A Leaf on the Wind
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Comment from adewpearl
The opening scene when she realizes how beautiful her mother is and how she appreciates the beauty of the flowers she tends shows the speaker is remarkably able to see more about her mother than the resentment of her failure to protect her children from sexual abuse. It is truly moving to see this young woman able to move beyond her own resentment to recognize this woman has other dimensions. And then Mom agrees to sending her away, and that beautiful woman again becomes the hag who has failed her - that is MOST effective.
reply by the author on 27-Feb-2009
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The opening scene when she realizes how beautiful her mother is and how she appreciates the beauty of the flowers she tends shows the speaker is remarkably able to see more about her mother than the resentment of her failure to protect her children from sexual abuse. It is truly moving to see this young woman able to move beyond her own resentment to recognize this woman has other dimensions. And then Mom agrees to sending her away, and that beautiful woman again becomes the hag who has failed her - that is MOST effective.
Comment Written 27-Feb-2009
reply by the author on 27-Feb-2009
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Thank you for your kind review. Yes, my mother was a complex woman with many faces.
Comment from prodigal
Wow. You really are a natural story teller. The discription of the girl's mother along with the contrast makes for some really great reading. This is the stuff of professional writing. - Well done- Sam
reply by the author on 27-Feb-2009
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Wow. You really are a natural story teller. The discription of the girl's mother along with the contrast makes for some really great reading. This is the stuff of professional writing. - Well done- Sam
Comment Written 27-Feb-2009
reply by the author on 27-Feb-2009
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Thank you so very much for your kind words. Just the stuff a hard working writer loves to hear. Again, thank you.
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It's one of those things you can skip right over if you aren't paying attention, but life and art are both in the details.
Comment from Teri7
This is a very good and moving story you have penned. I think the editor messes with us at times. If I had known that I would not have taken away a star. Hugs, Teri
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reply by the author on 27-Feb-2009
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This is a very good and moving story you have penned. I think the editor messes with us at times. If I had known that I would not have taken away a star. Hugs, Teri
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Comment Written 27-Feb-2009
reply by the author on 27-Feb-2009
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Thanks, I fixed the errors...don't know where all the ?'s are coming from...I need a lesson on using their editor. Again, thanks for your help.
Comment from recentlyjoey
It's pretty good. Is this included in your book? Or is this just a short story? There's one little thing, in the line that starts: "I will never understand why people need God to tell... I think you meant "them" instead of then. That's it. Nicley done.
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It's pretty good. Is this included in your book? Or is this just a short story? There's one little thing, in the line that starts: "I will never understand why people need God to tell... I think you meant "them" instead of then. That's it. Nicley done.
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Comment Written 27-Feb-2009
reply by the author on 27-Feb-2009
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Yes it is part of the boor but I chose to make it a brief descripton of a period of time I spent living with relatives. As I said in the comments after, this could be a separate book in itself, but didn't want to spend time when the primary subject was the abuse and how it affected me. I caught the then...and chnged it to them. Thanks for the review.