute story - I really had no idea it was going to take the twist it did - I enjoy being "tricked" so successfully - I love the dialogue and interaction between the narrator and Jack in the first section, and I was really rooting for him, and then when he said he was going to check out the next day, I thought he was a guy contemplating suicide, perhaps because he was mortally ill. I am so glad it turned out to be a couple of dogs at a shelter and they both got their happy ending!!! :-) Brooke
Comment Written 18-Jul-2010
reply by Anonymous Member on 18-Jul-2010
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Thank you, Brooke, for your lovely review. I'm glad I fooled you into thinking Jack and Chloe were humans as that was my intention. I really wanted to include a picture of a couple of dogs (so many cute ones from which to choose), but that would have given it away. Have a great day, and I'll be looking forward to your postings today. Connie