Anatomy of a Marriage
Viewing comments for Chapter 3 "Anatomy of a Marriage Ch.3"A story of a couple whose marriage is in trouble.
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Comment from Wendy G
Oh, this is not looking good for Marsha. Her husband is not showing any love at all, and is subtly turning the blame onto her for questioning him. Looking forward to more.
Wendy
reply by the author on 21-Sep-2024
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Oh, this is not looking good for Marsha. Her husband is not showing any love at all, and is subtly turning the blame onto her for questioning him. Looking forward to more.
Wendy
Comment Written 16-Sep-2024
reply by the author on 21-Sep-2024
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Thank you for the review, Wendy. I appreciate your comments.
Beth
Comment from Wayne Fowler
Well done. Nice plot movement.
I'm need to think about what to do about this." - (I need to...)
You wrote Joey's dialogue just right.
Best wishes.
reply by the author on 21-Sep-2024
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Well done. Nice plot movement.
I'm need to think about what to do about this." - (I need to...)
You wrote Joey's dialogue just right.
Best wishes.
Comment Written 15-Sep-2024
reply by the author on 21-Sep-2024
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Thank you, Wayne, I appreciate the review and comments.
Beth
Comment from Dolly'sPoems
I felt the desperation here of a wife betrayed as she analyses her own behaviour, and we often blame ourselves for these situations when we are innocent in it all. Another fine chapter here Beth, love Dolly x x x
reply by the author on 11-Oct-2024
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I felt the desperation here of a wife betrayed as she analyses her own behaviour, and we often blame ourselves for these situations when we are innocent in it all. Another fine chapter here Beth, love Dolly x x x
Comment Written 15-Sep-2024
reply by the author on 11-Oct-2024
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Thank you, Dolly, I'm glad you are feeling the betrayal I was trying to convey.
Beth
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Thank you, Dolly, I'm glad you are feeling the betrayal I was trying to convey.
Beth
Comment from Marilyn Hamilton
I am hoping he is working on some sort of surprise for his wife with that woman but it seems like he has guilty motives. Good pace to the story. Thanks for sharing.
reply by the author on 11-Oct-2024
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I am hoping he is working on some sort of surprise for his wife with that woman but it seems like he has guilty motives. Good pace to the story. Thanks for sharing.
Comment Written 15-Sep-2024
reply by the author on 11-Oct-2024
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Thank you, Marilyn, this is based on my friend's marriage, and it may turn out the way you hope unless I decide to really fictionalize it.
Beth
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Thank you, Marilyn, this is based on my friend's marriage, and it may turn out the way you hope unless I decide to really fictionalize it.
Beth
Comment from Debbie D'Arcy
I'm enjoying this story and it's building up nicely. I find myself increasingly disliking Trenton so it's equally reassuring to read that Marsha is not going to be taking this lying down. Great hook at the end too. A couple of edits below. Thanks for sharing, Beth. Take care Debbie
The(y) were laughing...
jud(g)ment (this is an odd one and can be spelt with an 'e' in the UK but in the US without)
reply by the author on 16-Sep-2024
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I'm enjoying this story and it's building up nicely. I find myself increasingly disliking Trenton so it's equally reassuring to read that Marsha is not going to be taking this lying down. Great hook at the end too. A couple of edits below. Thanks for sharing, Beth. Take care Debbie
The(y) were laughing...
jud(g)ment (this is an odd one and can be spelt with an 'e' in the UK but in the US without)
Comment Written 15-Sep-2024
reply by the author on 16-Sep-2024
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Thank you, Debbie. I'm pleased you like my story. I enjoyed reading you review.
Beth
Comment from Spitfire
This is the first chapter I've tuned into and I must say it caught my interest and I look forward to the next chapter. I'll try to find time to read chapters one and two.
reply by the author on 15-Sep-2024
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This is the first chapter I've tuned into and I must say it caught my interest and I look forward to the next chapter. I'll try to find time to read chapters one and two.
Comment Written 15-Sep-2024
reply by the author on 15-Sep-2024
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Thank you. I started this for the first chapter contest. Chapter two is still active until tomorrow.
Comment from Rachelle Allen
Oh my!! I'm new to this book, but I am definitely intrigued and want to read the next chapter. First, though, I will catch up on the previous ones! This is well done, Beth! You keep the plot flowing and have dialogue that is well-paced and necessary. Nothing humdrum or dull, and that's not always easy. I'm glad I came across this!! xoxo
reply by the author on 11-Oct-2024
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Oh my!! I'm new to this book, but I am definitely intrigued and want to read the next chapter. First, though, I will catch up on the previous ones! This is well done, Beth! You keep the plot flowing and have dialogue that is well-paced and necessary. Nothing humdrum or dull, and that's not always easy. I'm glad I came across this!! xoxo
Comment Written 15-Sep-2024
reply by the author on 11-Oct-2024
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Thank you, Rachelle, I appreciate you deciding to check my story out.
Beth
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Thank you, Rachelle, I appreciate you deciding to check my story out.
Beth
Comment from Begin Again
Hmmm...it appears the partners might know something...or maybe the woman is his wife...oh no! big mistake if it is. Great chapter in the story, Beth.
Smiles, Carol
reply by the author on 15-Sep-2024
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Hmmm...it appears the partners might know something...or maybe the woman is his wife...oh no! big mistake if it is. Great chapter in the story, Beth.
Smiles, Carol
Comment Written 15-Sep-2024
reply by the author on 15-Sep-2024
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Thank you, Carol. I'll tell you like you tell me. You'll just have to wait and see. LOL
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LOL
Comment from jim vecchio
Your story is progressing well. One tiny typo: "it is eats away", otherwise, fine. I wonder if you should have shown her actually going into the lingerie shop and Jaredd's, to make it even more dramatic. Even though this tale takes place in my new home grounds, I am thankful my wife and I had a thoroughly honest relationship and I am thankful adultery was not part of it.
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reply by the author on 17-Sep-2024
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Your story is progressing well. One tiny typo: "it is eats away", otherwise, fine. I wonder if you should have shown her actually going into the lingerie shop and Jaredd's, to make it even more dramatic. Even though this tale takes place in my new home grounds, I am thankful my wife and I had a thoroughly honest relationship and I am thankful adultery was not part of it.
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Comment Written 15-Sep-2024
reply by the author on 17-Sep-2024
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Thank you, Jim. I appreciate you continuing to read it. You and I are fortunate we didn't have to worry about that with our mates.
Beth
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Yes. I never thought I would be that blessed.
Comment from patcelaw
It is a terrible thing when we suspect a spouse cheating on us. I enjoyed your story very much reads very well when it is read aloud your sentence structure your punctuation and your paragraph is all done very well. Patricia.
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reply by the author on 17-Sep-2024
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It is a terrible thing when we suspect a spouse cheating on us. I enjoyed your story very much reads very well when it is read aloud your sentence structure your punctuation and your paragraph is all done very well. Patricia.
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Comment Written 15-Sep-2024
reply by the author on 17-Sep-2024
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Thank you, Patricia I was convinced my husband would never do that I was jealous of him. Jealous will eat you up.
Beth