Parts are Parts
Parts of my Body are...Part Fiction~Part Non-Fiction50 total reviews
Comment from Pam Lonsdale
This sentence: Yet, one thing that I've kept from him, he's never head me... Where did this come from? It doesn't rhyme when everything else does and I don't understand what you're telling us here.
There's a little sadness and regret, and a tinge of humor here, Debi. It's all part of your unique way of dealing with the many curve balls life - your body - have thrown at you.
Congratulations on the win for this contest, and keep on truckin'.
xoxo
Pam
reply by the author on 14-Sep-2024
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This sentence: Yet, one thing that I've kept from him, he's never head me... Where did this come from? It doesn't rhyme when everything else does and I don't understand what you're telling us here.
There's a little sadness and regret, and a tinge of humor here, Debi. It's all part of your unique way of dealing with the many curve balls life - your body - have thrown at you.
Congratulations on the win for this contest, and keep on truckin'.
xoxo
Pam
Comment Written 14-Sep-2024
reply by the author on 14-Sep-2024
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Hahaha. Pam, you read that wrong. You read it as he never head me.... no wonder that doesn't make sense. It reads, yet, one thing that I kept from him, he's never heard me ..... rhymes with heart... please tell me you get the humor here. I am shy. Honestly!! And like I said, part fiction. I am not shaped like the letter O. Haha.
LOL, this was called body, and I have been dealing with mine fighting me since I was poisoned with the DES that my mom took at birth. I used this poem as a fun way to laugh about it rather than continue to cry.
Like you, I am dreading 70 this year, but I keep getting the message from mine that so much is wrong already, I don't know how much time God plans to give me. At least you have a fit and strong body and I am happy for you. Happier than you know. And my time here helps me so much.
This latest deal with my eyes has been so hard. Oh hon, every day at the eye doctor. Yesterday he told Glen that he loses sleep over me. Now they are saying they will most likely skip the stem cell and go right to the cornea transplant because another infection just broke out and the abrasions are so layered that it will be months to get those healed. But they don't want to do it until they get the abrasions healed. So he doesn't know how it won't be scarred. Yesterday, after being so brave thru this for over a month of daily appointments, I just sat down and cried.
Today I am fine and going forward. Love you, sis. You have been a shining star to me since we found each other. Please tell me we can find a way to celebrate again somehow, even if we just toast each other at a certain time with a glass of wine. Love ya so much!! Debi
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No, I read it right. So, you're leaving out the word "fart"? That's what I didn't get. I didn't see the ellipsis the first time around.
Okay, got it!
Comment from June Sargent
I, for one, can empathize. I have two titanium hips! And as much as I hate the pain, am reluctant to have surgery on my shoulder. Eyes are bad and kidneys are sluggish. Will just live with them. As long as I can read and write, I'll survive - thanks for sharing your story!
reply by the author on 14-Sep-2024
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I, for one, can empathize. I have two titanium hips! And as much as I hate the pain, am reluctant to have surgery on my shoulder. Eyes are bad and kidneys are sluggish. Will just live with them. As long as I can read and write, I'll survive - thanks for sharing your story!
Comment Written 14-Sep-2024
reply by the author on 14-Sep-2024
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Hi June, I really appreciate your kind comments. This was meant to be mostly fun and some is fiction. Like my body is not shaped like the letter o. LOL.. Thanks again, dear friend. Love, Debi
Comment from jaded831
You made me laugh hall through the poem. Now in my sixties, I can totally relate. I especially enjoyed, "my eyes are having trouble and they don't see very clear, the positive in that is I can't see myself in the mirror.
reply by the author on 14-Sep-2024
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You made me laugh hall through the poem. Now in my sixties, I can totally relate. I especially enjoyed, "my eyes are having trouble and they don't see very clear, the positive in that is I can't see myself in the mirror.
Comment Written 14-Sep-2024
reply by the author on 14-Sep-2024
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Hi there Jade, wow, thank you and I am so touched by your six stars.
I really appreciate your kind comments. This was meant to be mostly fun and some is fiction. Like my body is not shaped like the letter o. LOL..
Thanks again, dear friend. Love, Debi
Comment from Mrs. KT
Humor as we age is essential, Debi!
Cute play on words.
Congratulations on your win...
Please note the following:
I know when its (it's) my time to go, my eyes will have to wait
Two suggestions here:
The positive in that I can't see myself in the mirror
1. The positive in that? I can't see myself in the mirror
or
2. The positive is that I can't see myself in the mirror.
Thanks for sharing
diane
reply by the author on 14-Sep-2024
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Humor as we age is essential, Debi!
Cute play on words.
Congratulations on your win...
Please note the following:
I know when its (it's) my time to go, my eyes will have to wait
Two suggestions here:
The positive in that I can't see myself in the mirror
1. The positive in that? I can't see myself in the mirror
or
2. The positive is that I can't see myself in the mirror.
Thanks for sharing
diane
Comment Written 14-Sep-2024
reply by the author on 14-Sep-2024
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Ooops, thanks for catching that error. I looked at your suggestion and kept thinking that is what I had said, but there is an in instead of is. I meant it to be an is. So thank you, Diane. I really appreciate it.
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My pleasure, but don't forget:
"...when its (it's) my time to go..."
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LOL, THANK YOU!!
So very much.
Comment from jessizero
I really enjoyed this "my body" poem for the writing prompt. I can see why you won! Congratulations. I loved your rhymes. Thank you for sharing, and best wishes to you.
reply by the author on 14-Sep-2024
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I really enjoyed this "my body" poem for the writing prompt. I can see why you won! Congratulations. I loved your rhymes. Thank you for sharing, and best wishes to you.
Comment Written 14-Sep-2024
reply by the author on 14-Sep-2024
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Jesse, I just love when you review me. You are so sweet and one of my favorites. I think it is because when I am answering and thanking you, I always have a big smile on my face. You do that to me. Your comments and your picture. So thanks, Sweetie. Lotsa love and hug! Debi
Comment from tempeste
Ciao poet, you now have 11 votes.
I enjoyed the humour.
Getting old is tough when everything starts to fall part : weight gain, hair loss, sight loss etc.
But it can get worse if healthy issues arise ( sigh)
I would be scared to do surgery.
reply by the author on 14-Sep-2024
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Ciao poet, you now have 11 votes.
I enjoyed the humour.
Getting old is tough when everything starts to fall part : weight gain, hair loss, sight loss etc.
But it can get worse if healthy issues arise ( sigh)
I would be scared to do surgery.
Comment Written 14-Sep-2024
reply by the author on 14-Sep-2024
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Ciao Tempeste, and I thank you for this lovely review and dear comments.
You are so kind and always fun. Thank you for your vote too!
So appreciated!
Comment from Bethany Knaff
Lovely, haunting topic, the aa bb cc etc rhyme scheme gives it a childlike quality that somehow makes it more heartfelt. The fun turn of phrase at the end with dilate/ die late is a good hard stop ending
reply by the author on 14-Sep-2024
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Lovely, haunting topic, the aa bb cc etc rhyme scheme gives it a childlike quality that somehow makes it more heartfelt. The fun turn of phrase at the end with dilate/ die late is a good hard stop ending
Comment Written 14-Sep-2024
reply by the author on 14-Sep-2024
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Hi Bethany, let me be the first to welcome you. I hope you will be happy here. I do have to let you know that when giving a four star that erases a six star and you should give an explanation of what you think they could improve on. If you didn't mean to give that, you can change it and save.
Thank you for your lovely comments.
Comment from Boogienights
I love this and completely relate. I feel like I'm falling apart and that's truly horrific! My greatest wish is to be twenty again, just for a day...so l can remember how it felt. Best of luck in the contest. :)
reply by the author on 14-Sep-2024
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I love this and completely relate. I feel like I'm falling apart and that's truly horrific! My greatest wish is to be twenty again, just for a day...so l can remember how it felt. Best of luck in the contest. :)
Comment Written 14-Sep-2024
reply by the author on 14-Sep-2024
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Sharon. Wow, I am so honored that you gave me a six. Thank you so very much. This has been a fun piece to write so it makes it a fun piece to thank for reviews. Thank you again for the stars.
Comment from pome lover
cute, cute, cute! and veddy clevah! love the last line especially, and others, of course.
I Have lost four inches in my spine, so I know what you mean. I need to get on one of those things they strap you on and turn you upside down. It would be nice to feel stretched out, even for a few minutes.
I never would've thought of Mirror to rhyme with clear, unless, of course, if you say, "mir," which I guess some people do. Anyway, poetic license!
Good luck in the contest.
Katharine
reply by the author on 14-Sep-2024
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cute, cute, cute! and veddy clevah! love the last line especially, and others, of course.
I Have lost four inches in my spine, so I know what you mean. I need to get on one of those things they strap you on and turn you upside down. It would be nice to feel stretched out, even for a few minutes.
I never would've thought of Mirror to rhyme with clear, unless, of course, if you say, "mir," which I guess some people do. Anyway, poetic license!
Good luck in the contest.
Katharine
Comment Written 14-Sep-2024
reply by the author on 14-Sep-2024
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Hahahahahahaha. Kay. If you look in notes I claim a little poetic license to rhyme clear with mirror because where I come from our language says it in one syllable. Everyone I know pronounces mirror as mear. Don't ask me why but I know better, but still do it. LOL... so it is a language barrier between our areas, my friend. And I know who is doing it wrong. ME!! Hahaha.
Thanks for your kind words tho. Also my husband has a teeter, that you flip up and it cracks your back and everything. Got it from amazon. Called a teeter. I hate it cause it takes up so much room, and plus I can't use it because I have lots of hardware in my back after two major spine surgeries.
Thanks for the fun comments. I was just having some fun with you tho.
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aha. didn't know it was you - don't think it had your name. or if it did, was just kidding about "mear." :)
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LOL, I was going to joke and say that in the northern states we are a bunch of Scandinavians who say everything different than Texas drawl and just be teasing you. But I was afraid you would know who I was. No, this was blind. So thanks again, sweetie. I miss ya all!
Hahaha! I really do.
Comment from Bill Schott
This poem, Parts are Parts, is funny in a dad-joke way that makes the reader wince a bit as the punch line rolls by. I must site you for a missing word --- FART!!!
reply by the author on 13-Sep-2024
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This poem, Parts are Parts, is funny in a dad-joke way that makes the reader wince a bit as the punch line rolls by. I must site you for a missing word --- FART!!!
Comment Written 13-Sep-2024
reply by the author on 13-Sep-2024
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Oh no, Bill, please tell me you aren't siting me for missing a word. But the truth is I am so shy. LOL.
I just can't say the word. Haha.
Thanks for having some fun with me on this poem. You're so much fun.