Awkward
Dialogue only27 total reviews
Comment from LJbutterfly
She should be outraged. Taking someone to a public place to ask for a divorce so they won't explode, is horrible. That's as bad as breaking up with someone through a text message. I liked the phrase, "gutless wonder." Great little story. Best wishes in the contest.
reply by the author on 09-Dec-2024
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She should be outraged. Taking someone to a public place to ask for a divorce so they won't explode, is horrible. That's as bad as breaking up with someone through a text message. I liked the phrase, "gutless wonder." Great little story. Best wishes in the contest.
Comment Written 09-Dec-2024
reply by the author on 09-Dec-2024
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Thank you so very much for the excllent review.
Comment from patcelaw
It's very sad when people come to the end of a marriage. The one thing that my husband and I had when we were married as we both out that we would honor that marriage through the end of life for one or the other of us. And that's exactly what we did for almost 37 years. We had three beautiful dollars in that marriage and we had a lovely home Man but a lovely and comfortable home. Patricia.
reply by the author on 09-Dec-2024
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It's very sad when people come to the end of a marriage. The one thing that my husband and I had when we were married as we both out that we would honor that marriage through the end of life for one or the other of us. And that's exactly what we did for almost 37 years. We had three beautiful dollars in that marriage and we had a lovely home Man but a lovely and comfortable home. Patricia.
Comment Written 09-Dec-2024
reply by the author on 09-Dec-2024
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Thank you, Patricia so very much for the excllent review. Vicki and I have been happily married for 53 yrs.
Comment from Pearl Edwards
I think she was right, he thought she would be more interested in not making a scene than what he was saying. He was wrong, and I say, "Go Girl"
I enjoyed your Dialogue only story, well done.
cheers
valda
reply by the author on 09-Dec-2024
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I think she was right, he thought she would be more interested in not making a scene than what he was saying. He was wrong, and I say, "Go Girl"
I enjoyed your Dialogue only story, well done.
cheers
valda
Comment Written 09-Dec-2024
reply by the author on 09-Dec-2024
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Thank you Valda, for the kind and generous review.
Comment from nomi338
My big question is how can you live with someone for a time long enough to make the decision to divorce and not realize that your relationship has deteriorated to the point of desiring a divorce.
reply by the author on 09-Dec-2024
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My big question is how can you live with someone for a time long enough to make the decision to divorce and not realize that your relationship has deteriorated to the point of desiring a divorce.
Comment Written 09-Dec-2024
reply by the author on 09-Dec-2024
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Good question Nomi, thank you for the kind review.
Comment from royowen
Heh heh, yes, how could a man be so unthinkingly thoughtless to ask for a divorce at a restaurant? Great pose D&V I hope you do well upon the contest, good luck, blessings Roy
reply by the author on 09-Dec-2024
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Heh heh, yes, how could a man be so unthinkingly thoughtless to ask for a divorce at a restaurant? Great pose D&V I hope you do well upon the contest, good luck, blessings Roy
Comment Written 09-Dec-2024
reply by the author on 09-Dec-2024
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You would be surprized how many reviewers thought that the woman wanted the divorce! The reviewers thought the man started the conversation. I'm glad I left it ambigous.
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Yep, ambiguity sounds good
Comment from Alexandra Trovato
Good job with the dialogue. I think he could've been worse though. Someone could ask for a divorce in many ways. A dinner is the better of those. ;)
I think the dialogue was well written and authentic.
Best wishes!
reply by the author on 09-Dec-2024
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Good job with the dialogue. I think he could've been worse though. Someone could ask for a divorce in many ways. A dinner is the better of those. ;)
I think the dialogue was well written and authentic.
Best wishes!
Comment Written 09-Dec-2024
reply by the author on 09-Dec-2024
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Thank you, Alexandra so very much for the excellent review. You are so generous.
Comment from davisr (Rhonda)
Cute story, Don! I'm sure he's not the first man/person to break up with someone publicly hoping to avoid confrontation. I'm not sure he gets what he hoped for, though. And, he had to pay for dinner.
Great job,
Rhonda
reply by the author on 09-Dec-2024
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Cute story, Don! I'm sure he's not the first man/person to break up with someone publicly hoping to avoid confrontation. I'm not sure he gets what he hoped for, though. And, he had to pay for dinner.
Great job,
Rhonda
Comment Written 09-Dec-2024
reply by the author on 09-Dec-2024
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Rhonda, you would be amazed at how many reviewers thought the man started the dialogue. I'm glad I left it ambiguous.
Comment from Cecilia A Heiskary
DonandVicki,
What a great dialogue writing. You told a complete story in those few short lines. The story is well organized and flows well. It was pretty heartless of her to bring him to their favorite restaurant to ask for a divorce. Like you say at least he was man enough to pay for the meal. Personally, if it was me she would have to pay for her own meal. Just saying.
Well done my friends
Cecilia
reply by the author on 09-Dec-2024
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DonandVicki,
What a great dialogue writing. You told a complete story in those few short lines. The story is well organized and flows well. It was pretty heartless of her to bring him to their favorite restaurant to ask for a divorce. Like you say at least he was man enough to pay for the meal. Personally, if it was me she would have to pay for her own meal. Just saying.
Well done my friends
Cecilia
Comment Written 09-Dec-2024
reply by the author on 09-Dec-2024
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Actually the woman started the dialogue, but your take on it is quite fascinating. Thank you.
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DonandVicki,
You're welcome
Cecilia
Comment from Debbie D'Arcy
Yes, she's going to take him to the cleaners now and paying the bill is only the beginning! I like the tension and awkwardness from the start and, in such a short piece of dialogue, you capture well the disconnect and distance that can occur in relationships. Well done, Don, and good luck! Debbie
reply by the author on 09-Dec-2024
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Yes, she's going to take him to the cleaners now and paying the bill is only the beginning! I like the tension and awkwardness from the start and, in such a short piece of dialogue, you capture well the disconnect and distance that can occur in relationships. Well done, Don, and good luck! Debbie
Comment Written 09-Dec-2024
reply by the author on 09-Dec-2024
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Thank you so very much, Debbie for the excellent review.
Comment from Begin Again
He chose the stage--a public place to display their most crushing moment, ending their marriage. Did he need the surroundings to give him backbone, or did he not think it through clearly? As for paying the bill, it's how some generations were taught, but in his case, I think he will be paying and regretting things for a long time. Money isn't everything.
Smiles, Carol
reply by the author on 09-Dec-2024
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He chose the stage--a public place to display their most crushing moment, ending their marriage. Did he need the surroundings to give him backbone, or did he not think it through clearly? As for paying the bill, it's how some generations were taught, but in his case, I think he will be paying and regretting things for a long time. Money isn't everything.
Smiles, Carol
Comment Written 09-Dec-2024
reply by the author on 09-Dec-2024
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Thank you, Carol so very much for the excllent review.