Genuflected Reflections
Free Verse: Little Punctuation55 total reviews
Comment from mtngalofnc
Hi Diane,
Your first line...It used to be so easy, reminds me of a child just beginning to learn the process of church and becoming grounded in belief. As Saturday's child ages the innocence of life slowly dissolves, and perhaps she pulls away from the churches earlier lessons. And as we age sometimes the sense of guilt becomes ingrained and we tend to ignore lessons of yesterday. The imagery and flow of your lines, the repetition, and style make for a clear picture. Enjoyed the read so much. Thank you for sharing. God bless and best wishes!
mtngalofnc
reply by the author on 14-Jan-2009
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Hi Diane,
Your first line...It used to be so easy, reminds me of a child just beginning to learn the process of church and becoming grounded in belief. As Saturday's child ages the innocence of life slowly dissolves, and perhaps she pulls away from the churches earlier lessons. And as we age sometimes the sense of guilt becomes ingrained and we tend to ignore lessons of yesterday. The imagery and flow of your lines, the repetition, and style make for a clear picture. Enjoyed the read so much. Thank you for sharing. God bless and best wishes!
mtngalofnc
Comment Written 14-Jan-2009
reply by the author on 14-Jan-2009
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Hello! So pleased you appreciate my offering and it holds meaning for you! Thank you, diane
Comment from minopavlic
Your expressionalism is brilliant,we all struggle with our own inner demons.Some are fortunate to escape the haunting nightmares,while others search deep within their souls for answers in hopes of escaping the madness.
Yes you definitely seem to have a natural flair for writing.From the beginning,I was captured within this story that commands a true sense of reality
reply by the author on 14-Jan-2009
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Your expressionalism is brilliant,we all struggle with our own inner demons.Some are fortunate to escape the haunting nightmares,while others search deep within their souls for answers in hopes of escaping the madness.
Yes you definitely seem to have a natural flair for writing.From the beginning,I was captured within this story that commands a true sense of reality
Comment Written 14-Jan-2009
reply by the author on 14-Jan-2009
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Hello! I am deeply honored and humbled by your exceptional rating of my work. Thank you so much. diane
Comment from FredCollingwood
I would have read it aloud, but American Idol is on and I had to be quiet. As I look back on it, it's good--I bow to you (get it?)
reply by the author on 14-Jan-2009
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I would have read it aloud, but American Idol is on and I had to be quiet. As I look back on it, it's good--I bow to you (get it?)
Comment Written 13-Jan-2009
reply by the author on 14-Jan-2009
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Hello Fred! Your review surely gave me a smile! Thank you! diane
Comment from tteach
Three Our Fathers
Two Hail Marys
One Glory Be
It used to be so easy
The repetition helps keep the reader focused. Yes, there is comfort in ritual. We perform without thought, knowing what is/was expected. Your poem takes me back to my young years, when I, too, confessed. My litany of sins in hand (literally), I nervously entered the booth.
Absolution brought temporary relief. You say that the sins multiplied, and soon the narrator gives us participating in the ritual.
The free verse format of this poem helps to convey the rush of feeling...forgiveness...relief...security.
well done
terry
reply by the author on 14-Jan-2009
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Three Our Fathers
Two Hail Marys
One Glory Be
It used to be so easy
The repetition helps keep the reader focused. Yes, there is comfort in ritual. We perform without thought, knowing what is/was expected. Your poem takes me back to my young years, when I, too, confessed. My litany of sins in hand (literally), I nervously entered the booth.
Absolution brought temporary relief. You say that the sins multiplied, and soon the narrator gives us participating in the ritual.
The free verse format of this poem helps to convey the rush of feeling...forgiveness...relief...security.
well done
terry
Comment Written 13-Jan-2009
reply by the author on 14-Jan-2009
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Hello terry! So I remember the day I wrote down all of my sins...only to be told by the priest to be sure to destroy the list...and I was so naive and young that I thought that my having written them all down constituted another sin! Good Grief! Thank you so much for your review! I am deeply honored and humbled. diane
Comment from JoAnna Lee
Yeppers!!! I'm not Catholic, but I can surely relate. Wonderfully written... and says so much. Love the end.
Thanks for sharing,
Donna
reply by the author on 14-Jan-2009
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Yeppers!!! I'm not Catholic, but I can surely relate. Wonderfully written... and says so much. Love the end.
Thanks for sharing,
Donna
Comment Written 13-Jan-2009
reply by the author on 14-Jan-2009
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Hello Donna! So pleased you enjoyed! thank you! diane
Comment from jshep
Wow, Mrs. KT. This is very profound. Wonderful structure and flow to this poem. All I could think at the end is you need not have the Mantilla, the prayer book, rosary or ask another man for forgiveness. You need only bow in prayer and ask directly for no man needs to intercede for us to speak with God. Your poem gives a lot for the reader to think about, as to why we sway from our faith and how do we get it back. Excellent poem. Joyce
reply by the author on 14-Jan-2009
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Wow, Mrs. KT. This is very profound. Wonderful structure and flow to this poem. All I could think at the end is you need not have the Mantilla, the prayer book, rosary or ask another man for forgiveness. You need only bow in prayer and ask directly for no man needs to intercede for us to speak with God. Your poem gives a lot for the reader to think about, as to why we sway from our faith and how do we get it back. Excellent poem. Joyce
Comment Written 13-Jan-2009
reply by the author on 14-Jan-2009
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Hello Joyce! Yes, it is quite a journey! Thank you so much for your insightful review. diane
Comment from fayesh
I thought this poem about the transformation of religious faith in the individual into the reality of living in the world was well done. The rituals are passe in light of the living in the here and now and as an adult.
reply by the author on 17-Jan-2009
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I thought this poem about the transformation of religious faith in the individual into the reality of living in the world was well done. The rituals are passe in light of the living in the here and now and as an adult.
Comment Written 13-Jan-2009
reply by the author on 17-Jan-2009
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Hello fayesh! Thank you so much for stopping by and your kind review... diane
Comment from Dawn of Tomorrow
I'm not Catholic but this poem really hits a chord. We lose our way in life sometimes and the One who forgives we don't allow along. Takes years to realize where we've gone and takes years more to find our way back and years more to forgive ourselves enough to ask the one who always forgives to forgive. This poem really made me think, very well penned.
reply by the author on 17-Jan-2009
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I'm not Catholic but this poem really hits a chord. We lose our way in life sometimes and the One who forgives we don't allow along. Takes years to realize where we've gone and takes years more to find our way back and years more to forgive ourselves enough to ask the one who always forgives to forgive. This poem really made me think, very well penned.
Comment Written 13-Jan-2009
reply by the author on 17-Jan-2009
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Hello! So pleased you stopped by and found this poem worthy. Thank you! diane
Comment from wazzo
The sad thing is of course from my point of view, there is nothing of that in the scriptures. These are just words that man has created. Peter never mentioned a rosary neither did anyone in scripture instruct us to say a hail Mary. But that is where I am coming from. Or does your poem confirm a faith that is to easy. I understand what you say.Blessings in Jesus name Albert.
reply by the author on 13-Jan-2009
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The sad thing is of course from my point of view, there is nothing of that in the scriptures. These are just words that man has created. Peter never mentioned a rosary neither did anyone in scripture instruct us to say a hail Mary. But that is where I am coming from. Or does your poem confirm a faith that is to easy. I understand what you say.Blessings in Jesus name Albert.
Comment Written 13-Jan-2009
reply by the author on 13-Jan-2009
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Hello Albert! Thank you for stopping by. The poem is referring to the Catholic practice/sacrament of Penance. That is where the rosary, prayer book, and the prayers originate - all part and parcel of Confession. Do stop by again! diane
Comment from jlsavell
Mrs.KT, this is quite an impressive free verse. Young and naive, one grows up in the traditionl ritualistic religions that are understood by developing minds to be just the way it is,no sweat.We never give it much thought as we go about the motions.It is not until we understand the depth and repercussions of the things we do,that we limit ourselve to our own sense of understanding and forgiveness. This is where life and our understanding of absolution gets difficult.Our conscience gets the better of us, or does it? We become apathetic toward the need of forgiveness, perhaps by convincing ourselves what is the use, or because our flesh is weak and it is futile to be perfect. ok well I did not mean to be so verbose..wonderful write..jlsavell
reply by the author on 14-Jan-2009
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Mrs.KT, this is quite an impressive free verse. Young and naive, one grows up in the traditionl ritualistic religions that are understood by developing minds to be just the way it is,no sweat.We never give it much thought as we go about the motions.It is not until we understand the depth and repercussions of the things we do,that we limit ourselve to our own sense of understanding and forgiveness. This is where life and our understanding of absolution gets difficult.Our conscience gets the better of us, or does it? We become apathetic toward the need of forgiveness, perhaps by convincing ourselves what is the use, or because our flesh is weak and it is futile to be perfect. ok well I did not mean to be so verbose..wonderful write..jlsavell
Comment Written 13-Jan-2009
reply by the author on 14-Jan-2009
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Hello! What a wonderful well-written synopsis! Thank you so much. I am pleased that you appreciate my offering. diane