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Acrostic poem of betrayal20 total reviews
Comment from Ulla
You were blinded by words and bliss, then let into confusion only to be let down,
This is a great poem for the betrayal poetry contest. All the best of luck. Ulla xcx
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You were blinded by words and bliss, then let into confusion only to be let down,
This is a great poem for the betrayal poetry contest. All the best of luck. Ulla xcx
Comment Written 30-Sep-2024
Comment from Pam (respa)
-Nice image and good presentation.
-You did a good job with highlighting
the topic and formatting the poem.
-With a few words you get across
the pain of being betrayed.
-Good opening lines show how
you had been "blinded by bliss."
-The alliteration emphasizes that feeling very well.
-As the poem continues, you show how
deep the pain is because this person has
betrayed you many times, and then laughs each time.
-Very well done, congratulations on the milestone,
and good luck in the contest.
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-Nice image and good presentation.
-You did a good job with highlighting
the topic and formatting the poem.
-With a few words you get across
the pain of being betrayed.
-Good opening lines show how
you had been "blinded by bliss."
-The alliteration emphasizes that feeling very well.
-As the poem continues, you show how
deep the pain is because this person has
betrayed you many times, and then laughs each time.
-Very well done, congratulations on the milestone,
and good luck in the contest.
Comment Written 30-Sep-2024
Comment from dragonpoet
Hi Me and Erin G
Welcome to the site.
This is a good acrostic poem that tells of giving a person a second chance thinking they had changed and finding you were wrong. Twice betrayed.
Good luck in the contest.
Keep writing and stay healthy
Have a great day.
Joan
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Hi Me and Erin G
Welcome to the site.
This is a good acrostic poem that tells of giving a person a second chance thinking they had changed and finding you were wrong. Twice betrayed.
Good luck in the contest.
Keep writing and stay healthy
Have a great day.
Joan
Comment Written 30-Sep-2024
Comment from royowen
I think one has to watch out with relationships, they can go south, after initially seemed ideal, but it reality they aren't, beautifully written, welcome to fanstory, I'm sure you'll love it here, well done, blessings Roy
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I think one has to watch out with relationships, they can go south, after initially seemed ideal, but it reality they aren't, beautifully written, welcome to fanstory, I'm sure you'll love it here, well done, blessings Roy
Comment Written 30-Sep-2024
Comment from talented150
Very unusual poetry, but I liked it. I think I got what you were saying. You were happy in the beginning, but then she yanked your heart out and laughed about it. I hope that's right. The message of hurt did come through well.
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Very unusual poetry, but I liked it. I think I got what you were saying. You were happy in the beginning, but then she yanked your heart out and laughed about it. I hope that's right. The message of hurt did come through well.
Comment Written 30-Sep-2024
Comment from patcelaw
This is a very well written across the poem across the are very hard to write, but you have done a good job with it. I wish you the very best with all of your writing. Congratulations on becoming a first time poster for fan story and I am looking forward to seeing more of your work. Patricia.
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This is a very well written across the poem across the are very hard to write, but you have done a good job with it. I wish you the very best with all of your writing. Congratulations on becoming a first time poster for fan story and I am looking forward to seeing more of your work. Patricia.
Comment Written 15-Sep-2024
Comment from jessizero
Congratulations on your first milestone post! You did a great job with this acrostic poem on betrayal. It's something to which I think many of us can relate. The part about laughing again broke my heart. Thank you for sharing, and best wishes to you.
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Congratulations on your first milestone post! You did a great job with this acrostic poem on betrayal. It's something to which I think many of us can relate. The part about laughing again broke my heart. Thank you for sharing, and best wishes to you.
Comment Written 15-Sep-2024
Comment from Begin Again
Congratulations on yuor post - a milestone - the first of many I hope as you write and explore FanStory. Welcome and best of luck. I could feel the pain and sorrow as betrayal is inflicted time and time again.
Smiles, Carol
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Congratulations on yuor post - a milestone - the first of many I hope as you write and explore FanStory. Welcome and best of luck. I could feel the pain and sorrow as betrayal is inflicted time and time again.
Smiles, Carol
Comment Written 15-Sep-2024
Comment from Nicki.B
Big well done on your first poem other platform and welcome!
This is a great poem about betrayal, it has its own unique style and captures the betrayal of a heart beautifully.
Best of luck with the contest!
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Big well done on your first poem other platform and welcome!
This is a great poem about betrayal, it has its own unique style and captures the betrayal of a heart beautifully.
Best of luck with the contest!
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Comment Written 15-Sep-2024
Comment from Michael Ludwinder
Congrats on your first post! It hits with such intensity! The acrostic is so natural. No word seems forced. You capture a deep sense of betrayal and repeated hurt. Your emotions really are felt in your writing. This is a well written and wonderful first post!
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Congrats on your first post! It hits with such intensity! The acrostic is so natural. No word seems forced. You capture a deep sense of betrayal and repeated hurt. Your emotions really are felt in your writing. This is a well written and wonderful first post!
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Comment Written 14-Sep-2024