Spirited Justice
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Comment from Carol Clark2
I'm glad Hilda was rescued just in time, and also that Johan was arrested. Perhaps Hilda will be a little more cautious in the future, leading with her mind instead of her emotions. Good dialogue in this chapter. Blessings. Carol
reply by the author on 20-Aug-2024
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I'm glad Hilda was rescued just in time, and also that Johan was arrested. Perhaps Hilda will be a little more cautious in the future, leading with her mind instead of her emotions. Good dialogue in this chapter. Blessings. Carol
Comment Written 19-Aug-2024
reply by the author on 20-Aug-2024
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Yes, Hilda's had her nose in a book or the lab far too long and really wasn't ready for the real world and the darkness it holds. thanks for the review and your comments.
Smiles, Carol
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:} I love your comments!
Comment from Marilyn Hamilton
Oh I knew that Johan was going to try something this chapter. What a slime ball. lol Good job making someone we can hate lol thank goodness for the ghosts coming to the rescue!
reply by the author on 20-Aug-2024
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Oh I knew that Johan was going to try something this chapter. What a slime ball. lol Good job making someone we can hate lol thank goodness for the ghosts coming to the rescue!
Comment Written 19-Aug-2024
reply by the author on 20-Aug-2024
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Yes, Johan was definitely a slime ball... and I know there is more behind his story than just thinking of what he could do to Hilda. Glad Eleanor and Danni swooped in and then Donatelli gets all the credit. LOl
Smiles, Carol
Comment from Sandra Stoner-Mitchell
Poor Hilda, but thank goodness for our amazing ghosts, I say if every time, I just love Eleanor! I hope Hilda is kept safe and also her documents until her presentation tomorrow. It's so close, she has to be there in time. I'm hoping one of the ghosts will watch over her. This was a really good chapter, my friend. Loved it!! Bring on the Ghosts!! Lol Love and hugs, dear friend. :)) Sandra xxx
reply by the author on 19-Aug-2024
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Poor Hilda, but thank goodness for our amazing ghosts, I say if every time, I just love Eleanor! I hope Hilda is kept safe and also her documents until her presentation tomorrow. It's so close, she has to be there in time. I'm hoping one of the ghosts will watch over her. This was a really good chapter, my friend. Loved it!! Bring on the Ghosts!! Lol Love and hugs, dear friend. :)) Sandra xxx
Comment Written 19-Aug-2024
reply by the author on 19-Aug-2024
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Yes, Eleanor was on top of her came and Danni wasn;t far behind, though poor Matthew gets raked over the coals regardless of what he does, the girls have such an advantage over him. LOL I'm glad you enjoyed this chapter and thank you for the review. I'm having fun with the ghosts!
Smiles, Carol
Comment from barbara.wilkey
Hilde is safe. Thanks to Eleanor and Dani, well, Matthew helped a little. LOL I enjoyed reading and can't wait to read more. This is a very good write and a good story.
reply by the author on 19-Aug-2024
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Hilde is safe. Thanks to Eleanor and Dani, well, Matthew helped a little. LOL I enjoyed reading and can't wait to read more. This is a very good write and a good story.
Comment Written 19-Aug-2024
reply by the author on 19-Aug-2024
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Poor Matthew...or maybe I should say poor girls. They do all the work and he rushes in at the end and gets all the credit! I'm glad you are enjoying the story. thank you for the review and comments.
Smiles, Carol
Comment from royowen
Ah, Hilda was saved by the bell, or was that a ghost(s)? But Hilda had sworn there was two ghosts, but no Eleanor lied, she was seeing things heh heh, it's so good for two ghosts helping Donatelli with the investigations, heh heh, great chapter Carol, great job, blessings Roy
Typo : and I think they (are) still are.
reply by the author on 19-Aug-2024
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Ah, Hilda was saved by the bell, or was that a ghost(s)? But Hilda had sworn there was two ghosts, but no Eleanor lied, she was seeing things heh heh, it's so good for two ghosts helping Donatelli with the investigations, heh heh, great chapter Carol, great job, blessings Roy
Typo : and I think they (are) still are.
Comment Written 19-Aug-2024
reply by the author on 19-Aug-2024
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Fixed and thank you! It doesn't matter how many times I read and reread, I miss something. Glad I have friends to let me know. Thanks for the review and the lovely stars. I so appreciate it.
Smiles, Carol
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Most welcome Carol
Comment from lyenochka
I could actually visualize the movement of anxiety in "finding comfort and letting go of her unsettling thoughts while Eleanor added to her own."
I knew you would make the team reach Hilda in time. Great idea for Eleanor to drop Johan on his head with the rug! Poor Danni had to become invisible, although she was part of the rescue.
Calmy, Eleanor bent over (Calmly)
reply by the author on 19-Aug-2024
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I could actually visualize the movement of anxiety in "finding comfort and letting go of her unsettling thoughts while Eleanor added to her own."
I knew you would make the team reach Hilda in time. Great idea for Eleanor to drop Johan on his head with the rug! Poor Danni had to become invisible, although she was part of the rescue.
Calmy, Eleanor bent over (Calmly)
Comment Written 19-Aug-2024
reply by the author on 19-Aug-2024
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Fixed and I thank you. Doesn't matter how many times I read and reread, I miss something. Yes, that's me! I might have help swoop in with just a second to spare, but they'll be there. Good has to triumph every time.
Smiles, Carol
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That's me, too! I always need another pair of eyes to check my work! 💖
I do wish you gave a reason why the ghosts didn't go ahead of Donatelli because they could have transported themselves but I guess you needed to build the suspense.
Comment from BethShelby
So it was the research Johan was after? I thought maybe that were kidnapping girls for sex trafficing. You twists and turns and character keep me guessing.
reply by the author on 19-Aug-2024
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So it was the research Johan was after? I thought maybe that were kidnapping girls for sex trafficing. You twists and turns and character keep me guessing.
Comment Written 19-Aug-2024
reply by the author on 19-Aug-2024
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Yes...the very first girl that was murdered (her fther got put in prison for it, but he's innocent) her research was stolen but no one took notice. Bennett had the papers but he was murdered and no one knows where those papers are (yet). And now they have tried to get Hilda's research...I think a light has gone on in Eleanor's head.
Smiles, Carol
Comment from Gunner Lil
Another good chapter that is fast paced and had this reader wanting more.
The part with Hilda and Johan showed that Hilda almost stopped breathing (should have fainted} several times seemed to be redundant. This reader would have licked to know what was Hilda thinking as she went looking in the laundry basket. What did Johan have in his thoughts.
Excellent action. Thank you for sharing.
reply by the author on 19-Aug-2024
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Another good chapter that is fast paced and had this reader wanting more.
The part with Hilda and Johan showed that Hilda almost stopped breathing (should have fainted} several times seemed to be redundant. This reader would have licked to know what was Hilda thinking as she went looking in the laundry basket. What did Johan have in his thoughts.
Excellent action. Thank you for sharing.
Comment Written 19-Aug-2024
reply by the author on 19-Aug-2024
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Sorry you felt it was only worth four stars.... I'll have to try harder. Hilda has been a researcher all her life and with her nose stuck in a lab or a book, she's not too savvy when it comes to me. I think she was just highly nervous. As for Johan...I think we all know what he was thinking.
Thanks for the review and comments.
Smiles, Carol
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Should have been five. Made correction.
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Thank you so much for the thoughts and the correction. Appreciate it!
Comment from Katherine M. (k-11)
You have so many characters now, moving about on different planes it has become a complex mixture all of a sudden. I think things would benefit from a laid back chapter to put everything into place somehow. kay
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reply by the author on 19-Aug-2024
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You have so many characters now, moving about on different planes it has become a complex mixture all of a sudden. I think things would benefit from a laid back chapter to put everything into place somehow. kay
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Comment Written 19-Aug-2024
reply by the author on 19-Aug-2024
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I believe you are right and the next chapter should be doing just that.... while they piece things together and investigate. though Angelo needs to find what's up with Jose and hopefully it's not Naomi.
Smiles, Carol
Comment from Ulla
Hi Carol, so Eleanor finally came to Hilda's rescue, and at the last moment if that. Just to let you know, there's some funny signs at the start of this chapter. I don't know what's that about. Hugs, Ulla xcx
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reply by the author on 19-Aug-2024
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Hi Carol, so Eleanor finally came to Hilda's rescue, and at the last moment if that. Just to let you know, there's some funny signs at the start of this chapter. I don't know what's that about. Hugs, Ulla xcx
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Comment Written 19-Aug-2024
reply by the author on 19-Aug-2024
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Thanks for letting me know about those scribble things...I hope I got them fixed. You were my first review (THANK YOU) so maybe I got it fixed before anyone else read. Hope you are doing better now and I thank you for using your time to read my story. Appreciate it so much.
Hugs and love, Carol
