CSP: A Collection of Poems
Viewing comments for Chapter 66 "I Soldier On"A collection of poetry
35 total reviews
Comment from steevie
there is pain beneath this dirt, This is an amazing line!
the imagery is very strong and tells as much about the poem, as does all the other lines put together
Wow!
excellent write, Six
take care
steve
reply by the author on 04-Feb-2009
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there is pain beneath this dirt, This is an amazing line!
the imagery is very strong and tells as much about the poem, as does all the other lines put together
Wow!
excellent write, Six
take care
steve
Comment Written 03-Feb-2009
reply by the author on 04-Feb-2009
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Steevie, what an awesome review. Really encouraging. So glad you liked this poem! Thank you so much for your great review. Much appreciated. Sue
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you are very welcome, Six
steve
Comment from jmyron
Good use of rhyme, meter and content. the story can be observered from both the military and the civilian viewpoint. Boots and a compass are useful in navigating life and love, as well as enemy territory.
reply by the author on 03-Feb-2009
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Good use of rhyme, meter and content. the story can be observered from both the military and the civilian viewpoint. Boots and a compass are useful in navigating life and love, as well as enemy territory.
Comment Written 03-Feb-2009
reply by the author on 03-Feb-2009
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Yes, we need to have some very comfortable boots and that compass. Thanks very much for your kind review and comments. With regards, Sue
Comment from adewpearl
Since you are not actually a soldier, I assume that when writing this you were using the metaphor of a soldier to describe "soldiering on" through life's worst struggles, but the metaphor is written in such great detail and so realistically, this could be printed in The Stars and Stripes military paper as a tribute to the courage of literal soldiers too - nicely written on either level!! Brooke
reply by the author on 03-Feb-2009
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Since you are not actually a soldier, I assume that when writing this you were using the metaphor of a soldier to describe "soldiering on" through life's worst struggles, but the metaphor is written in such great detail and so realistically, this could be printed in The Stars and Stripes military paper as a tribute to the courage of literal soldiers too - nicely written on either level!! Brooke
Comment Written 03-Feb-2009
reply by the author on 03-Feb-2009
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I know quite a bit about the military. Brothers were in the Marines and Army. But, also, I sure do love watching films like Platoon, Full Metal Jacket, Jarhead, etc - Yes, life does have its battles. Our "basic training" comes from our parents and the "worn-out boots" is life's experiences. And we have to soldier on. Thanks for your awesome compliments, Brooke. :-) Sue
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I am a huge fan of war films - they focus in on the heroism of soldiers fighting to save each other but usually at the same time point out the folly of war - again, bravo to your poem! Brooke
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Yes, all of that; the things they will do for each other and the folly of war.
I don't know why, but I've always been fascinated with the military. I went to visit a Marine recruiter when I was young. Ha! I was serious, but changed my mind. Like the whole discipline and camaraderie thing.
Love watching military documentaries and even the military channel. I'm also crazy about aircraft. From private to commercial to military. My 3 favorite aircraft ever are the 747's, the Concorde and the FA-18 fighters. I flew on the Concorde twice and would hop in an FA-18 in a heartbeat if I could! HA!
Saw a great documentary on the Nimitz-class aircraft carriers. Unbelievable.
Okay, I'm done. I think by my blathering on that you've got the point that I like a lot of things military! LOL!!!
Comment from RADIO
To soldier on in war time your poem describes
this well and the wisdom in these words can
desribe so many other variables in life.
For example, to soldier on through a serious
illness. Thank you
Please correct my rating mistake, it was most certainly
supposed to be 5 stars.
A poor excuse but my hands tremble terribly and I
do have difficulty with the mouse. That's the truth.
reply by the author on 03-Feb-2009
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To soldier on in war time your poem describes
this well and the wisdom in these words can
desribe so many other variables in life.
For example, to soldier on through a serious
illness. Thank you
Please correct my rating mistake, it was most certainly
supposed to be 5 stars.
A poor excuse but my hands tremble terribly and I
do have difficulty with the mouse. That's the truth.
Comment Written 03-Feb-2009
reply by the author on 03-Feb-2009
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I'm not sure if you understand the reviewing process. Whatever rating you give someone, you give a brief summary of what you gleaned from it. If you give them a 2 star, it means the work is in SERIOUS need of a lot of work. Since you gave me a 2 star rating, it is your responsibility to go through and point out where it has gone wrong and where improvements need to be made. You did comment that the poem describes well. Where did it fall down? With respect, Sue
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I thought I gave you the highest possible rating. Your poem was
certainly worthy of that. You are right, I don't fully understand
the procedure yet. I'm trying. I have stopped trying to submit any
poems and I am only trying to read others.
Your poem was excellence, I am just a simple rhymer.
Forgive me.
Radio
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I hope I didn't come across as being upset. I was only thinking that perhaps you were so new here that you didn't know the review process and wanted to make you aware of it. Thank you so much for responding with kindness.
You say you are "trying to stop posting". Did you get too addicted to the site like all of us? Ha! I will have to visit your work and give a review today.
With regards,
Sue
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I've written thousands of poems but most have never come
out of the closet. I'm strictly amateur.
I'm beginning to enjoy reviewing.
I think I have only three poems submitted.
I didn't quite get it when it said my poems didn't
qualify for viewing.
I drove poor tom crazy with questions.
I think at times the old radio in my head has loose tubes.
Have to log off now. Important doc app.
Radio
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I just reviewed one of your poems. Liked it very much!
Comment from fictionwriter
What a wonderful depiction of a soldier life, and life after being a soldier. As most of them suffer from ptsd. It is a hard thing to watch for us, but nothing like it is for them. Great job.
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What a wonderful depiction of a soldier life, and life after being a soldier. As most of them suffer from ptsd. It is a hard thing to watch for us, but nothing like it is for them. Great job.
Comment Written 03-Feb-2009
Comment from malachi1206
This was an excellent poem as a former soldier, policeman, clergyman I recognize their is a metaphor in this poem I think you' ve made this of universal meaning great for you:) that's what poetry should do malachi1206
reply by the author on 03-Feb-2009
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This was an excellent poem as a former soldier, policeman, clergyman I recognize their is a metaphor in this poem I think you' ve made this of universal meaning great for you:) that's what poetry should do malachi1206
Comment Written 03-Feb-2009
reply by the author on 03-Feb-2009
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malachai, WOW... haven't you had a full life! You have seen the many facets of the human condition in all three professions. The good, the bad and the ugly. I know you can empathize with the pains of many. Thank you for your very kind review. Much appreciated, Sue
Comment from Adri7enne
Not an easy choice of career, being a soldier. Must be pretty scary at times. You've succeeded in creating an atmosphere of dark acceptance of the inevitable. Your choice of artwork and colors of background complement the subject matter. Good work.
reply by the author on 03-Feb-2009
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Not an easy choice of career, being a soldier. Must be pretty scary at times. You've succeeded in creating an atmosphere of dark acceptance of the inevitable. Your choice of artwork and colors of background complement the subject matter. Good work.
Comment Written 03-Feb-2009
reply by the author on 03-Feb-2009
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Thank you very much for your kind review. Much appreciated, Sue
Comment from Perp Ihebom
This is a nice poem that speaks about the need for hopew and perseverance in everything we do in life. The soldier's life epitomizes such virtues as patience, faith and patriotism. kudos
reply by the author on 03-Feb-2009
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This is a nice poem that speaks about the need for hopew and perseverance in everything we do in life. The soldier's life epitomizes such virtues as patience, faith and patriotism. kudos
Comment Written 03-Feb-2009
reply by the author on 03-Feb-2009
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Perp, thank you for your great review and comments. Always appreciated, Sue
Comment from Joan E.
This surprising and effective taking on a persona. And, you accomplished it in rhyme, no less. My favorite line was the powerful "pain beneath this dirt". The title, picture and colors all are very good choices.
reply by the author on 03-Feb-2009
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This surprising and effective taking on a persona. And, you accomplished it in rhyme, no less. My favorite line was the powerful "pain beneath this dirt". The title, picture and colors all are very good choices.
Comment Written 02-Feb-2009
reply by the author on 03-Feb-2009
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Joan, thanks for saying which was your favorite line. And thank you for your very kind review. With warm regards, Sue
Comment from Minglement
This is a great poem with nice rhyme and rythm and well-expressing your thoughts. The battle could be anywhere on any level, with any 'enemy'. Well done!
reply by the author on 02-Feb-2009
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This is a great poem with nice rhyme and rythm and well-expressing your thoughts. The battle could be anywhere on any level, with any 'enemy'. Well done!
Comment Written 02-Feb-2009
reply by the author on 02-Feb-2009
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Yes, it can be anywhere and we must always be prepared. Obviously, my "basic training" came from my parents and my "worn out boots" are my experiences. Drawing off of those will get us through most anything. Thanks very much for your very kind review. Always, Sue
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You're welcome. Loved the implied word usage. Great job.