Guns and war
A poem18 total reviews
Comment from Jesse James Doty
I hear what you are saying but I found a typo in verse three, fourth line, where it says demand the wrath there is an extra letter that shouldn't be there.
Otherwise, the point is very clear you do not like guns and war and I agree neither do I. Jesus wouldn't want children to be shot in the playground or any other place in school.
Thanks for bringing up this important issue.
Jesse
reply by the author on 26-Dec-2024
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I hear what you are saying but I found a typo in verse three, fourth line, where it says demand the wrath there is an extra letter that shouldn't be there.
Otherwise, the point is very clear you do not like guns and war and I agree neither do I. Jesus wouldn't want children to be shot in the playground or any other place in school.
Thanks for bringing up this important issue.
Jesse
Comment Written 25-Dec-2024
reply by the author on 26-Dec-2024
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Thanks Jake for these fantastic comments and great review, blessings Roy
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You are welcome, Roy.
My name is Jesse, not Jake.
Jesse
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Sorry Jesse
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No worries.
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Thank you
Comment from jim vecchio
As a child in the fifties, we never really thought of war and killings. Then cme the sixties and the threat of atomic warfare. Today, everyone knows the imminent danger of war.
Despite all this, God has been good to us and I wish you a very Merry Christmas.
reply by the author on 26-Dec-2024
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As a child in the fifties, we never really thought of war and killings. Then cme the sixties and the threat of atomic warfare. Today, everyone knows the imminent danger of war.
Despite all this, God has been good to us and I wish you a very Merry Christmas.
Comment Written 25-Dec-2024
reply by the author on 26-Dec-2024
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Thanks Jim, for these fantastic comments and great review, blessings Roy
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It is my pleasure to read your works.
Comment from Mufasa
Nicely done. Got the message across without becoming preachy. Keep in mind that our gun laws are, indeed, strict. They simply need to be enforced. Although the issue of mental health is far more difficult to track, and act upon, it is far more dangerous than the estimated 83 million citizens that owned guns in 2023 that caused no harm. If a criminal, or potential criminal wants a gun - they will get one, leaving the rest of us unarmed and at their mercy. No thanks.
"Lest you're impaled by fate's sharp gourd" is my only issue here. What can one be impaled by that rhymes with gourd??? Hmmm...
reply by the author on 26-Dec-2024
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Nicely done. Got the message across without becoming preachy. Keep in mind that our gun laws are, indeed, strict. They simply need to be enforced. Although the issue of mental health is far more difficult to track, and act upon, it is far more dangerous than the estimated 83 million citizens that owned guns in 2023 that caused no harm. If a criminal, or potential criminal wants a gun - they will get one, leaving the rest of us unarmed and at their mercy. No thanks.
"Lest you're impaled by fate's sharp gourd" is my only issue here. What can one be impaled by that rhymes with gourd??? Hmmm...
Comment Written 25-Dec-2024
reply by the author on 26-Dec-2024
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How about sword, a perfect rhyme, pronounced sord and gord! Thanks for the great review, blessings Roy
Comment from Michael Ludwinder
Your poem is deeply moving. I was struck by the powerful imagery you use to capture the devastation of war and the tragic consequences it brings.
The reference to Jesus at the end makes the poem even more powerful.
reply by the author on 26-Dec-2024
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Your poem is deeply moving. I was struck by the powerful imagery you use to capture the devastation of war and the tragic consequences it brings.
The reference to Jesus at the end makes the poem even more powerful.
Comment Written 25-Dec-2024
reply by the author on 26-Dec-2024
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Thanks Michael, for these excellent comments and review, blessings Roy
Comment from Peter Jarvis
Your poem is a thought-provoking and impactful poem that challenges readers to reflect on the true cost of war and the importance of seeking peace. Your masterful use of language and imagery makes this poem a compelling and memorable read.
Thank you for sharing Roy.
reply by the author on 26-Dec-2024
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Your poem is a thought-provoking and impactful poem that challenges readers to reflect on the true cost of war and the importance of seeking peace. Your masterful use of language and imagery makes this poem a compelling and memorable read.
Thank you for sharing Roy.
Comment Written 25-Dec-2024
reply by the author on 26-Dec-2024
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Thanks Peter, for these excellent comments and review, blessings Roy
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Take care Roy
Comment from ESOSTINE
Your poem has posed a number of questions here waiting for answers that answer. I am most touched by this question, 'So how can guns protect the lost,
when death claims much and won't count cost...' Tahnks for sharing your reflections. Well done, dear Roy.
reply by the author on 26-Dec-2024
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Your poem has posed a number of questions here waiting for answers that answer. I am most touched by this question, 'So how can guns protect the lost,
when death claims much and won't count cost...' Tahnks for sharing your reflections. Well done, dear Roy.
Comment Written 25-Dec-2024
reply by the author on 26-Dec-2024
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Thanks for these terrific comments and review, blessings Roy
Comment from lyenochka
Amen! Thank you for speaking out for the innocent children who are killed all over our country. And those who protect their gun "rights" with the Second Amendment do not realize that our founding fathers never imagined automatic weapons, only muskets. And they never intended people to continue to defend themselves after official police and military forces were in place. At that time, each place had a "well ordered militia" something we don't have anymore.
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reply by the author on 26-Dec-2024
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Amen! Thank you for speaking out for the innocent children who are killed all over our country. And those who protect their gun "rights" with the Second Amendment do not realize that our founding fathers never imagined automatic weapons, only muskets. And they never intended people to continue to defend themselves after official police and military forces were in place. At that time, each place had a "well ordered militia" something we don't have anymore.
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Comment Written 25-Dec-2024
reply by the author on 26-Dec-2024
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Thanks Helen, for these great comments and review, blessings Roy
Comment from RJ Heritage
I thinkbthatvthe gun violence in the US needs to be addressed on multiple points. The amount of illegal falls gun is bewildering to say the least, then of course there are the legal guns. I honestly believe we live in a "gun happy" society and this b needs to change. Thank you for sharing this concern.
RJ
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reply by the author on 26-Dec-2024
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I thinkbthatvthe gun violence in the US needs to be addressed on multiple points. The amount of illegal falls gun is bewildering to say the least, then of course there are the legal guns. I honestly believe we live in a "gun happy" society and this b needs to change. Thank you for sharing this concern.
RJ
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Comment Written 24-Dec-2024
reply by the author on 26-Dec-2024
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Thanks RJ, for these splendid comments and review, blessings Roy