The Empty Chair
Viewing comments for Chapter 2 "The Empty Chair Chap 2"The mysterious disappearance of a childhood friend
19 total reviews
Comment from karenina
Lots of questions and no answers. Yet. Fiona seems demented, evil, delusional, or some combination of the three. Sharice is shifty, anxious to hush Fiona in front of authorities, and oh yes -- there's that pregnancy test.
You're also setting the table. For what? That remains to be seen. I'm guessing it won't be a pot roast!
This is a mysterious almost sinister and haunting story thus far. Of course, you have me under your spell!
Karenina
reply by the author on 18-Oct-2024
  |
Lots of questions and no answers. Yet. Fiona seems demented, evil, delusional, or some combination of the three. Sharice is shifty, anxious to hush Fiona in front of authorities, and oh yes -- there's that pregnancy test.
You're also setting the table. For what? That remains to be seen. I'm guessing it won't be a pot roast!
This is a mysterious almost sinister and haunting story thus far. Of course, you have me under your spell!
Karenina
Comment Written 16-Oct-2024
reply by the author on 18-Oct-2024
-
Fiona was setting the table for Peyton to join them for dinner... but soemthing tells me that's not going to happen. Creepy little tale, isn't it? Thanks for tagging along with me.
Smiles and hugs, Carol
-
Hmmmm. I know you've got another plan for that scenario! You always surprise me!
-
Me a plan? I hardly know where this one is going but I know it will be a dark place for sure. Got to write it wuick just so I don't scare off the good ghosts lurking around myy house.... and no plumber yet. They say maybe tomorrow.
Comment from royowen
How fascinating you are creating an intensity in your writing that sets the scene for the mystery surrounding the dream that Fiona had, s many dreams have and beg for an interpretation, but so many aren't literal, but the pregnant, test, no one tests unless they have a reason. Beautifully written Carol, blessings Roy
reply by the author on 16-Oct-2024
|
How fascinating you are creating an intensity in your writing that sets the scene for the mystery surrounding the dream that Fiona had, s many dreams have and beg for an interpretation, but so many aren't literal, but the pregnant, test, no one tests unless they have a reason. Beautifully written Carol, blessings Roy
Comment Written 16-Oct-2024
reply by the author on 16-Oct-2024
-
thank you, Roy! This one is a little harder for me to write because I'm not use to one of my characters being psycho and the other one we are sure of.... I don't want to reveal too much but I need to keep the reader on the edge. Appreciate your comments so much.
Smiles, Carol
-
Most imaginative Carol,
Comment from Teri7
Oh wow! This is a very spooky ending to this chapter. You used great descriptive words and imagery. I could see this unfolding as I read each word. Great job! love and blessings, teri
reply by the author on 16-Oct-2024
|
Oh wow! This is a very spooky ending to this chapter. You used great descriptive words and imagery. I could see this unfolding as I read each word. Great job! love and blessings, teri
Comment Written 16-Oct-2024
reply by the author on 16-Oct-2024
-
Thanks, Teri! I think this whole story is spooky. LOL Not my genre but something different to amuse the readers who get bored with my other writing. Thank you as always.
Smiles, Carol
Comment from Ric Myworld
I immensely enjoy everything you write, but I have to say, I like this new story about as well as any you've written. It's different than most, or at least its having two jealous-hearted sisters pitted against each other. Maybe? LOL. Thanks for sharing.
reply by the author on 16-Oct-2024
|
I immensely enjoy everything you write, but I have to say, I like this new story about as well as any you've written. It's different than most, or at least its having two jealous-hearted sisters pitted against each other. Maybe? LOL. Thanks for sharing.
Comment Written 16-Oct-2024
reply by the author on 16-Oct-2024
-
So you want me to write about cat-fights, do you? What happened to the romantic Ric... or you want romance and the thrill of the action. LOL thank you so much for enjoying the story. It's not usually me but there is enough mystery to make it me.
smiles, Carol
-
This seems a little out of character for you, which makes me anxious to see where you take it. What would the world be without romance, but the thrill of action with a touch of naughty is like polishing the green off brass. :-) Hugs, Ric
-
Oh now that sounds like fun...work up a little sweat with the scrubbing.
Comment from pome lover
I am mentally hearing that music from Twilight Zone, duh duh duh duh, duh duh duh duh. I kept thinking Fiona would leap from the wheelchair with a knife ..., or maybe get up,slowly, from the wheelchair with a wicked grin.
However, I'll have to wait until the next chapter. sigh. :)
Suspenseful!!! write fast :)
Katharine
reply by the author on 16-Oct-2024
|
I am mentally hearing that music from Twilight Zone, duh duh duh duh, duh duh duh duh. I kept thinking Fiona would leap from the wheelchair with a knife ..., or maybe get up,slowly, from the wheelchair with a wicked grin.
However, I'll have to wait until the next chapter. sigh. :)
Suspenseful!!! write fast :)
Katharine
Comment Written 16-Oct-2024
reply by the author on 16-Oct-2024
-
Thanks for making me laugh, Katherine. Yes, Fiona is a bit on the wierd and wacky side, but I don't actually trust that Sharice is telling the entire truth either. thanks so much and I shall try to write very fast...it's the reading and reviewing to get the $$ that slows me down.
Smiles, Carol
-
well, i hope old Peyton is still with the living. Take your time. waiting builds the suspense! :)
Comment from barbara.wilkey
Fiona appears to be losing it. I can't imagine what is going to happen next. I don't believe Sharice killed Peyton. I'm not 100% sure he's dead. Hmm. Can't wait to read more.
and sobbed, "It can't be!" (sobbed.)
Fiona's voice was icy cold when she spoke. "It was real. (spoke,)
"Detective, please come in." Her voice was barely a whisper. (in," her voice)
"Enough, ladies." Detective Harris interjected. (ladies,")
"But -- it was so real." Fiona's voice broke. (real,")
Her voice was bitter. "Have you done something to (bitter,)
This rating does not count towards story rating or author rank.
The highest and the lowest rating are not included in calculations.
reply by the author on 16-Oct-2024
|
Fiona appears to be losing it. I can't imagine what is going to happen next. I don't believe Sharice killed Peyton. I'm not 100% sure he's dead. Hmm. Can't wait to read more.
and sobbed, "It can't be!" (sobbed.)
Fiona's voice was icy cold when she spoke. "It was real. (spoke,)
"Detective, please come in." Her voice was barely a whisper. (in," her voice)
"Enough, ladies." Detective Harris interjected. (ladies,")
"But -- it was so real." Fiona's voice broke. (real,")
Her voice was bitter. "Have you done something to (bitter,)
This rating does not count towards story rating or author rank.
The highest and the lowest rating are not included in calculations.
Comment Written 16-Oct-2024
reply by the author on 16-Oct-2024
-
This one is a difficult one to write and keep all the things secret because I only want it to be a short one - two weeks or so. Both Sharice and Fiona have their secrets and neither is being truthful with the Detective. Thanks for pointing out the obvious to me again. (Fixed)
Smiles, Carol
Comment from Marilyn Hamilton
ok so Sharice WAS with Peyton? She isn't looking trustworthy right now. But I'm also not so sure that Fiona is dealing with a full deck. Good chapter, Carol. Keep us guessing!
This rating does not count towards story rating or author rank.
The highest and the lowest rating are not included in calculations.
reply by the author on 16-Oct-2024
|
ok so Sharice WAS with Peyton? She isn't looking trustworthy right now. But I'm also not so sure that Fiona is dealing with a full deck. Good chapter, Carol. Keep us guessing!
This rating does not count towards story rating or author rank.
The highest and the lowest rating are not included in calculations.
Comment Written 16-Oct-2024
reply by the author on 16-Oct-2024
-
Neither one of the sisters is telling the full truth and yes, Fiona seems a little off the mark. thanks so much for reading and reviewing. Appreciate it very much.
Smiles, Carol
Comment from papa55mike
There are several questions both sisters will have to answer. One is, does Fiona really have to be in that wheelchair? Please check this line: gaze to Fiona. (")You need to think carefully. Add the quotation mark. What a wonderfully written chapter. Best of luck with your book! Have a great day, and God bless.
mike
reply by the author on 16-Oct-2024
 |
There are several questions both sisters will have to answer. One is, does Fiona really have to be in that wheelchair? Please check this line: gaze to Fiona. (")You need to think carefully. Add the quotation mark. What a wonderfully written chapter. Best of luck with your book! Have a great day, and God bless.
mike
Comment Written 16-Oct-2024
reply by the author on 16-Oct-2024
-
Thanks so much for catching that quote mark, Mike. I so appreciate the help. My eyes always can use it. And I sincerely thank you for the review and the stars. How generous of you. Have a great day!
Smiles and hugs, Carol
Comment from Esther Brown
Yes I know, I gave you a six anyways because the only error was quotation before you need. I think I am the first reviewer so you can fix. Question: You mentioned I repeated parts of my story in one of your reviews. Is that OK on fan story? Esther
reply by the author on 16-Oct-2024
|
Yes I know, I gave you a six anyways because the only error was quotation before you need. I think I am the first reviewer so you can fix. Question: You mentioned I repeated parts of my story in one of your reviews. Is that OK on fan story? Esther
Comment Written 16-Oct-2024
reply by the author on 16-Oct-2024
-
I don't have any problem with it. I just meant that your story had made an impression on me and I recalled some of your past. You have lived quite the life, Esther. No way would I be able to do what you have done. thank you so much for being so kind.
Smiles and hugs, Carol