Comment from Domino

Excellent

Hi, Sue
I realise you've rightly avoided capitals, though you haven't classified as haiku. Many, not all, consider haiku should have a nature theme, and if a human theme is included (hinted at here with the 'hot iron') then it's senryu. Also all the proper nouns look outa place in small case and it's best ta generally avoid em.
Anyway, as you haven't classified this, I can't deduct stars. Best wishes, Ray xx

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 Comment Written 11-Jan-2009

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reply by the author on 11-Jan-2009

Yeah, just a bit of fun. I'm always teasing Reggie to write a haiku! HA! Thought I'd make it "western" for him. I did just make note under author's notes that it probably isn't a haiku/senryu. Thanks much for your fiver, though. Now, I'm going to talk you into writing a 'naani'. $2 will buy you a ticket into my new contest. I know how much you love unmetered, non-rhyming poems. :-)) Sue

reply by Domino on 11-Jan-2009

Who's 'Regie'?
I just entered your contest, but does it have ta be unrhymed and un-metered? I'll go take another look. Ray xx

reply by the author on 11-Jan-2009

Having some jest with you. A lot of naani's don't rhyme. But you most certainly can make it rhyme and have meter!

Reggie is rmdelta. The book writer who is now writing "Texas Ranger". I just wrote something "western" for him.

reply by the author on 11-Jan-2009

I'm going to add a comment on that page that it can be either rhymed/unrhymed and metered/unmetered. Thanks, Ray

reply by Domino on 11-Jan-2009

I think you'll have ta start a 'thread', Sue, as once anyone has entered the rules can't be changed. Mind you, the rules DON'T say it can't be.
Ray xx

reply by Domino on 11-Jan-2009

Oh, him. He's a top rated reviewer who avoids my stuff like the plague.
He either doesn't like, or doesn't rate me. Mind you, I can't complain cos I never review any of his prose.
Perhaps he only reviews prose? LMAO!xx

reply by the author on 11-Jan-2009

Yes, that's true. Some do choose to rhyme. God knows yours will!!!

Comment from Narina Menderlin

Excellent

wow. I really reallly liked this poem. I liked how it was short yet sweet. I loved the format and presentation. Great word choice! well done!

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 Comment Written 11-Jan-2009