The Gift
What if you were the last tree?40 total reviews
Comment from Neonewman
Lea, this piece packs quite a punch, my friend. Humanity needs to consider where our oxygen comes from. The imagery is strong and the message is clear.
God bless,
Steve
reply by the author on 06-Dec-2024
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Lea, this piece packs quite a punch, my friend. Humanity needs to consider where our oxygen comes from. The imagery is strong and the message is clear.
God bless,
Steve
Comment Written 06-Dec-2024
reply by the author on 06-Dec-2024
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Wow thank you Steve! I'm glad that my message came clear. Climate change in what we do to the planet is close to my heart. Thank you again! Don't let the bed bugs bite! Thx again!
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It's my pleasure, and the bed bugs know better than to bite me.
Comment from pome lover
I give you a 5 because they are your thoughts expressed in earnest, but it seems to me you are angry about something, as this is a very fatalistic poem, and as you say, ending with indifference. So I don't really know what you are addressing, though you seem to be fed up with mankind.
However, I would love to know your main thought, if you wouldn't mind telling me.
congratulations of being recognized.
Katharine
reply by the author on 05-Dec-2024
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I give you a 5 because they are your thoughts expressed in earnest, but it seems to me you are angry about something, as this is a very fatalistic poem, and as you say, ending with indifference. So I don't really know what you are addressing, though you seem to be fed up with mankind.
However, I would love to know your main thought, if you wouldn't mind telling me.
congratulations of being recognized.
Katharine
Comment Written 05-Dec-2024
reply by the author on 05-Dec-2024
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One of the subjects close to my heart is climate change and the Palm is the last tree suffering from that change. Bloated trunk thin arms. Talked about the last tree, watching the shoreline. Slip beneath the ways i'm taking the last of green with it.It talks about the demise of the final tree left living. Climate change is very real, and it's all around us. The palm represents the costs of that. Every day, hundreds of hectares are taken down in the jungles of south america. Uncle are the lungs of the earth without them.We don't breathe at least not very well. And I wanted to portray the expression of human beings as most of them seem to think it's either not real or if it's not in my lifetime. So I wrote about the demise of the final tree. While man watches with insufferable indifference. Meaning most of us jus5 don't care. I find it truly sad that we cannot protect the one thing that protects us. Well, my main part is basically about climate change and the effects thereof. I hope that clears it up for you. Thank you for reading and offering your thoughts.You've given me food for thought.As well helps me reexamine what i've written and how it comes across. Thank you, my friend.I hope you're having a great wonderful evening.And thanks again!
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thanks for the explanation!
To be honest with you, I don't believe in climate change, but that doesn't mean, I hope, that we can't be friends. What I don't like is people over building and not leaving trees for beauty and for shade.
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So absolutely, we're already friends and no, we don't have to agree on everything. That's true.The cool part about being a friend.We can have healthy debates because we're mature women! Thank you again, my friend for your honesty. Which is most important to me. And that's all? You'll get from me too, have an awesome evening!
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thanks. you, too.
Comment from MissMerri
This is a well-written poem, pleading for the earth to be loved and cherished as it should be. It is full of meaningful symbolism and a pleasure to read, though once through was not enough to truly grasp the richness of your phrases. I loved it. MM
reply by the author on 05-Dec-2024
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This is a well-written poem, pleading for the earth to be loved and cherished as it should be. It is full of meaningful symbolism and a pleasure to read, though once through was not enough to truly grasp the richness of your phrases. I loved it. MM
Comment Written 05-Dec-2024
reply by the author on 05-Dec-2024
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Thank you Merri! Excuse, i'm an abstract writer.I know we think that what's in my head is coming out on paper.It doesn't always translate. Essentially, it's about the last tree watching those remaining on the shoreline sink into the ocean.Is it skinny limbs and bloated water logged trunk. It hangs on to mostly water and rock before it too slips into the ocean increase, no more exist. A weird way of discussing climate change. You're very insightful, and I truly appreciate your comments. You're always good to hear Here. Any constructive criticism is always welcome too.Because that's the most important part, the impression of the reader. Thank you so much!
Comment from Kayte Ray
Nice job.
the flow feels flawless.
You have created very strong images here for the reader to enjoy. This was truly a pleasure to read, and your image choice is flawless. It complements the work well.
reply by the author on 05-Dec-2024
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Nice job.
the flow feels flawless.
You have created very strong images here for the reader to enjoy. This was truly a pleasure to read, and your image choice is flawless. It complements the work well.
Comment Written 05-Dec-2024
reply by the author on 05-Dec-2024
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Wow thank you what a fine compliment! I'm glad the poem it's logical and feels the way it does. Thank you for your time, your great reading and your thoughts which i'm happy to receive. Wishing you and yours well!
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Wow thank you what a fine compliment! I'm glad the poem it's logical and feels the way it does. Thank you for your time, your great reading and your thoughts which i'm happy to receive. Wishing you and yours well!
Comment from Tom Horonzy
The last tree..? I remember a song in the 60's The Last Leaf, and I can see the parallelism with that and your release, but the bigger question would be what if you... or I were the last person on earth?
reply by the author on 05-Dec-2024
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The last tree..? I remember a song in the 60's The Last Leaf, and I can see the parallelism with that and your release, but the bigger question would be what if you... or I were the last person on earth?
Comment Written 05-Dec-2024
reply by the author on 05-Dec-2024
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That's an even deeper question to ponder over a good chunk of time. But everything in life ends, and we will at some point too. I'd rather not hasten the day, though. Thank you Tom for reading writing and for your great review and offering your thoughts. Which I'm always happy to receive! I hope you and yours are well and thank you again!
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That's an even deeper question to ponder over a good chunk of time. But everything in life ends, and we will at some point too. I'd rather not hasten the day, though. Thank you Tom for reading writing and for your great review and offering your thoughts. Which I'm always happy to receive! I hope you and yours are well and thank you again!
Comment from gansach
This is an excellent offering for the Free Form Poetry Competition. It gives one food for thought as this may be a future that is all too possible if we persist in cutting down our means of oxygen on this planet. Great presentation and rich language. Wonderful piece of work.
reply by the author on 04-Dec-2024
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This is an excellent offering for the Free Form Poetry Competition. It gives one food for thought as this may be a future that is all too possible if we persist in cutting down our means of oxygen on this planet. Great presentation and rich language. Wonderful piece of work.
Comment Written 04-Dec-2024
reply by the author on 04-Dec-2024
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Thank you. I'm really glad you like this one. Wow, great comments too. I'm glad you appreciate it.And you have great insight, you see exactly what i'm trying to say! Thank you again!
Comment from karenina
The mood is set. Things are bleak and getting bleaker. This feels a lot like what many in the world are feeling right now, between wars, famine, climate crisis, divisive politics, et al.
Subtle alliteration kisses this poem and softens the edges.
"watches in weakness"
"last of life"
Such things raise the level of connectedness with the reader.
I'm sorry, I could not find the word "nuture" in the dictionary. Perhaps you could enlighten me?
"A mist of remembrance where stone nuture once lay"...
Nurture maybe? Or nature?
Excellent word choices here.
Karenina
reply by the author on 03-Dec-2024
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The mood is set. Things are bleak and getting bleaker. This feels a lot like what many in the world are feeling right now, between wars, famine, climate crisis, divisive politics, et al.
Subtle alliteration kisses this poem and softens the edges.
"watches in weakness"
"last of life"
Such things raise the level of connectedness with the reader.
I'm sorry, I could not find the word "nuture" in the dictionary. Perhaps you could enlighten me?
"A mist of remembrance where stone nuture once lay"...
Nurture maybe? Or nature?
Excellent word choices here.
Karenina
Comment Written 03-Dec-2024
reply by the author on 03-Dec-2024
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Great, I thank you for catching that. I went ahead right in there. Add it the r wow! I bet you do you do editing work?Because I bet you're really good at that, too. Thank you very much for reading and offering your insight on your create. Rating, two, hope you enjoy your evening!
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Oh, thanks! I'm a retired RN. I could save your life but would struggle with the correct placement of a semi-colon!
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Comment from Michael Ludwinder
Your poem is so beautiful. I loved the powerful imagery - especially "a mist of remembrance where stone nurture once lay" and "the last of life, extinction blazes black." These lines were so powerful. Your words linger seem to have a quiet sorrow - so well written.
reply by the author on 02-Dec-2024
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Your poem is so beautiful. I loved the powerful imagery - especially "a mist of remembrance where stone nurture once lay" and "the last of life, extinction blazes black." These lines were so powerful. Your words linger seem to have a quiet sorrow - so well written.
Comment Written 01-Dec-2024
reply by the author on 02-Dec-2024
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Michael thank you so much. A great review and a fine rating.I thank you for that too, and for your time. Good to know, Mike. The words can impresonate with another.Thank you for that.And I hope you have a great evening!
Comment from Rachelle Allen
Wow! This packs a wallop as we watch the slow, silent demise of such an integral part of our own existence yet turn a blind eye to it.
Beautiful, eloquent phrases make this a most memorable post!
reply by the author on 01-Dec-2024
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Wow! This packs a wallop as we watch the slow, silent demise of such an integral part of our own existence yet turn a blind eye to it.
Beautiful, eloquent phrases make this a most memorable post!
Comment Written 01-Dec-2024
reply by the author on 01-Dec-2024
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Thank you, Rachelle, this is awesome.Appreciate this so much! So glad you like it.As always, your input is valuable to me.And i'm happy to receive it all every time. Thank you my friend!
Comment from Ulla
Hi Lea, your beautifully written poem gave me pause. Yes, it's sad how we become indifferent to the destruction which is happening all around us. I hope we'll wake up before it's too late. All best, Ulla xcx
reply by the author on 01-Dec-2024
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Hi Lea, your beautifully written poem gave me pause. Yes, it's sad how we become indifferent to the destruction which is happening all around us. I hope we'll wake up before it's too late. All best, Ulla xcx
Comment Written 01-Dec-2024
reply by the author on 01-Dec-2024
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Hi Ulla! I'm so glad that my piece of abstract writing has definitely giving you great insight into the nature of the poem! I'm glad you like it. Thank you so much. Um, I'll eat tap you to receive your review to. cuz u is smart...lol little bit of hillbilly that slipped there. Thank you so much for your kind review and the great rating and for your time.I hope you're having a marvelous day!