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Barefoot In The Rain

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An unexpected accident brings unexpected thoughts

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Comment from Jacob1395
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I could clearly see the spark already between Kendra and the man on the train, even though they only met for a brief few moments. It'll be really interesting to see what happens next and if she does meet him again. This could be another great start to a novel. I enjoyed reading it.

 Comment Written 28-Sep-2024


reply by the author on 28-Sep-2024
    thanks, Jacob! I've had so many ask me to continue the story. I was really surprised. I might do a short book during October because I have another book the third in the series in mind for the November contest. Can't believe I am thinking ahead that far already.
    Smiles, Carol
Comment from Ric Myworld
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Well, I'm guess I'm a little slow, but why in the world would it matter if she wore shoes or not? I mean, it's that much less to have to take off. LOL. Okay, now I'm being bad. Great job a always! Thanks for sharing.

 Comment Written 27-Sep-2024


reply by the author on 27-Sep-2024
    You are being bad! Truthful but bad! LOL but I would never expect anything less of you. Thanks as always for stopping by and leaving me with a smile.
    Smiles, Carol
Comment from BethShelby
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This is cute story. It reminds me of times I lost a heel and had to take my shoes off and go bare-footed. I used to wear really skinny heels to work. Remember those grates in the street of drainage areas. You could never step on them wearing high heels. I never met a man that way though, but I've broken more than one heel.

 Comment Written 27-Sep-2024


reply by the author on 27-Sep-2024
    Yes, that's what came to mind when I was writing the story. I had an idea of continuing the story and he showed up the next day minus shoes...My mind is crazy!
    Smiles, Carol
Comment from barbara.wilkey
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New beginnings. I enjoyed reading this very short post. You could expand this into a beautiful romance novel. I see it developing. I do hope you follow through.

 Comment Written 27-Sep-2024


reply by the author on 27-Sep-2024
    Thanks, Barbara. I was tempted to write a follow up with the man showing up the next day minus his shoes. LOl
    Thanks again.
    Smiles, Carol
reply by barbara.wilkey on 28-Sep-2024
    It would be adorable, if that happened. I can see a barefoot wedding in their future.
reply by the author on 28-Sep-2024
    LOL I hadn't thought of that.... as a surprise, everyone showed up with no shoes...LOl
reply by barbara.wilkey on 28-Sep-2024
    I think it would make for an adorable story.
Comment from Sanku
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I loved it .I love romance anc happy ending or hopeful.ending. May bevbecause reality is too harsh .The romance will bloom.inthe train .I hope you'd write a next chapter!!

 Comment Written 27-Sep-2024


reply by the author on 27-Sep-2024
    I thought about writing another chapter...Maybe he would show up on the train minus his shoes. LOL
    Smiles, Carol
Comment from Harry Craft
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Breathless, Kendra looked up into sparkling blue eyes. Oh, there comes the romantic again Carol. I see you have some of it too lol! I really enjoyed this short but precise story. Keep up the great work!

 Comment Written 27-Sep-2024


reply by the author on 27-Sep-2024
    I'm not real good at putting the romance into words though...I do it once in a while but mostof the time it's in my heart. Thanks so much, Harry.
    Smiles, Carol
Comment from Karen Cherry Threadgill
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Honey bunch you are on a tear. I broke my rule again for you. This was just perfect. I would not change one single solitary thing. I adored it. If we were not similar in age, I would say I want to be you when I grow up! Fanatastic stuff. A nosey question, who are you leaving your writings to when you depart? I am leaving my stuff to my youngest who writes himself. So far. Make sure you give it to someone who will cherish it. I think my kid will be shocked at some of the stuff he did not know about. If some poor soul that I was kind to, who just happens to have bookoos of money dies without family and leaves it all to me. I will set up a better site. One with blind readers from publishing houses, poetry sites, true life magazines. and such. With a big section for humor, horror and crime. Just saying..Karen

 Comment Written 27-Sep-2024


reply by the author on 27-Sep-2024
    You've got to the best! You are spoiling me with all the flattery and the stars.... (Don't stop though). I am thrilled that you are enjoying my efforts and my memories. Thank you over and over.
    Smiles, Carol
reply by Karen Cherry Threadgill on 28-Sep-2024
    You are my hero in the writing department. :-)
reply by the author on 28-Sep-2024
    You are too kind! But I love it!
reply by Karen Cherry Threadgill on 28-Sep-2024
    :-)
Comment from lyenochka
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This feels like the start of a sweet romance novel. It got me wondering more about who the lady is and who the hero is. I think more would be revealed in future chapters!

 Comment Written 27-Sep-2024


reply by the author on 27-Sep-2024
    Are you tempting me, Helen? I don't know how good I would be about writing a romance novel. I'm really sappy as we all know. but it is a thought to consider.
    Smiles, Carol
reply by lyenochka on 27-Sep-2024
    I'm not tempting you - I thought you already wrote it! You're always so good at writing about emotions and senses.
Comment from Julie Helms
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This is SO romantic!! A beautifully done flash story with a funny premise (the broken heel). You may now go ahead and write the whole novel 'cause I want to see this happily ever after in action!
Julie
:-)

 Comment Written 27-Sep-2024


reply by the author on 27-Sep-2024
    Temptation, huh? though I don't know how well I would write a romance novel...it might get too sappy if I wasn't killing someone now and then. LOL
    Smiles, Carol
Comment from Carol Hillebrenner
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Good flash fiction. You got a whole story in a very few words. Kendra wanted to get home but almost didn't make the train. Her savior turned out to have great blue eyes and she planned to be wearing shoes when she met him on the morrow.

 Comment Written 26-Sep-2024


reply by the author on 27-Sep-2024
    Oh Wow! Aren't you treating me to cake and ice cream! How lovely to receive a six on this flash. It was just something that popped into my head and I ran with it. I am thrilled that you enjoyed it. Thanks so much.
    Smiles, Carol