BOOK OF RENGA POEMS
Viewing comments for Chapter 8 "Warmth"Renga is a collective poets Japanese poem
25 total reviews
Comment from lyenochka
A lovely thought! I'm so glad you're adding to this book! Yes, it can be cold outside but the warmth of home and loving friends keep us comfortable no matter the temp!
reply by the author on 03-Dec-2024
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A lovely thought! I'm so glad you're adding to this book! Yes, it can be cold outside but the warmth of home and loving friends keep us comfortable no matter the temp!
Comment Written 02-Dec-2024
reply by the author on 03-Dec-2024
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Thanks for the read. It is cold here too. We seemed to have a very short Autumn. It is winter weather here. Karen
Comment from Gypsy Blue Rose
Excellent chapter one for our Renga Book. The Renga form has the right composition of syllables and lines. Thank you for participating with such a beautiful verse.
I have two suggestions, change blanket with warm, and fire instead of fires because inside the house we have one fire ... unless there is one in every room ....
While snowfall keeps us inside
Fire and good friends warm us
Gypsy
reply by the author on 02-Dec-2024
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Excellent chapter one for our Renga Book. The Renga form has the right composition of syllables and lines. Thank you for participating with such a beautiful verse.
I have two suggestions, change blanket with warm, and fire instead of fires because inside the house we have one fire ... unless there is one in every room ....
While snowfall keeps us inside
Fire and good friends warm us
Gypsy
Comment Written 02-Dec-2024
reply by the author on 02-Dec-2024
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I thank you for your suggestions. The blanket is also a reference to "blankets of snow" and I referenced "us" in line one , so more than one fire is going.
Comment from Tom Horonzy
When in life did that begin? I missed the person that had a fireplace while young and single and by the time we were wealthy enough to build a home with a hearth, the heart was more smoldering than burning brightly.
P.S. - due to maturity not disinterest
reply by the author on 02-Dec-2024
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When in life did that begin? I missed the person that had a fireplace while young and single and by the time we were wealthy enough to build a home with a hearth, the heart was more smoldering than burning brightly.
P.S. - due to maturity not disinterest
Comment Written 02-Dec-2024
reply by the author on 02-Dec-2024
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Snuggling is still good. :-)
Comment from Ric Myworld
Yes, that's about all snow is any good for, keeping us inside, freezing our butts off when we're out, or causing us to slip and fall when we aren't wearing our anti-bust-your-butt shoes. Thanks for sharing.
reply by the author on 02-Dec-2024
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Yes, that's about all snow is any good for, keeping us inside, freezing our butts off when we're out, or causing us to slip and fall when we aren't wearing our anti-bust-your-butt shoes. Thanks for sharing.
Comment Written 02-Dec-2024
reply by the author on 02-Dec-2024
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Good grief! What do anti-bust-your-butt shoes look like? Karen
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the ones with great big treads. LOL
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Really? my shoes have big treads too. :-)
Comment from Debbie D'Arcy
Another one with this welcoming theme of comfort, cosiness and cocoa (see, you've got me doing it now). Just one thing: While snowfall keep(s) us inside. A great entry for the book. Well done, Karen! Debbie
reply by the author on 02-Dec-2024
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Another one with this welcoming theme of comfort, cosiness and cocoa (see, you've got me doing it now). Just one thing: While snowfall keep(s) us inside. A great entry for the book. Well done, Karen! Debbie
Comment Written 02-Dec-2024
reply by the author on 02-Dec-2024
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I edited, thank you. I did my two, how about you?
Karen
Comment from patcelaw
This is wonderfully written. It has a very profound thought to it. I enjoyed very much listening to it. I wish you a very wonderful week and a blessed day. May God bless you. Patricia.
reply by the author on 02-Dec-2024
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This is wonderfully written. It has a very profound thought to it. I enjoyed very much listening to it. I wish you a very wonderful week and a blessed day. May God bless you. Patricia.
Comment Written 02-Dec-2024
reply by the author on 02-Dec-2024
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You are always so sweet and upbeat. Thanks for the read. karen
Comment from karenina
Clever! A blanket of snow is a common description...you bring it inside to make the connection to what else can blanket us--and what cam beat good friends and a warming fire?
Should it be "snowfall keeps" .... Or "snowfalls keep"
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Just a thought...
Karenina
reply by the author on 02-Dec-2024
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Clever! A blanket of snow is a common description...you bring it inside to make the connection to what else can blanket us--and what cam beat good friends and a warming fire?
Should it be "snowfall keeps" .... Or "snowfalls keep"
???
Just a thought...
Karenina
Comment Written 02-Dec-2024
reply by the author on 02-Dec-2024
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Debbi beat you to it. I fixed it already. but thanks anyhoo. I miss snuggling. Karen
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Oh my. Sorry, I try to check reviews and see if something has been mentioned. I claim senior brain!
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I thank you for the effort sweet pea. Karen
Comment from Marilyn Hamilton
Oh I see what you mean now. You split up the one poem. I love the line "fires and good friends blanket us." Fires are one of the best things of the season.
reply by the author on 02-Dec-2024
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Oh I see what you mean now. You split up the one poem. I love the line "fires and good friends blanket us." Fires are one of the best things of the season.
Comment Written 02-Dec-2024
reply by the author on 02-Dec-2024
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You betcha. the smell of the wood, the crackling sound, the snuggling. And maybe a nice creepy movie in black and white. Karen
Comment from jim vecchio
This was a very good play on words. usually, we write bout being blanketed by snow, but in your work, it is the truer things that blanket us, friends and a nice warm fire.
reply by the author on 02-Dec-2024
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This was a very good play on words. usually, we write bout being blanketed by snow, but in your work, it is the truer things that blanket us, friends and a nice warm fire.
Comment Written 02-Dec-2024
reply by the author on 02-Dec-2024
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See, you got it right off the bat. Most people miss it.
Nothing wrong with your brains. Thanks for the read. karen
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I hope you're not implying I'm normal.
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I would never insult you like that! Karen
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Thank you. I wondered.
Comment from Pam Lonsdale
What a lovely sentiment - our friends add the warmth and cover us with it like blankets.
First line, change "keep" to "keeps".
xo
Pam
reply by the author on 02-Dec-2024
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What a lovely sentiment - our friends add the warmth and cover us with it like blankets.
First line, change "keep" to "keeps".
xo
Pam
Comment Written 02-Dec-2024
reply by the author on 02-Dec-2024
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You are third in line for the edit. It is fixed. But I thank you for the effort. How in blue blazes did I miss it? Thanks for your help and the read. Karen