Our First Kiss
3-6-9 poem for contest34 total reviews
Comment from TPAC
Weird, filled with emotions. Sole purpose is a mate: very interesting. I felt, I never had that choice. I believed, if I did, the elements prevailing my life would kill her. Just to hurt me. I'm better alone.
reply by the author on 07-Nov-2024
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Weird, filled with emotions. Sole purpose is a mate: very interesting. I felt, I never had that choice. I believed, if I did, the elements prevailing my life would kill her. Just to hurt me. I'm better alone.
Comment Written 07-Nov-2024
reply by the author on 07-Nov-2024
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Thanks so very much for reviewing!
Comment from patcelaw
This is a nicely written 369 poem for the contest and I wish you the very best in the contest. May you have a lovely day a very good week and may God bless you. Patricia.
reply by the author on 07-Nov-2024
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This is a nicely written 369 poem for the contest and I wish you the very best in the contest. May you have a lovely day a very good week and may God bless you. Patricia.
Comment Written 07-Nov-2024
reply by the author on 07-Nov-2024
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Thanks so very much Patricia for your review!
Comment from CM Pickard
Very sweet contest entry, perfect selection of photo too. It doesn't pretend to do anything more than it's designed to do and crafts a fun little story while it's at it. Well done
reply by the author on 07-Nov-2024
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Very sweet contest entry, perfect selection of photo too. It doesn't pretend to do anything more than it's designed to do and crafts a fun little story while it's at it. Well done
Comment Written 07-Nov-2024
reply by the author on 07-Nov-2024
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Thanks so very much!
Comment from DonandVicki
Katiemae, I will pray for you, I'm so sorry that you are going through all this. I loved your poem and can remember my first kiss. This line in your poem affected me the most: "When I look, I see eternity In your beauteous innocent face."
reply by the author on 06-Nov-2024
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Katiemae, I will pray for you, I'm so sorry that you are going through all this. I loved your poem and can remember my first kiss. This line in your poem affected me the most: "When I look, I see eternity In your beauteous innocent face."
Comment Written 06-Nov-2024
reply by the author on 06-Nov-2024
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Thanks so very much!)
Comment from mermaids
There is a feeling of love and tranquility in your words. Excellent 3-6-9 form that captures good feelings and a scene of romance. "But all the planets kicked into place" is a great last line that sums up your words.
reply by the author on 06-Nov-2024
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There is a feeling of love and tranquility in your words. Excellent 3-6-9 form that captures good feelings and a scene of romance. "But all the planets kicked into place" is a great last line that sums up your words.
Comment Written 06-Nov-2024
reply by the author on 06-Nov-2024
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Thanks so very much!
Comment from Debbie D'Arcy
This is absolutely charming, Katie! The visual is a delight and your series of 3-6-9 verses skilfully captures the magnitude and thrill of that first kiss. I particularly like the change of tone in the last stanza to a more colloquial and exaggerated one, adding fun to the theme. Just one edit: Our fi(r)st kiss. (Your version sounds a little less tender:))
Well done and good luck! Debbie
reply by the author on 06-Nov-2024
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This is absolutely charming, Katie! The visual is a delight and your series of 3-6-9 verses skilfully captures the magnitude and thrill of that first kiss. I particularly like the change of tone in the last stanza to a more colloquial and exaggerated one, adding fun to the theme. Just one edit: Our fi(r)st kiss. (Your version sounds a little less tender:))
Well done and good luck! Debbie
Comment Written 06-Nov-2024
reply by the author on 06-Nov-2024
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Thanks so very much Debbie!
Luv&stuff
Comment from Gloria ....
This is simply a delightful and innocent expression of love at first sight.
I very much enjoy the confessional aspect and the artwork too.
Wishing you all the best with the Contest Committee. :)
Gloria
reply by the author on 06-Nov-2024
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This is simply a delightful and innocent expression of love at first sight.
I very much enjoy the confessional aspect and the artwork too.
Wishing you all the best with the Contest Committee. :)
Gloria
Comment Written 06-Nov-2024
reply by the author on 06-Nov-2024
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Why thanks ever so much for your lovely
comments and stellar rating.
Luv&stuff
Katherine
Comment from Barry Penfold
A lovely poem and such a cute image. Thanks for sharing. Yes, that first kiss is the one. Love your last stanza. Take care and have a most wonderful day. Keep writing.
Regards
Barry Penfold.
reply by the author on 07-Nov-2024
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A lovely poem and such a cute image. Thanks for sharing. Yes, that first kiss is the one. Love your last stanza. Take care and have a most wonderful day. Keep writing.
Regards
Barry Penfold.
Comment Written 06-Nov-2024
reply by the author on 07-Nov-2024
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Thanks so very much Barry!
Comment from Nicole Dover
I think that this is a decent poem. I'd like to know what the last line means. Perhaps it is an old expression I've never heard before?
Looking forward to hearing back - Nicole
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reply by the author on 07-Nov-2024
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I think that this is a decent poem. I'd like to know what the last line means. Perhaps it is an old expression I've never heard before?
Looking forward to hearing back - Nicole
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The highest and the lowest rating are not included in calculations.
Comment Written 06-Nov-2024
reply by the author on 07-Nov-2024
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It'd sort of an.old expression
Thanks so very much for reviewing
Comment from EeanBlack
:YES. The one that puts your universe into place. I own that kiss. Well, I leased it for a day. Then, you know, had car trouble. Then it rained. Then she wasn't home. So, I just gave it to the girl next door. Come to find out, I had the address wrong and it was her all along. This was sappy(cool), but pretty. That's romance in a nutshell anyway. Right?
reply by the author on 07-Nov-2024
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:YES. The one that puts your universe into place. I own that kiss. Well, I leased it for a day. Then, you know, had car trouble. Then it rained. Then she wasn't home. So, I just gave it to the girl next door. Come to find out, I had the address wrong and it was her all along. This was sappy(cool), but pretty. That's romance in a nutshell anyway. Right?
Comment Written 06-Nov-2024
reply by the author on 07-Nov-2024
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Thanks so very much!
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Always.