Willing Hearts
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Comment from Debbie D'Arcy
I like the tension build-up with Jasper and, of course, he did a fine job with Noah as back-up. I'm wondering how seriously injured the immigrant was (perhaps that could be included?). Otherwise, your story reads well and engagingly, albeit I think it could have been edited down a bit more. One edit: first line - before (pre)dawn - 'pre' isn't necessary as it's a duplication of 'before.'
Thanks for sharing your excellent story, Barbara. Debbie
reply by the author on 02-Sep-2024
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I like the tension build-up with Jasper and, of course, he did a fine job with Noah as back-up. I'm wondering how seriously injured the immigrant was (perhaps that could be included?). Otherwise, your story reads well and engagingly, albeit I think it could have been edited down a bit more. One edit: first line - before (pre)dawn - 'pre' isn't necessary as it's a duplication of 'before.'
Thanks for sharing your excellent story, Barbara. Debbie
Comment Written 02-Sep-2024
reply by the author on 02-Sep-2024
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I'll see if I can fix that. I see what you're saying but I meant predawn hadn't started yet. I see the confusion. Thank you for the kind review.
Comment from Sankey
Another excellent read. So glad Galvin appreciates the usefulness of Jasper and is willing to assist with his meds. Just one small spag. Guarding a person in protect(ive) custody
reply by the author on 02-Sep-2024
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Another excellent read. So glad Galvin appreciates the usefulness of Jasper and is willing to assist with his meds. Just one small spag. Guarding a person in protect(ive) custody
Comment Written 02-Sep-2024
reply by the author on 02-Sep-2024
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Thank you for the kind review.
Comment from Paul McFarland
A little more excitement in this post. Good to see Jasper get in on the action. The reader is now wondering if there are going to be more illegal aliens.
reply by the author on 02-Sep-2024
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A little more excitement in this post. Good to see Jasper get in on the action. The reader is now wondering if there are going to be more illegal aliens.
Comment Written 02-Sep-2024
reply by the author on 02-Sep-2024
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Maybe more aliens. Thank you for the kind review.
Comment from Wendy G
A fine chapter. Dogs do have a sense about danger, and are pretty astute judges of character. Just as well he wasn't hurt! Sami is not afraid to say exactly what she thinks to Noah, even though she cares for him. Looking forward to more.
Wendy
reply by the author on 02-Sep-2024
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A fine chapter. Dogs do have a sense about danger, and are pretty astute judges of character. Just as well he wasn't hurt! Sami is not afraid to say exactly what she thinks to Noah, even though she cares for him. Looking forward to more.
Wendy
Comment Written 02-Sep-2024
reply by the author on 02-Sep-2024
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Thank you for the kind review. Jasper is special.
Comment from davisr (Rhonda)
So, Jasper gets to be a hero!! His nervousness lets people know there is danger outside. They let him out to go to the bathroom, and bang, he nabs him one. He also gets blood splatter from someone else trying to shoot him. Good thing they didn't let him get hurt, or there would be no end to how angry Sami would be!!
Great chapter,
Hugs,
Rhonda
reply by the author on 02-Sep-2024
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So, Jasper gets to be a hero!! His nervousness lets people know there is danger outside. They let him out to go to the bathroom, and bang, he nabs him one. He also gets blood splatter from someone else trying to shoot him. Good thing they didn't let him get hurt, or there would be no end to how angry Sami would be!!
Great chapter,
Hugs,
Rhonda
Comment Written 02-Sep-2024
reply by the author on 02-Sep-2024
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Sami wouldn't take Jasper being hurt well, that's very true. Thank you for the kind review.
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Lol, I was like, oh noooo!!!!
Comment from Carol Hillebrenner
Very good. Jasper finally got to be a hero, which he is built for, and there is a bit more humor joking about the rules and the dog's jowls. They all seem to more relaxed in their attitudes toward each other.
reply by the author on 02-Sep-2024
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Very good. Jasper finally got to be a hero, which he is built for, and there is a bit more humor joking about the rules and the dog's jowls. They all seem to more relaxed in their attitudes toward each other.
Comment Written 01-Sep-2024
reply by the author on 02-Sep-2024
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Thank you for the kind review.
Comment from judiverse
Good Boy, Jasper! I'm glad he was able to nab some of the alien intruders. Dogs do have a sense about something being amiss and can alert others, like Jasper did. Noah was right to admit his mistake when Sami reproached him for telling her and Sarah to go to bed. So Galvin came to brings Jasper's meds. It'll be interesting to see how far things go before he becomes obnoxious again. I'll be interested to see what's up with the Mayan Hieroglyphs. You're wise not to introduce something like that unless it has an important bearing on the story, but I can't figure out what it is. When you write that Jasper knocked down a person, I think you might give some identification. Tell how he was dressed, did he look threatening? Maybe tattoos indicating he was a member of a gang? Yes, making brownies helps out when there's tension. Great chapter. judi
reply by the author on 02-Sep-2024
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Good Boy, Jasper! I'm glad he was able to nab some of the alien intruders. Dogs do have a sense about something being amiss and can alert others, like Jasper did. Noah was right to admit his mistake when Sami reproached him for telling her and Sarah to go to bed. So Galvin came to brings Jasper's meds. It'll be interesting to see how far things go before he becomes obnoxious again. I'll be interested to see what's up with the Mayan Hieroglyphs. You're wise not to introduce something like that unless it has an important bearing on the story, but I can't figure out what it is. When you write that Jasper knocked down a person, I think you might give some identification. Tell how he was dressed, did he look threatening? Maybe tattoos indicating he was a member of a gang? Yes, making brownies helps out when there's tension. Great chapter. judi
Comment Written 01-Sep-2024
reply by the author on 02-Sep-2024
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Galvin messes up in next week's post, so you don't have to wait too long. Thank you for the kind review.
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You're welcome; Yes, I figured Galvin would make a fool of himself. Seems like he can't help it. judi
Comment from jim vecchio
Another great addition to your continuing saga. A bit of action, bad guys subdued, then coffee and brownies. I'd do that job just for the brownies, but SDsmi is an added bonus! Keep on astonishing us.
reply by the author on 01-Sep-2024
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Another great addition to your continuing saga. A bit of action, bad guys subdued, then coffee and brownies. I'd do that job just for the brownies, but SDsmi is an added bonus! Keep on astonishing us.
Comment Written 01-Sep-2024
reply by the author on 01-Sep-2024
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Thank you for the kind review.
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Please forgive my tardiness in replying. I have had much trouble with my wheelchair and could not spend much time on the site for a few days. I am thankful for your words and works.
Comment from Teri7
Barbara, This is a really good six-star chapter you have penned. I am so happy I have six stars to give you. This was full of excitement and great dialogue too. I was so glad Sami's dog was o.k. Great job my friend! love and blessings, Teri
I hope you are having a great time where you are at!
reply by the author on 01-Sep-2024
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Barbara, This is a really good six-star chapter you have penned. I am so happy I have six stars to give you. This was full of excitement and great dialogue too. I was so glad Sami's dog was o.k. Great job my friend! love and blessings, Teri
I hope you are having a great time where you are at!
Comment Written 01-Sep-2024
reply by the author on 01-Sep-2024
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Thank you for kind review and encouragement.
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You are so welcome!!!
Comment from BethShelby
This was an interesting chapter with some excitemnet with both the dog and Noah pacing the floor. It seems the arrest of the illigal aliens went by without much ado. I wondered why they weren't questioned. If they were Spanish that shouldn't be a problem as someone in the team speaks Spanish. I wondered where the one was shot and how badly hurt he was and how difficult it was to arrest them.
reply by the author on 01-Sep-2024
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This was an interesting chapter with some excitemnet with both the dog and Noah pacing the floor. It seems the arrest of the illigal aliens went by without much ado. I wondered why they weren't questioned. If they were Spanish that shouldn't be a problem as someone in the team speaks Spanish. I wondered where the one was shot and how badly hurt he was and how difficult it was to arrest them.
Comment Written 01-Sep-2024
reply by the author on 01-Sep-2024
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The authorities will take care of the questioning. Noah needs to stay out of it because of his situation. Thank you for the kind review.
