(Senryu) Find the Right Path
A senryu30 total reviews
Comment from patcelaw
My path was not quite clear when it came to writing a review for this so therefore I threw a dart at the map and it's stuck in a place that said 4 1/2 to 5 so I'm rather torn as to whether I'm gonna give you a four or if I'm gonna give you a five. I finally decided you will get a five. Patricia.
reply by the author on 10-Nov-2024
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My path was not quite clear when it came to writing a review for this so therefore I threw a dart at the map and it's stuck in a place that said 4 1/2 to 5 so I'm rather torn as to whether I'm gonna give you a four or if I'm gonna give you a five. I finally decided you will get a five. Patricia.
Comment Written 10-Nov-2024
reply by the author on 10-Nov-2024
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Thank you Pat for your wonderful review
Comment from Sandra Stoner-Mitchell
I love that idea! This is such a cool senyu (as my granddaughter would say!) and is a good idea to follow. Perhaps not throwing darts at maps, but by changing directions can be worth while. Very well done, Pam. I very much enjoyed it. :)) Sandra xx
reply by the author on 10-Nov-2024
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I love that idea! This is such a cool senyu (as my granddaughter would say!) and is a good idea to follow. Perhaps not throwing darts at maps, but by changing directions can be worth while. Very well done, Pam. I very much enjoyed it. :)) Sandra xx
Comment Written 10-Nov-2024
reply by the author on 10-Nov-2024
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Thank you Sandra for a wonderful review
Comment from dragonpoet
Hi Pam,
This is one way to find a new path. Do you just move to where the dart lands? Or is that the next vacation spot to ponder what comes next?
Keep writing and stay healthy
Have a good day.
Joan
reply by the author on 10-Nov-2024
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Hi Pam,
This is one way to find a new path. Do you just move to where the dart lands? Or is that the next vacation spot to ponder what comes next?
Keep writing and stay healthy
Have a good day.
Joan
Comment Written 10-Nov-2024
reply by the author on 10-Nov-2024
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Thank you Joan and have a wonderful review. I wish you all the health as well.
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Hi Pam,
You're welcome and thanks.
Joan
Comment from mermaids
I like your words, especially throwing darts at the map. It is a humorous ending but a possible option when one is at a loss for direction. Excellent senryu form with a theme that everyone can relate to.
reply by the author on 10-Nov-2024
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I like your words, especially throwing darts at the map. It is a humorous ending but a possible option when one is at a loss for direction. Excellent senryu form with a theme that everyone can relate to.
Comment Written 10-Nov-2024
reply by the author on 10-Nov-2024
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Thank you mermaids for a lovely review
Comment from Bill Schott
This senryu, Find the Right Path, has the proper formatting and suggests that when you don't know where to turn next, take a chance on someone you know -- yourself.
reply by the author on 10-Nov-2024
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This senryu, Find the Right Path, has the proper formatting and suggests that when you don't know where to turn next, take a chance on someone you know -- yourself.
Comment Written 10-Nov-2024
reply by the author on 10-Nov-2024
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Thank you Bill for a wonderful review
Comment from ESOSTINE
Another good one, dear Pam. When nothing is clear, do not relax waiting for a new path to be very clear before doing something. Take a calculated risk and do something. Changes may be made along the way to adjust to the right track. Lovely piece.
reply by the author on 10-Nov-2024
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Another good one, dear Pam. When nothing is clear, do not relax waiting for a new path to be very clear before doing something. Take a calculated risk and do something. Changes may be made along the way to adjust to the right track. Lovely piece.
Comment Written 10-Nov-2024
reply by the author on 10-Nov-2024
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Thank you esostine for a wonderful review
Comment from Pam Lonsdale
All those roads lend to the theme of your poem - which road shall I take? Throwing a dart works as well as any method when it's not clear which road we should take.
A thoughtful, and a little humorous, Senryu.
xo
Pam
reply by the author on 10-Nov-2024
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All those roads lend to the theme of your poem - which road shall I take? Throwing a dart works as well as any method when it's not clear which road we should take.
A thoughtful, and a little humorous, Senryu.
xo
Pam
Comment Written 10-Nov-2024
reply by the author on 10-Nov-2024
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Thank you Pam for a wonderful review
Comment from jenintorre
I am not sure I agree with you on this one. I prefer to write down the pros and cons of a situation to help me decide what to do next. I didn't know that punctuation was frowned upon in a senyru. Must remember that. Great artwork. Take care. Jen
reply by the author on 10-Nov-2024
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I am not sure I agree with you on this one. I prefer to write down the pros and cons of a situation to help me decide what to do next. I didn't know that punctuation was frowned upon in a senyru. Must remember that. Great artwork. Take care. Jen
Comment Written 10-Nov-2024
reply by the author on 10-Nov-2024
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This was meant to be humorous Jen as I stated in my notes. Thank you for the wonderful review.
Comment from Marilyn Hamilton
LOL I like this one. The darts might land somewhere that looks interesting to go to or at the very least throwing them will ease some of the stress you're feeling because your life is crazed. lol Good job.
reply by the author on 10-Nov-2024
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LOL I like this one. The darts might land somewhere that looks interesting to go to or at the very least throwing them will ease some of the stress you're feeling because your life is crazed. lol Good job.
Comment Written 09-Nov-2024
reply by the author on 10-Nov-2024
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Thank you Marilyn for this great review
Comment from Pam (respa)
-Good artwork and presentation, Pam.
-Your notes are appreciated, but I
think you meant "punctuation"
at the end of the sentence.
-The syllable count is good, along with the topic.
-Good description about life and how
we sometimes need a different path.
-A very good concluding line.
-Good luck in the contest.
reply by the author on 10-Nov-2024
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-Good artwork and presentation, Pam.
-Your notes are appreciated, but I
think you meant "punctuation"
at the end of the sentence.
-The syllable count is good, along with the topic.
-Good description about life and how
we sometimes need a different path.
-A very good concluding line.
-Good luck in the contest.
Comment Written 09-Nov-2024
reply by the author on 10-Nov-2024
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Thank you Pam for your wonderful thoughtful review
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You are very welcome, Pam.