How This Critter Crits
Viewing comments for Chapter 8 "Three More Illusion Crashers"GROWTH? ADULATION? HURRY -- CHOOSE!
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Comment from sandragee
I agree that the emphasis should be more on the showing than the telling in any story. I feel cheated when a writer takes the shortcut of going from point A to point B. This a well-written, informative piece that keeps the interest of even the most jaded reader. Good job!
reply by the author on 30-May-2015
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I agree that the emphasis should be more on the showing than the telling in any story. I feel cheated when a writer takes the shortcut of going from point A to point B. This a well-written, informative piece that keeps the interest of even the most jaded reader. Good job!
Comment Written 29-May-2015
reply by the author on 30-May-2015
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Thank you, Sandra. You are very kind and generous, in words and rating.
Comment from sibhus
Wow, Jay, these were some really great examples. And best of all they make a lot of sense. I t seems that some of my favorite authors are some what guilty of this as well, but I suppose when they crank out a book a year, they have to take a few short-cuts. A well written piece that is very informative, and something I intend to keep in mind. Thanks for sharing your insights.
reply by the author on 29-May-2015
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Wow, Jay, these were some really great examples. And best of all they make a lot of sense. I t seems that some of my favorite authors are some what guilty of this as well, but I suppose when they crank out a book a year, they have to take a few short-cuts. A well written piece that is very informative, and something I intend to keep in mind. Thanks for sharing your insights.
Comment Written 29-May-2015
reply by the author on 29-May-2015
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Thank you for the high praise, Sibhus. I'm glad you enjoyed it.
Comment from Chris Tee
Jay another rather informative chapter and so lot to learn from your pen my friend. I find every chapter extremely helpful and educational. Well done indeed with this excellent work.
reply by the author on 29-May-2015
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Jay another rather informative chapter and so lot to learn from your pen my friend. I find every chapter extremely helpful and educational. Well done indeed with this excellent work.
Comment Written 29-May-2015
reply by the author on 29-May-2015
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Much appreciated, Chris. You've been along for the long haul. I am so grateful.
Comment from petalangela
I have graded five stars because I know if I had read this through it would have deserved six. I am no longer able to absorb the treasures of these posts the are proving to much for my short memory and short concentration span but I do know what I have been able to read is very helpful. Petal
reply by the author on 29-May-2015
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I have graded five stars because I know if I had read this through it would have deserved six. I am no longer able to absorb the treasures of these posts the are proving to much for my short memory and short concentration span but I do know what I have been able to read is very helpful. Petal
Comment Written 29-May-2015
reply by the author on 29-May-2015
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Thank you, Petal, for trying it on for size, anyway. You are good people!
Comment from Sis Cat
Excellent. As always, I imbibe your hard-earned wisdom and knowledge to apply to my own writing. Your list of illusion crashers is valuable and well thought out and argued with engaging examples of weak writing. I always learn a lot by reading this series of essays. Thank you for informing and entertaining.
reply by the author on 29-May-2015
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Excellent. As always, I imbibe your hard-earned wisdom and knowledge to apply to my own writing. Your list of illusion crashers is valuable and well thought out and argued with engaging examples of weak writing. I always learn a lot by reading this series of essays. Thank you for informing and entertaining.
Comment Written 28-May-2015
reply by the author on 29-May-2015
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Much obliged, Andre. I'm so gratified you are finding this helpful.
Comment from kriver
Hi Jay,
This is such an excellent series.
I am really learning a lot of things
that I had no idea were occurring or recognized.
The narration is well done
and holds the readers interest well.
Very good examples and explanations.
One thing you might define what a protagonist and antagonist are. There is an assumption on the site that everyone knows what they are. But that really isn't true. Some very new writers to the site have no clue as to what they are.
reply by the author on 29-May-2015
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Hi Jay,
This is such an excellent series.
I am really learning a lot of things
that I had no idea were occurring or recognized.
The narration is well done
and holds the readers interest well.
Very good examples and explanations.
One thing you might define what a protagonist and antagonist are. There is an assumption on the site that everyone knows what they are. But that really isn't true. Some very new writers to the site have no clue as to what they are.
Comment Written 28-May-2015
reply by the author on 29-May-2015
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I will try to clear that up in a later post. I had no idea. Thank you for that heads up, and, as usual, for coming back for more.
Comment from Walu Feral
G'day Jay, we must have just been reviewing each others work at the same time because I just got your review, our stars collided LOL. This is another great essay/story mate. I hate it when the dialogue is interupted and then it goes from characterisation to narrative. I really enjoyed this Sir, not a word out of place. Cheers Fez
reply by the author on 29-May-2015
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G'day Jay, we must have just been reviewing each others work at the same time because I just got your review, our stars collided LOL. This is another great essay/story mate. I hate it when the dialogue is interupted and then it goes from characterisation to narrative. I really enjoyed this Sir, not a word out of place. Cheers Fez
Comment Written 28-May-2015
reply by the author on 29-May-2015
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Thank you so much, Fez. That's funny--our stars collided! I hope you know how much I appreciate your presence.
Comment from Marvin Calloway
Dare I attempt to be a critter for your writing?
You have demonstrated in-depth knowledge of the three pronged subject of this piece and have explained each exceedingly well. The examples are clear and easy to follow. In my case, employing them will be difficult, but you've given all of us much for which to strive.
Marv
reply by the author on 28-May-2015
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Dare I attempt to be a critter for your writing?
You have demonstrated in-depth knowledge of the three pronged subject of this piece and have explained each exceedingly well. The examples are clear and easy to follow. In my case, employing them will be difficult, but you've given all of us much for which to strive.
Marv
Comment Written 28-May-2015
reply by the author on 28-May-2015
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Thank you, Marv, on all levels.
Comment from mfowler
I'm about to start an adult education class: Show, not tell 101. It seems you may have give given me 101, 102 and 103.
In fact, I think the advice on show in this chapter will be of great help in avoiding those set ups which are all too obvious when you read carefully.
Your use of the Mary, Mark story (and it wasn't me, Jay, just some figment of your playful mind) was very helpful in illustrating your suggestions. I liked the Robert Frost ending. Very slick.
Entertaining, informative and well done as usual.
reply by the author on 28-May-2015
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I'm about to start an adult education class: Show, not tell 101. It seems you may have give given me 101, 102 and 103.
In fact, I think the advice on show in this chapter will be of great help in avoiding those set ups which are all too obvious when you read carefully.
Your use of the Mary, Mark story (and it wasn't me, Jay, just some figment of your playful mind) was very helpful in illustrating your suggestions. I liked the Robert Frost ending. Very slick.
Entertaining, informative and well done as usual.
Comment Written 28-May-2015
reply by the author on 28-May-2015
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Hahaha! So you're not gonna make me go back and change it to Mary and Marvin Fowler, are you? Good luck with your class!
Comment from Debbie Noland
I would like to enlarge that next-to-last paragraph, print it out, and paper my walls with it. "Show, don't tell" has never been so capably and effectively expressed as it is there.
I like the way you are biting off just the right chunk of writing pedagogy for readers to consider in a single sitting/lesson. Your examples are clear and interesting, enabling us to see the differences among the pitfalls you describe.
reply by the author on 28-May-2015
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I would like to enlarge that next-to-last paragraph, print it out, and paper my walls with it. "Show, don't tell" has never been so capably and effectively expressed as it is there.
I like the way you are biting off just the right chunk of writing pedagogy for readers to consider in a single sitting/lesson. Your examples are clear and interesting, enabling us to see the differences among the pitfalls you describe.
Comment Written 28-May-2015
reply by the author on 28-May-2015
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Thank you Debbie, for your encouragement. You've made my day!