Murder One
Jury Duty - Is she telling the truth?78 total reviews
Comment from Lois Delaney
I think you found your genre, Janilou. Well done. The ending was real good, I thought. You had me hook, line and sinker. Cliche. Yes, but it's the facts.
You are such a good writer. I think you will do real well with this one. A twist is always a good turn in a story and you certainly provide that. Best wishes in the contest. I had fun reading this and waited for the 'going out in a blaze'.
reply by the author on 21-Oct-2008
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I think you found your genre, Janilou. Well done. The ending was real good, I thought. You had me hook, line and sinker. Cliche. Yes, but it's the facts.
You are such a good writer. I think you will do real well with this one. A twist is always a good turn in a story and you certainly provide that. Best wishes in the contest. I had fun reading this and waited for the 'going out in a blaze'.
Comment Written 18-Sep-2008
reply by the author on 21-Oct-2008
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Thank you so much for the review. I really appreciate it. I am trying to catch up on almost 400 reviews. I have tried to catch up but I'm fighting a losing battle! Please forgive me the carbon-copy response. If you suggested improvements, I have considered them. If you found nits, I have corrected them. Some of you wonderful people will be receiving more than one of these, because you review my work so often. You guys bless my heart.
Hugs,
Jan
Comment from Moira's Amethyst
I do believe I've told you this already but in case I haven't...you have a talent with this stuff. I enjoyed this as much as the last I've read by you. The flow, imagery and every other aspect fell into place wonderfully and didn't once reveal any flaw. I thank you for sharing. Please, take care.
Poetry's Protege
reply by the author on 21-Oct-2008
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I do believe I've told you this already but in case I haven't...you have a talent with this stuff. I enjoyed this as much as the last I've read by you. The flow, imagery and every other aspect fell into place wonderfully and didn't once reveal any flaw. I thank you for sharing. Please, take care.
Poetry's Protege
Comment Written 18-Sep-2008
reply by the author on 21-Oct-2008
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Thank you so much for the review. I really appreciate it. I am trying to catch up on almost 400 reviews. I have tried to catch up but I'm fighting a losing battle! Please forgive me the carbon-copy response. If you suggested improvements, I have considered them. If you found nits, I have corrected them. Some of you wonderful people will be receiving more than one of these, because you review my work so often. You guys bless my heart.
Hugs,
Jan
Comment from barbara.wilkey
As I read the story, I could tell you enjoyed writing it. I enjoyed reading it. Even though it was about it murder trial, it was cute and to the point. Your characters were well developed, as was the descriptions. Once in a while the present tense through me. I used to reading everything in past tense.
reply by the author on 21-Oct-2008
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As I read the story, I could tell you enjoyed writing it. I enjoyed reading it. Even though it was about it murder trial, it was cute and to the point. Your characters were well developed, as was the descriptions. Once in a while the present tense through me. I used to reading everything in past tense.
Comment Written 18-Sep-2008
reply by the author on 21-Oct-2008
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Thank you so much for the review. I really appreciate it. I am trying to catch up on almost 400 reviews. I have tried to catch up but I'm fighting a losing battle! Please forgive me the carbon-copy response. If you suggested improvements, I have considered them. If you found nits, I have corrected them. Some of you wonderful people will be receiving more than one of these, because you review my work so often. You guys bless my heart.
Hugs,
Jan
Comment from wazzo
Wow that was a very complexed story. Not quite that easy to follow.The ending was very well thought out. I am sure it would make good viewing should some producer run with the idea.Albert
reply by the author on 21-Oct-2008
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Wow that was a very complexed story. Not quite that easy to follow.The ending was very well thought out. I am sure it would make good viewing should some producer run with the idea.Albert
Comment Written 18-Sep-2008
reply by the author on 21-Oct-2008
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Thank you so much for the review. I really appreciate it. I am trying to catch up on almost 400 reviews. I have tried to catch up but I'm fighting a losing battle! Please forgive me the carbon-copy response. If you suggested improvements, I have considered them. If you found nits, I have corrected them. Some of you wonderful people will be receiving more than one of these, because you review my work so often. You guys bless my heart.
Hugs,
Jan
Comment from Margaret Snowdon
It's a pleasure to read such
well presented work, with the
correct spelling and punctuation.
A story well told, easy to follow,
holding the interest throughout.
Good luck with the contest.
Regards
Margaret.
reply by the author on 21-Oct-2008
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It's a pleasure to read such
well presented work, with the
correct spelling and punctuation.
A story well told, easy to follow,
holding the interest throughout.
Good luck with the contest.
Regards
Margaret.
Comment Written 18-Sep-2008
reply by the author on 21-Oct-2008
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Thank you so much for the review. I really appreciate it. I am trying to catch up on almost 400 reviews. I have tried to catch up but I'm fighting a losing battle! Please forgive me the carbon-copy response. If you suggested improvements, I have considered them. If you found nits, I have corrected them. Some of you wonderful people will be receiving more than one of these, because you review my work so often. You guys bless my heart.
Hugs,
Jan
Comment from Stephy Jemmisparks
hey, the plastic surgery rocks! LOL< i wish i could have my face done to look like princess Diana or something, maybe,I could come out a twin of a rich girl -lost at birth!!!I love your story.
reply by the author on 21-Oct-2008
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hey, the plastic surgery rocks! LOL< i wish i could have my face done to look like princess Diana or something, maybe,I could come out a twin of a rich girl -lost at birth!!!I love your story.
Comment Written 17-Sep-2008
reply by the author on 21-Oct-2008
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Thank you so much for the review. I really appreciate it. I am trying to catch up on almost 400 reviews. I have tried to catch up but I'm fighting a losing battle! Please forgive me the carbon-copy response. If you suggested improvements, I have considered them. If you found nits, I have corrected them. Some of you wonderful people will be receiving more than one of these, because you review my work so often. You guys bless my heart.
Hugs,
Jan
Comment from ulster3
Hi. Good thinking and well managed in such a short. I feel that later you could expand this into a Novella if you are interested. There are openings here for further content for sure. Good luck in the contest and thanks for a good read. Rebecca
reply by the author on 21-Oct-2008
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Hi. Good thinking and well managed in such a short. I feel that later you could expand this into a Novella if you are interested. There are openings here for further content for sure. Good luck in the contest and thanks for a good read. Rebecca
Comment Written 17-Sep-2008
reply by the author on 21-Oct-2008
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Thank you so much for the review. I really appreciate it. I am trying to catch up on almost 400 reviews. I have tried to catch up but I'm fighting a losing battle! Please forgive me the carbon-copy response. If you suggested improvements, I have considered them. If you found nits, I have corrected them. Some of you wonderful people will be receiving more than one of these, because you review my work so often. You guys bless my heart.
Hugs,
Jan
Comment from Patrick G Cox
Brilliant story. It held my attention all the way through and I think the final twist in the tale (Not a typo!) is a great trick. You do seem to specialise in the revenge of the wronged. Very well done.
reply by the author on 17-Sep-2008
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Brilliant story. It held my attention all the way through and I think the final twist in the tale (Not a typo!) is a great trick. You do seem to specialise in the revenge of the wronged. Very well done.
Comment Written 17-Sep-2008
reply by the author on 17-Sep-2008
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LOL Yes, I guess I do.
Thank you for the great review. :-)
Jan
Comment from amadan01
I did enjoy it. I think you did a very good job within the contest requirements. I was entertained by the twin and the witness protection program aspects. Very good job with the dialog as well.
reply by the author on 17-Sep-2008
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I did enjoy it. I think you did a very good job within the contest requirements. I was entertained by the twin and the witness protection program aspects. Very good job with the dialog as well.
Comment Written 17-Sep-2008
reply by the author on 17-Sep-2008
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Thank you so much! :-)
Jan
Comment from Paradox Tremors
These prompts are getting better and better; and scarier by each read. A cold, heartless woman out for revenge, Well written and thought out. Best of luck in the contest.
reply by the author on 17-Sep-2008
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These prompts are getting better and better; and scarier by each read. A cold, heartless woman out for revenge, Well written and thought out. Best of luck in the contest.
Comment Written 17-Sep-2008
reply by the author on 17-Sep-2008
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Thanks! :-)
Jan