The Fork In The Road
Reality is harsh; Survival is in faith.20 total reviews
Comment from mermaids
You tell a story here of the journey taken by one who has suffered sexual abuse. You give these individuals a voice.
I like the role of God and faith in the journey. Great verses and use of words,no revisions needed.
reply by the author on 08-May-2010
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You tell a story here of the journey taken by one who has suffered sexual abuse. You give these individuals a voice.
I like the role of God and faith in the journey. Great verses and use of words,no revisions needed.
Comment Written 08-May-2010
reply by the author on 08-May-2010
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Thank you! Your review is heart warming to me and an honor to my endeavor.
Comment from Orchidea Blu
I can feel the pain, fear and agony of the child in this well penned poem. The writer has a way of taking the events that took place with this child grabbing by the throat and thrusting them in your face (so to speak). There is nothing hidden in what has happened and the pain that the child has to grow and try to live with as an adult. The photo chosen is an excellent visual metaphor representing the feelings expressed by the poem. Poetry is meant to be remembered and I shall certainly remember this poem. Well done! I give this poem well deserved six stars
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I can feel the pain, fear and agony of the child in this well penned poem. The writer has a way of taking the events that took place with this child grabbing by the throat and thrusting them in your face (so to speak). There is nothing hidden in what has happened and the pain that the child has to grow and try to live with as an adult. The photo chosen is an excellent visual metaphor representing the feelings expressed by the poem. Poetry is meant to be remembered and I shall certainly remember this poem. Well done! I give this poem well deserved six stars
Comment Written 08-May-2010
reply by the author on 08-May-2010
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Thank you. Drawing the reader into the drama was a long standing dream. Your review is my greatest reward.
Comment from Kellytr
oldefoggie, Thank you for writing this poem story which, though emotionally draining to read, absolutely needs to be out there and not hidden away. Kelly
reply by the author on 08-May-2010
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oldefoggie, Thank you for writing this poem story which, though emotionally draining to read, absolutely needs to be out there and not hidden away. Kelly
Comment Written 08-May-2010
reply by the author on 08-May-2010
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Thank You! This was very hard to write. Your kind review makes the effort worthwhile.
Comment from vandawalker
This poem is amazingly detailed and has in depth emotions of such a dire circumstance. The happenings are unbelievably sad and heart wrenching. Her natural emotions were slain or destroyed at the fork in the road, but if you're at a fork in the road, there is still a choice to be made. One can choose to go forth and relearn natural responses or choose to remain dead to natural responses. There's always a choice, even if its a difficult one.
Very good writing and it reaches out to many in need of hope and guidance.
reply by the author on 08-May-2010
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This poem is amazingly detailed and has in depth emotions of such a dire circumstance. The happenings are unbelievably sad and heart wrenching. Her natural emotions were slain or destroyed at the fork in the road, but if you're at a fork in the road, there is still a choice to be made. One can choose to go forth and relearn natural responses or choose to remain dead to natural responses. There's always a choice, even if its a difficult one.
Very good writing and it reaches out to many in need of hope and guidance.
Comment Written 08-May-2010
reply by the author on 08-May-2010
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Thank you for your kind review. Life is all about choices. Your kind review makes me realize it was worth the effort to write this poem. Thank you!
Comment from marcellawachtel
It was actually painful to read this poem. In order for it to do its job it had to be this graphic and detailed. I thought at first it would be stronger if it were a bit less detailed, but reviewing it, I think if you condensed it you would lessen the impact. the descriptions are powerful, the psychology accurate, the entire thing a completely successful poem describing outrageous destructing behaviour--evidently, carried out with impunity, that has ruined this young woman's life, essentially.
reply by the author on 08-May-2010
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It was actually painful to read this poem. In order for it to do its job it had to be this graphic and detailed. I thought at first it would be stronger if it were a bit less detailed, but reviewing it, I think if you condensed it you would lessen the impact. the descriptions are powerful, the psychology accurate, the entire thing a completely successful poem describing outrageous destructing behaviour--evidently, carried out with impunity, that has ruined this young woman's life, essentially.
Comment Written 08-May-2010
reply by the author on 08-May-2010
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Thank you for your kind review. Your words tell me I accomplished my goal in writing this poem. Thank you!
Comment from Dom G Robles
Beautifully expressed, this poem is filled with contemptuous emotions--violation of the rights of a child--her struggle for sexual freedom. Part 1, Part 2 and Part 3
reveal throughout all the emotions of despair, ingratitude--the rubbing of a soul of its beautiful existence--perverted sex--forced sex by an evil man. (AT least that is how I see it. )I like the poem from beginning to end. Congratulations.
reply by the author on 08-May-2010
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Beautifully expressed, this poem is filled with contemptuous emotions--violation of the rights of a child--her struggle for sexual freedom. Part 1, Part 2 and Part 3
reveal throughout all the emotions of despair, ingratitude--the rubbing of a soul of its beautiful existence--perverted sex--forced sex by an evil man. (AT least that is how I see it. )I like the poem from beginning to end. Congratulations.
Comment Written 08-May-2010
reply by the author on 08-May-2010
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Thank you. Your kind review is greatly appreciated. It tells me that my poem talks to the reader.
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Yes, you are right, thank you
Comment from InHisownwrite
Wow! This is very moving and thought provoking.... The imagery is so vivid..... It's something what sexual abuse, or abuse of any kind can do.... It's reaches deep into the souls of the victim... I love how you start it off... almost like a picture in the victims mind , of just how the day was.... So many mental pictures come into play...
Very emotional and well written.... Bryan
reply by the author on 08-May-2010
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Wow! This is very moving and thought provoking.... The imagery is so vivid..... It's something what sexual abuse, or abuse of any kind can do.... It's reaches deep into the souls of the victim... I love how you start it off... almost like a picture in the victims mind , of just how the day was.... So many mental pictures come into play...
Very emotional and well written.... Bryan
Comment Written 08-May-2010
reply by the author on 08-May-2010
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Thank you. Your kind review touches my heart, knowing that my words stir the emotion of the reader is wonderful.
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You're so welcome.. Bryan
Comment from Bellringer
A well written harrowing poem of innocence lost. If only the character could have found healing, faith, and strength after her "resurrection" in part two.
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A well written harrowing poem of innocence lost. If only the character could have found healing, faith, and strength after her "resurrection" in part two.
Comment Written 08-May-2010
reply by the author on 08-May-2010
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Thank you for your kind review. Knowing that my poem touched the reader is my reward.
Comment from minopavlic
What grips me from the opening statements is that you give the reader a history, which certainly allows for one to become part of the story. Very emotionally charged, an electrical insightful journey into a world that is all around us.
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What grips me from the opening statements is that you give the reader a history, which certainly allows for one to become part of the story. Very emotionally charged, an electrical insightful journey into a world that is all around us.
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Comment Written 08-May-2010
reply by the author on 08-May-2010
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Thank you. It is rewarding to know that my poem touches the reader. And, yes, it is all around us.
Comment from Perp Ihebom
This is a well constructed poem about the violation of innocence. Your voice has risen in deft condemnation of this vicious act of grave inhumanity to a young lass. Well done
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This is a well constructed poem about the violation of innocence. Your voice has risen in deft condemnation of this vicious act of grave inhumanity to a young lass. Well done
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Comment Written 08-May-2010
reply by the author on 08-May-2010
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Thank you! It was a difficult poem to write, but your kind review tells me I accomplished my goal.