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Romance on the Beach

a dodoitsu poem

54 total reviews 
Comment from Lana Marie
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This is very beautiful and peaceful. It tells of a gentle love enjoying the quietness of the beach with the ocean waves. When I was younger I had the desire to make love on the beach. Is it too late now that I'm older? and what if someone walked by... eeek.
Hopefully no one else will read my secret desire on your reviews lol

 Comment Written 05-Feb-2025

reply by the author on 05-Feb-2025
    Hahaha, hi Lana. I am not laughing at you, but instead with you. Oh, how I long to lie on a beach with a lover who is so romantic. So let's hope together that nobody reads our reviews. Hahahaha. Yes, eeek, wouldn't that be embarrassing? Y'know when I was younger we were in the boat, on the trampoline, yes, wherever we wanted. LOL!! Sorry, didn't mean to get so personal about myself, but amazing how things change when you grow up.

    Thanks for the fun review, silly girl. Lotsa love, Debi
reply by Lana Marie on 06-Feb-2025
    Yes, mine was in Cancun around some rocks heeeheee
Comment from Pearl Edwards
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This is a lovely 'Romance on the beach' dodoitsu poem Debi. I loved the final line about swimming in the stars, combining the beach and the sky in one beautiful interlude. Nicely done, Debi.
Cheers
Valda

 Comment Written 05-Feb-2025

reply by the author on 06-Feb-2025
    Awe, Valda, I thank you. I am glad you like that last line. It seemed to match the criteria of ending it a little comical. And I appreciate your kind words for my romantic beach story. It was a fun write for Gypsy's club. I thank you again, my dear friend. Love, Debi
Comment from jake cosmos aller
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loved this doditsu. Nice to see you experimenting with other forms most of your work seems to be either formal verse or modified free verse. I liked the photo images where did you find it?

 Comment Written 05-Feb-2025

reply by the author on 05-Feb-2025
    Hi Jake, I sometimes forget to write where I find my picture. I almost always find it at Pinterest. Most like that last line. It seemed to match the criteria of ending it a little comical. And I appreciate your kind words for my romantic beach story. It was a fun write for Gypsy's club. I thank you again, my dear friend. Love, Debi
Comment from tempeste
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Ciao,

I love the closing line :

Let's swim in the stars.

It's like when the full moon glitters like gems or stars on the surface of the water .

It's certainly a romantic setting .. a magical moment to be remembered one day by the two lovers.




 Comment Written 05-Feb-2025

reply by the author on 05-Feb-2025
    Hi Tempeste, I am glad you like that last line. It seemed to match the criteria of ending it a little comical. And I appreciate your kind words for my romantic beach story. It was a fun write for Gypsy's club. I thank you again, my dear friend. Love, Debi
Comment from artisart4u
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This is nice about two people under the stars.
You have the right amount of syllables for each line.
Your picture, font, and colors are nice and congratulations on your wins.
Good luck with your poem.

 Comment Written 05-Feb-2025

reply by the author on 05-Feb-2025
    Hi there Artura, what a lovely name you have. And what a lovely review this is. I appreciate your kind words for my romantic beach story. It was a fun write for Gypsy's club. I thank you again, my dear friend. Love, Debi
Comment from Harry Craft
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Way above my head as a rookie lol! But I love the photo that goes with the poem. It adds so much. The poem is good too, but I have never seen that format before. Keep up the great work Debi!

 Comment Written 05-Feb-2025

reply by the author on 05-Feb-2025
    Hi Harry, I appreciate your kind words for my romantic beach story. It was a fun write for Gypsy's club. I thank you again, my dear friend. Love, Debi
reply by Harry Craft on 06-Feb-2025
    You are so welcome Debi!
Comment from Brenda Strauser
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Debi, I love this poem and picture. Your words capture the beautiful picture so well. I love the words you used. I never realized at how many different poems there are. Great job. Love, Brenda

 Comment Written 05-Feb-2025

reply by the author on 05-Feb-2025
    Hi Brenda, so many liked that last line. It seemed to match the criteria of ending it a little comical. And I appreciate your kind words for my romantic beach story. It was a fun write for Gypsy's club. Thanks for the six stars!!
    I thank you again, my dear friend. Love, Debi
Comment from nomi338
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Wow! You threw me for a loop with this one. This is such a departure from your usual, I had to recheck the author name to make sure I had not misread the name. You never fail to surprise me, driving home the reminder, never make the mistake of under estimating the depths of anyone you meet or come to know. There is always a surprise or two awaiting you discovery.
2-4-6-8, who do I appreciate?
My Baby Sis! My Baby Sis! My Baby Sis!!!!! Yay!!!!

 Comment Written 05-Feb-2025

reply by the author on 05-Feb-2025
    Hi sweetie, so many liked that last line. It seemed to match the criteria of ending it a little comical. And I appreciate your kind words for my romantic beach story. It was a fun write for Gypsy's club. I thank you again, my dear friend. And I appreciate the cheer you gave me. Love, Debi
Comment from EeanBlack
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Ohhhh, he's so lucky sis. With all you're going through, you still write a beauty like this. Mmmhmmm lol. When I lived in San Diego, the beach was everything. Holding your partner on a quiet, starlit evening is priceless.

 Comment Written 05-Feb-2025

reply by the author on 05-Feb-2025
    Eean, so many like that last line. It seemed to match the criteria of ending it a little comical. And I appreciate your kind words for my romantic beach story. It was a fun write for Gypsy's club. I thank you again, my dear friend. Love, Debi
reply by EeanBlack on 06-Feb-2025
    Always.
Comment from lyenochka
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Oh, I like it! You are learning so much from being in this club. This reminds me of the way Gypsy changes the perspective in her poems from looking up at the stars to "swimming in the stars". Great job!

 Comment Written 05-Feb-2025

reply by the author on 05-Feb-2025
    Dearest Helen, I am thrilled that you liked this one. I am glad you like that last line. It seemed to match the criteria of ending it a little comical. And I appreciate your kind words for my romantic beach story. It was a fun write for Gypsy's club. I thank you again, my dear friend. Love, Debi