The Empty Chair
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Comment from Sandra Stoner-Mitchell
These two sisters are not exactly loving each other, are they? What a wicked woman that Fiona is. But, until I know what is going on with Sharice, I can't really say what I honestly think about her. She sounds edgy around Fiona, but is that because she is hiding something. I still think Fiona is most likely to have killed Peyton, if he is in fact dead! This gets more mysterious as we go along, Carol. I just can't begin to imagine how this will end. Well done again, my friend. Love, Sandra xxxx
reply by the author on 18-Oct-2024
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These two sisters are not exactly loving each other, are they? What a wicked woman that Fiona is. But, until I know what is going on with Sharice, I can't really say what I honestly think about her. She sounds edgy around Fiona, but is that because she is hiding something. I still think Fiona is most likely to have killed Peyton, if he is in fact dead! This gets more mysterious as we go along, Carol. I just can't begin to imagine how this will end. Well done again, my friend. Love, Sandra xxxx
Comment Written 18-Oct-2024
reply by the author on 18-Oct-2024
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Hi, Sandra! this creepy story has me shivering when I write it. LOl I don't really like either of them but Fiona is a nut case for sure. But she is also the crafty one out of the two. Sharice is hiding something but she's not as good at doing it. Thanks for continuing to read. Lucky for both of us, this will be a short one. Not too mancy chapters in it.
Smiles and hugs, Carol
Comment from royowen
Both these sisters are not particularly nice to one another, nor are they forgiving in a way sisters can be. You've created a great mystery here Carol, not quite sure who is the guilty party, or even if anyone is guilty, well done, blessings Roy
reply by the author on 18-Oct-2024
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Both these sisters are not particularly nice to one another, nor are they forgiving in a way sisters can be. You've created a great mystery here Carol, not quite sure who is the guilty party, or even if anyone is guilty, well done, blessings Roy
Comment Written 18-Oct-2024
reply by the author on 18-Oct-2024
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Thanks, Roy! thanks for reading another chapter of this creepy story. I'm glad that it won't take long to finish it. LOL Otherwise, I might not sleep at night. Appreciate the time and the review.
Smiles, Carol
Comment from karenina
Now you've done it. Each of the sisters is suspicious and each has things to hide... Sharice, at the medical building tracts with what may be a pregnancy test. Fiona exiting her wheelchair removed all doubt that she had to be innocent due to her immobility. Oh right...and we still don't have a body! Chills here. I feel this way when I read Poe, too!
Karenina
reply by the author on 18-Oct-2024
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Now you've done it. Each of the sisters is suspicious and each has things to hide... Sharice, at the medical building tracts with what may be a pregnancy test. Fiona exiting her wheelchair removed all doubt that she had to be innocent due to her immobility. Oh right...and we still don't have a body! Chills here. I feel this way when I read Poe, too!
Karenina
Comment Written 18-Oct-2024
reply by the author on 18-Oct-2024
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Me too! I steer as far away of Edgar as possible but for some reason this story tends to make me think he's haunting me somehow. LOl And we still don't have a body!!!
smiles and hugs, Carol
Comment from Carol Clark2
Wow, I'm wondering why Fiona would tell the police that Sharice is guilty. One suggestion: You begin the first paragraph with 'he.' It would be good to identify the detective for the reader, since it's a new chapter. Goose bumps on this chapter! LOL. Carol
reply by the author on 18-Oct-2024
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Wow, I'm wondering why Fiona would tell the police that Sharice is guilty. One suggestion: You begin the first paragraph with 'he.' It would be good to identify the detective for the reader, since it's a new chapter. Goose bumps on this chapter! LOL. Carol
Comment Written 18-Oct-2024
reply by the author on 18-Oct-2024
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I always forget that a person isn't reading chapter after chapter as if it was a book. Thanks for reminding me. This book is creepy, huh?
Smiles, Carol
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You're welcome.
Comment from Marilyn Hamilton
Ok. Both sisters are suspicious! Fiona walking away from the wheelchair opens up a whole new set of questions and proves I was right to distrust her. Got to love the cliff hangers you leave us on lol
reply by the author on 18-Oct-2024
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Ok. Both sisters are suspicious! Fiona walking away from the wheelchair opens up a whole new set of questions and proves I was right to distrust her. Got to love the cliff hangers you leave us on lol
Comment Written 18-Oct-2024
reply by the author on 18-Oct-2024
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thanks, Marilyn. Normally I wouldn't reveal that part about the wheelchair but I have to make this story shorter so I am ready for the Nov 1st contest... Besides, I scare myself with this one. LOL
Smiles, Carol
Comment from Gayla putnam
This chapter is even more chilling than the last one. Your dialogue between the characters is spot on. As a reader, I am terrified of Fiona. Poor Sharice. I must have missed it, but did they find Payton's body? It never says so in this chapter, and I thought I'd read chapter 2. There was one sentence structure question. It's the paragraph that starts "Trembling with frustration." Should it be from that or for that? I'm on the edge of my seat. gayla
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reply by the author on 18-Oct-2024
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This chapter is even more chilling than the last one. Your dialogue between the characters is spot on. As a reader, I am terrified of Fiona. Poor Sharice. I must have missed it, but did they find Payton's body? It never says so in this chapter, and I thought I'd read chapter 2. There was one sentence structure question. It's the paragraph that starts "Trembling with frustration." Should it be from that or for that? I'm on the edge of my seat. gayla
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Comment Written 18-Oct-2024
reply by the author on 18-Oct-2024
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Thanks so much for the kind review, Gayla. the answer to Peyton's body is no, it's not been found. And I'll go check out the other sentence you refer to. thanks so much.
Smiles, Carol
Comment from barbara.wilkey
Good job. I can't wait to read more.
"Give it to me, or you'll be sorry." (Is this telling us something???)
Fiona rushed to the fireplace, leaving her chair behind. (Not in the wheelchair. I thought this might be the case.)
"I promise you'll regret crossing me." (Also, very telling.)
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reply by the author on 18-Oct-2024
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Good job. I can't wait to read more.
"Give it to me, or you'll be sorry." (Is this telling us something???)
Fiona rushed to the fireplace, leaving her chair behind. (Not in the wheelchair. I thought this might be the case.)
"I promise you'll regret crossing me." (Also, very telling.)
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Comment Written 18-Oct-2024
reply by the author on 18-Oct-2024
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Thanks, Barbara... This won't be a long story so I have to put the clues front and center... yet I believe there will be a few surprises still. Thank you so much for the review.
Smiles, Carol