The Empty Chair
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Comment from Jacob1395
Wow! Things are really intense between Sharice and Fiona. You've left me really wanting to know why they are doing this to each other and what, if anything, this has to do with Preyton's death. Another engaging chapter, Carol, I really enjoyed it.
reply by the author on 20-Oct-2024
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Wow! Things are really intense between Sharice and Fiona. You've left me really wanting to know why they are doing this to each other and what, if anything, this has to do with Preyton's death. Another engaging chapter, Carol, I really enjoyed it.
Comment Written 20-Oct-2024
reply by the author on 20-Oct-2024
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There was a clue back in one of the first chapters.... Fiona was always left behind because Sharice would take Peyton off to do things that Fiona couldn't do. Fiona was possessive of things and considered Peyton her friend. Over the years, things changed but not in Fiona's mind.
Smiles, Carol
Comment from Marilyn Hamilton
Oh my goodness! Fiona is really something! I think Sharice needs to get a clue. When someone uses poison, the last thing you do is accept a dinner invitation at their house immediately after lol Great chapter, Carol. Very intriguing. Can't wait for the next.
reply by the author on 20-Oct-2024
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Oh my goodness! Fiona is really something! I think Sharice needs to get a clue. When someone uses poison, the last thing you do is accept a dinner invitation at their house immediately after lol Great chapter, Carol. Very intriguing. Can't wait for the next.
Comment Written 20-Oct-2024
reply by the author on 20-Oct-2024
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Sharice has been the care taker for Fiona so long that she forgets that her role did not make Fiona the way she is...that was of her own making. She keeps forgiving her for what she does and it is going to catch up with her real fast. Thank you so much for the awesome review and the stars.
Smiles, Carol
Comment from Karen Cherry Threadgill
You are such a fiend.This is delightful. Fiona is one seriously twisted sister. I guess it is a failing that I like the complicated, weird things the best. Have a good week. I am one ahead of you this time. I like that feeling. Karen
reply by the author on 20-Oct-2024
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You are such a fiend.This is delightful. Fiona is one seriously twisted sister. I guess it is a failing that I like the complicated, weird things the best. Have a good week. I am one ahead of you this time. I like that feeling. Karen
Comment Written 20-Oct-2024
reply by the author on 20-Oct-2024
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Fiona is one twisted sister. She's about to even get crazier soon. Thanks for reading and see you soon when you post.
Smiles, Carol
Comment from Sandra Stoner-Mitchell
Oh dear, that Fiona needs to be put in a secure mental home. I really feel sorry for Sharice. It's strange that I don't remember them finding Payton's body; he hasn't been found yet, has he? It would be good if he turned up now. I want to see Fiona come a cropper for what she has done. Another evil chapter, my friend. :)) Sandra xxx
reply by the author on 20-Oct-2024
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Oh dear, that Fiona needs to be put in a secure mental home. I really feel sorry for Sharice. It's strange that I don't remember them finding Payton's body; he hasn't been found yet, has he? It would be good if he turned up now. I want to see Fiona come a cropper for what she has done. Another evil chapter, my friend. :)) Sandra xxx
Comment Written 20-Oct-2024
reply by the author on 20-Oct-2024
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that's because they haven't found a body! This is going to be a short story...two more chapters I think. And another surprise or two. LOl Thanks for reading and enjoying (haha) this creepy story. Yes, Fiona is not all there.
Smiles, carol
Comment from barbara.wilkey
Fiona is a true witch. Thank you for sharing this with us.
I am truly sorry, Sharice." (in dialogue it would probably be 'I'm')
"Yes, sister dear, a tea party is perfect. We shall sip tea and make amends," she mumbled to herself. (I have a feeling Fiona is going to poison her sister.)
Next paragraph, I was right.)
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reply by the author on 20-Oct-2024
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Fiona is a true witch. Thank you for sharing this with us.
I am truly sorry, Sharice." (in dialogue it would probably be 'I'm')
"Yes, sister dear, a tea party is perfect. We shall sip tea and make amends," she mumbled to herself. (I have a feeling Fiona is going to poison her sister.)
Next paragraph, I was right.)
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Comment Written 20-Oct-2024
reply by the author on 20-Oct-2024
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She made it look like she was going to poison Sharice, but she was so obvious, because she wanted Sharice to switch cups (her fingerprints would be on it) and now she can blame Sharice for poisoning her. Diabolical girl!
Smiles, Carol
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I also noticed and forgot to comment, but When the police got there, Fiona wasn't in her chair. It want empty, hmmm
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She was lying on the floor in front of the sofa and he had to pick her up and lay her on the sofa.
Comment from Jackson Goodall
The early twist when Fiona deliberately drank her own poison got me right off the bat!
You wrote her so well, and her maliciousness could be felt through Sharice's caringness as the perfect emotional foil.
And finally being pushed too far, Sharice snaps, and of course it had been a set up.
One of those characters you hate through the screen. Great writing!
Thanks for the entertainment,
-Jackson
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reply by the author on 20-Oct-2024
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The early twist when Fiona deliberately drank her own poison got me right off the bat!
You wrote her so well, and her maliciousness could be felt through Sharice's caringness as the perfect emotional foil.
And finally being pushed too far, Sharice snaps, and of course it had been a set up.
One of those characters you hate through the screen. Great writing!
Thanks for the entertainment,
-Jackson
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Comment Written 20-Oct-2024
reply by the author on 20-Oct-2024
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You are most welcome, Jackson. Welcome to Fanstory and I hope you are enjoying the site. I appreciate that you stopped by to read a chapter of my story and yes, Fiona is one you want to hate. Thanks again.
Smiles, Carol