Comment from allborn66

Excellent

It is a very interesting story. This is the first chapter I have read. I found myself quickly into the plot, and I enjoyed your voice.
Barbara

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 Comment Written 17-Mar-2009

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reply by the author on 17-Mar-2009

Thank you. I know it is difficult to start reading in the middle but most of my chapters can stand alone since they are a accumulation of individual stories. Again, thank you for your interest and kind reviw.

Comment from marion

Excellent

Hi there Smurfhgirl

I felt compelled to read your biographical account of abuse although this is the only chapter I think I have read. It is well written albeit heart wrenching. Especially the relapse. It is also devastating to see the influences of Valerie's past affect the present so much. There is a lot be be answered for here.

A few small things:

temper," (suggest full stop)

"They are always the same," (missing word?) explained.

moment,(space)debating

and, and, in a (is that intentional?)

A well written account. Marion.


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 Comment Written 17-Mar-2009

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reply by the author on 17-Mar-2009

Thank you for you review and helpful suggestions. I sincerely appreciate them.