Flash Fiction
Viewing comments for Chapter 41 "The Thunder Roared"Collection of Flash, Micro, etc.
59 total reviews
Comment from Alexandra.Obreja
The first reaction i had when reading your story was "Awww, how sweet!"
You had a wonderful idea for the micro fiction contest. The flow is easy and kept me reading the entire story.
Good job! Good luck in the contest!
Best regards,
Alex
reply by the author on 28-Feb-2010
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The first reaction i had when reading your story was "Awww, how sweet!"
You had a wonderful idea for the micro fiction contest. The flow is easy and kept me reading the entire story.
Good job! Good luck in the contest!
Best regards,
Alex
Comment Written 28-Feb-2010
reply by the author on 28-Feb-2010
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Alex,
Thanks for the wonderful review. I appreciate it very much. CArol
Comment from sugardog
Excellent job on this micro fiction piece. It all seemed so real-you did an amazing job placing the reader into the situation, and I liked the ending-her remembering a deadly tornado and being comforted by her husband. Good job on dialogue, tight writing and description! You are always inspiring to me. Good luck in the contest, Dana
reply by the author on 28-Feb-2010
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Excellent job on this micro fiction piece. It all seemed so real-you did an amazing job placing the reader into the situation, and I liked the ending-her remembering a deadly tornado and being comforted by her husband. Good job on dialogue, tight writing and description! You are always inspiring to me. Good luck in the contest, Dana
Comment Written 28-Feb-2010
reply by the author on 28-Feb-2010
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Dana,
Thank you for the awesome comments and encouragement. I appreciate it very much. Smiles, Carol
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You're welcome, Carol. :)Have a great night!
Comment from Arkine
I was 5 when a tornado struck my grandparents house. Everyone ran downstairs and forgot I was asleep in the upstairs bedroom. I don't know if it 'jumped' or just wasn't a very strong one, but luckily all it did was throw branches through the windows and generally make a mess. I don't actually remember any of it. They said I woke up screaming and was still screaming when they came upstairs. But I have a serious phobia when it comes to dark clouds gathering, throw in wind and thunder and I dive into a panic state of being. Great job on this!
reply by the author on 28-Feb-2010
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I was 5 when a tornado struck my grandparents house. Everyone ran downstairs and forgot I was asleep in the upstairs bedroom. I don't know if it 'jumped' or just wasn't a very strong one, but luckily all it did was throw branches through the windows and generally make a mess. I don't actually remember any of it. They said I woke up screaming and was still screaming when they came upstairs. But I have a serious phobia when it comes to dark clouds gathering, throw in wind and thunder and I dive into a panic state of being. Great job on this!
Comment Written 28-Feb-2010
reply by the author on 28-Feb-2010
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Arkine,
Yes, these storms can and do make a lasting impression on our lives..even when we aren't totally aware of it. Thanks for the great review. Smiles, Carol
Comment from K. Suzanne
Although I've never seen a tornado before, they're one of my biggest fears. I'm mostly afraid of being picked up and flung around. I love lightning.
reply by the author on 28-Feb-2010
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Although I've never seen a tornado before, they're one of my biggest fears. I'm mostly afraid of being picked up and flung around. I love lightning.
Comment Written 27-Feb-2010
reply by the author on 28-Feb-2010
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Suzanne,
Thank you for reading and for the kind review. Smiles, Carol
Comment from JW
Wow! What fantastic description. I could easily see the scene before me. And I never would have expected that ending.
Great Job. Thanks for sharing this.
Jonathon
reply by the author on 28-Feb-2010
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Wow! What fantastic description. I could easily see the scene before me. And I never would have expected that ending.
Great Job. Thanks for sharing this.
Jonathon
Comment Written 27-Feb-2010
reply by the author on 28-Feb-2010
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Jonathon,
Awesome....I truly appreciate your generous and kind comments and stars. I am thrilled you connected to the story. Smiles, Carol
Comment from cheyennewy
Hi Carol,
Another great story. I never suspected it was a dream...very clever and innovative of you! I read this story while holding my breath...good thing it wasn't too long. I felt so sorry for the little girl and was afraid this would end badly. Thank heaven it didn't. Well done and good luck in the contest....blessings....chey
reply by the author on 28-Feb-2010
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Hi Carol,
Another great story. I never suspected it was a dream...very clever and innovative of you! I read this story while holding my breath...good thing it wasn't too long. I felt so sorry for the little girl and was afraid this would end badly. Thank heaven it didn't. Well done and good luck in the contest....blessings....chey
Comment Written 27-Feb-2010
reply by the author on 28-Feb-2010
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Chey,
Oh Heavens, I can not be responsible for you holding your breath and something dreadful happening..lol I'll have to put a Author's note that says BREATHE!!!Thanks so much for the kind review, Chey....Smiles, Carol
Comment from Kingsland
this was a well written piece, as I could picture the things you wrote about happening in my mind. This was just an entertaining piece to have read and written a review for... John
reply by the author on 28-Feb-2010
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this was a well written piece, as I could picture the things you wrote about happening in my mind. This was just an entertaining piece to have read and written a review for... John
Comment Written 27-Feb-2010
reply by the author on 28-Feb-2010
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John,
Thank you so much for the wonderful review. Smiles, CArol
Comment from SamanthaD.
Wow. This is a very powerful poem. Your description of the storm really took me there. You are an excellent writer. I was only a little disappointed at the end, however, that it was all a dream. That seems too trite for your amazing writing. I think with a little revision you would have a truly wonderful piece of writing here!
reply by the author on 27-Feb-2010
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Wow. This is a very powerful poem. Your description of the storm really took me there. You are an excellent writer. I was only a little disappointed at the end, however, that it was all a dream. That seems too trite for your amazing writing. I think with a little revision you would have a truly wonderful piece of writing here!
Comment Written 27-Feb-2010
reply by the author on 27-Feb-2010
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Samantha,
sorry you were disappointed. It's hard to write a story in so few words and make everyone feel the same..I appreciate your review and hope you'll find the next one I write more enjoyable. smiles, Carol
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I did find it enjoyable! You're a great writer. I truly believe that if you had not been limited by the number of words, you would have developed the ending more. It's a great story!
Comment from melyuki
Hey sis, an interesting little story this one is. rather unique in its thoughts, and yet, so common to have odd dreams such as this.. Placing yourslef in the story, feeling the rattles of the freight train, moments earlier than it comes into vision. gives rise to lots of physical moments and allows the reader to reach his own conclusions and use his own combinations.. cheer sis, if this makes absolutey no sense it is cos i am falling asleep as i write and I cant keep track of what the heck I am talking about. will go before I embarrass myself.. hugs sis, luv melslsd.. xxxxx hope you had a lovely day, if I am up again in your early morning hours, will try for a chat , but for now I need to get into bed before my head crashes onto my desktop... hugs again melxxxxxx
reply by the author on 27-Feb-2010
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Hey sis, an interesting little story this one is. rather unique in its thoughts, and yet, so common to have odd dreams such as this.. Placing yourslef in the story, feeling the rattles of the freight train, moments earlier than it comes into vision. gives rise to lots of physical moments and allows the reader to reach his own conclusions and use his own combinations.. cheer sis, if this makes absolutey no sense it is cos i am falling asleep as i write and I cant keep track of what the heck I am talking about. will go before I embarrass myself.. hugs sis, luv melslsd.. xxxxx hope you had a lovely day, if I am up again in your early morning hours, will try for a chat , but for now I need to get into bed before my head crashes onto my desktop... hugs again melxxxxxx
Comment Written 27-Feb-2010
reply by the author on 27-Feb-2010
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Sis,
This micro fiction doesn't leave you much room to do anything with. Thanks for reading and enjoying. Now go to bed!!~!!
Love ya lots, Sis
Comment from Sharesy
Awwwww, what a sweet story. The ending was totally unexpected. The bad dream about a childhood trauma, a comforting loving hubby. This was excellent. I like surprise endings, and this one qualifies. Good job.
reply by the author on 27-Feb-2010
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Awwwww, what a sweet story. The ending was totally unexpected. The bad dream about a childhood trauma, a comforting loving hubby. This was excellent. I like surprise endings, and this one qualifies. Good job.
Comment Written 27-Feb-2010
reply by the author on 27-Feb-2010
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Sharesy,
Yes, I like surprise endings too but it was difficult with so few words. Glad you enjoyed it!
smiles, Carol
