Reflections For The New Day
Viewing comments for Chapter 45 "The Key To Love"31 total reviews
Comment from GENTLE STORM
Wow, great message throughout your words. This is one of those poems that help remind us of our part, ya know? At times we forget the things we knew before. But Love is always buried deep inside us. I think Grandfather(God, higher power, etc. whatever you choose to recognize him as)provided us with all we need the day we were born, we just need to search within ourselves at times. Anyways......This great write had good rhyme scheme and flowed well. Keep up the good work........stormy
oh and the pic fit your theme perfectly
reply by the author on 25-Jan-2008
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Wow, great message throughout your words. This is one of those poems that help remind us of our part, ya know? At times we forget the things we knew before. But Love is always buried deep inside us. I think Grandfather(God, higher power, etc. whatever you choose to recognize him as)provided us with all we need the day we were born, we just need to search within ourselves at times. Anyways......This great write had good rhyme scheme and flowed well. Keep up the good work........stormy
oh and the pic fit your theme perfectly
Comment Written 25-Jan-2008
reply by the author on 25-Jan-2008
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Hi Stormy. Good to hear from you.
Comment from Martie
Dear Jewell
As always, you leave behind a lovely message with your poetry. This one is so very true, yet for many it is the hardest thing to do in life. Thanks for this.
reply by the author on 25-Jan-2008
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Dear Jewell
As always, you leave behind a lovely message with your poetry. This one is so very true, yet for many it is the hardest thing to do in life. Thanks for this.
Comment Written 25-Jan-2008
reply by the author on 25-Jan-2008
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Hey Martie! Have missed you! Thanks for this fab review.
Comment from authorauthor
that's such a powerful last line...and I got vivid visuals of the hand that holds the key...it made me shiver...with anticipation...a great cadence in your rythme...a lovely sing song glimpse
reply by the author on 25-Jan-2008
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that's such a powerful last line...and I got vivid visuals of the hand that holds the key...it made me shiver...with anticipation...a great cadence in your rythme...a lovely sing song glimpse
Comment Written 25-Jan-2008
reply by the author on 25-Jan-2008
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Ahhh, I love visuals! Glad it brought that out it you.
Comment from Zenbud
Absolutely - that is a truth not many find, my dear. Lovely rhyming scheme that was almost flawless. Just a lovely read. zb
reply by the author on 25-Jan-2008
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Absolutely - that is a truth not many find, my dear. Lovely rhyming scheme that was almost flawless. Just a lovely read. zb
Comment Written 25-Jan-2008
reply by the author on 25-Jan-2008
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Hey girl. Good to see you back!
Comment from TrueBeliever
Oh wow, I wish I had a 6 to give this! Visionay, wow this is totally deep and profound. To know and express this is as to share His love with all. Well written, displayed and artfully and articulately expressed in an original way. Beautiful. Many blessings my friend, Ondra
reply by the author on 25-Jan-2008
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Oh wow, I wish I had a 6 to give this! Visionay, wow this is totally deep and profound. To know and express this is as to share His love with all. Well written, displayed and artfully and articulately expressed in an original way. Beautiful. Many blessings my friend, Ondra
Comment Written 25-Jan-2008
reply by the author on 25-Jan-2008
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Hey Ondra. Where you been, girl? Thanks for this!
Comment from HalfHoff
I STILL wanna know how in the hell you got soooo damn smart soooo quick ... jeepers gal ... your wisdom is beyond ALL years, This in another extremely inspirational and just plain fugging great write. XO Lea
reply by the author on 25-Jan-2008
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I STILL wanna know how in the hell you got soooo damn smart soooo quick ... jeepers gal ... your wisdom is beyond ALL years, This in another extremely inspirational and just plain fugging great write. XO Lea
Comment Written 25-Jan-2008
reply by the author on 25-Jan-2008
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Hey gir, you're so cute. Life is hard, refining ain't easy and if I do'nt learn from it, I'd be a fool. I'd rather use the lessons and share the wisdom than sit and wallow in self pity for the shit I've been through! lol
Comment from boberto
Hi there VisionaryPoet777. The verse conveys a message ---maybe of self healing--at least an attempt. It flows fairly well except occasionally-I'll show. Also, the use of a couple words, in my opinion, seemed out of place.
Before my eyes I saw a door
Opened wide above the shore.
The door could open any place. Logically, to me, I have a problem with "shore". Did you use it because of thr rhyme?
A gilded key was in my hand,
As if I'd opened heavens grand,
I'm Italian, I'm slow. What''s a "heavens grand?"
"It's not from man you'll find release,
Love will come when you find peace."
I find this a little bumpy unless I take a big plause after "release." Maybe a period will help.
Just suggestions
boberto
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Hi there VisionaryPoet777. The verse conveys a message ---maybe of self healing--at least an attempt. It flows fairly well except occasionally-I'll show. Also, the use of a couple words, in my opinion, seemed out of place.
Before my eyes I saw a door
Opened wide above the shore.
The door could open any place. Logically, to me, I have a problem with "shore". Did you use it because of thr rhyme?
A gilded key was in my hand,
As if I'd opened heavens grand,
I'm Italian, I'm slow. What''s a "heavens grand?"
"It's not from man you'll find release,
Love will come when you find peace."
I find this a little bumpy unless I take a big plause after "release." Maybe a period will help.
Just suggestions
boberto
Comment Written 25-Jan-2008
Comment from GUNNER
VisionaryPoet,
This is an excellent poem and possess a strong message to have peace with yourself and to love yourself first...because if you don't love yourself you cannot truly love others. Thank you for the wonderful poem. GUNNER
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VisionaryPoet,
This is an excellent poem and possess a strong message to have peace with yourself and to love yourself first...because if you don't love yourself you cannot truly love others. Thank you for the wonderful poem. GUNNER
Comment Written 24-Jan-2008
Comment from Artasylum
this is a beautifully lusious piece...the flow was perfect pitch and the presentation was also perfect...thaqnks so much for sharing this beautiful poem with the rest of us i really like your style. thanks. diana
reply by the author on 24-Jan-2008
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this is a beautifully lusious piece...the flow was perfect pitch and the presentation was also perfect...thaqnks so much for sharing this beautiful poem with the rest of us i really like your style. thanks. diana
Comment Written 24-Jan-2008
reply by the author on 24-Jan-2008
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Hey Diana. thank you for this lovely review. I'm happy that you liked it as much as you did. I love your work as well
Comment from Diny
wow THIS WAS SO DEEP- THE IMAGERY WAS FANTASTRIC AND THE RYHME FLOW ANND METER ---- YES METER--- WAS FINE TUNED LIKE A PRO- YOU HAVE IMPROVED SO MUCH DEAR ONE- i JUST LOVE YOUR SPIRITUAL AND EMOTIONAL INSIGHTS YOU CHOOSE TO SHARE WITH US AND THANK YOU AGAIN FOR YOUR FINE WORDS AND PRECIOUS FRIENDSHIP - HUGS dI
reply by the author on 24-Jan-2008
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wow THIS WAS SO DEEP- THE IMAGERY WAS FANTASTRIC AND THE RYHME FLOW ANND METER ---- YES METER--- WAS FINE TUNED LIKE A PRO- YOU HAVE IMPROVED SO MUCH DEAR ONE- i JUST LOVE YOUR SPIRITUAL AND EMOTIONAL INSIGHTS YOU CHOOSE TO SHARE WITH US AND THANK YOU AGAIN FOR YOUR FINE WORDS AND PRECIOUS FRIENDSHIP - HUGS dI
Comment Written 24-Jan-2008
reply by the author on 24-Jan-2008
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Heya DINY! Thanks girl for all those caps and expressions. I sure like it when you stop in with your lovely words. I appreciate you.
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Well it would help if I didn't have to watch my hands and found out later My caps were locked- haha sorry bout that-Di