The moon creature
Everything gets hungry.29 total reviews
Comment from Rene Tyo
To portray a person eating moon creature as fun and whimsical is quite a feat. I really enjoyed this poem, the levity and fun it displays is great. I believe this will do well in the contest. Great job. Nice artwork as well, it adds to the sense of surrealism that the poem invokes.
reply by the author on 16-Aug-2024
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To portray a person eating moon creature as fun and whimsical is quite a feat. I really enjoyed this poem, the levity and fun it displays is great. I believe this will do well in the contest. Great job. Nice artwork as well, it adds to the sense of surrealism that the poem invokes.
Comment Written 16-Aug-2024
reply by the author on 16-Aug-2024
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Yep, I wanted to off-balance the reader and never let them regain equilibrium. I am happy that it carried over from my thoughts.
Comment from EeanBlack
Are they coming? Are they already here? I read a report years ago that stated that its' author thought missing people worldwide were taken by aliens. And here I was worried about securing our borders. This is a little creepy. That in itself deserves a full-throated "Hell: Yeah". I also read that there were creatures on the dark side of the moon. We nicknamed them Pink and Floyd here in the United States. The gifts that aliens can bring to a culture is amazing. Global warming anybody?
reply by the author on 16-Aug-2024
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Are they coming? Are they already here? I read a report years ago that stated that its' author thought missing people worldwide were taken by aliens. And here I was worried about securing our borders. This is a little creepy. That in itself deserves a full-throated "Hell: Yeah". I also read that there were creatures on the dark side of the moon. We nicknamed them Pink and Floyd here in the United States. The gifts that aliens can bring to a culture is amazing. Global warming anybody?
Comment Written 16-Aug-2024
reply by the author on 16-Aug-2024
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Well, a full-throated "THANKS" right back at you and from the diaphragm for added boom. Please check out The other space creature named Sandersonbleacher if you would, kind stranger!
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None stranger! None kinder!
Comment from Tomisin👀
I love the idea of your story, but I felt very bad for the astronauts as well until I read the last line and I actually gasped.Lick seems to be just a hungry creature in space, looking for food the earth has given it.Thank you!
reply by the author on 16-Aug-2024
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I love the idea of your story, but I felt very bad for the astronauts as well until I read the last line and I actually gasped.Lick seems to be just a hungry creature in space, looking for food the earth has given it.Thank you!
Comment Written 16-Aug-2024
reply by the author on 16-Aug-2024
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Thank you for the feedback!
Comment from Boogienights
This is very creative, l can picture the creature perfectly and of course it would be on the moon. I think kids would also love this. Best of luck in the contest. :)
reply by the author on 16-Aug-2024
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This is very creative, l can picture the creature perfectly and of course it would be on the moon. I think kids would also love this. Best of luck in the contest. :)
Comment Written 15-Aug-2024
reply by the author on 16-Aug-2024
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I thought so as well. Kids like to go go go constantly and just like this poem, you never get a chance to breathe. Check out The other space creature named Sandersonbleacher if you enjoyed this one.
Comment from Cindy Decker 3
Author,
I like your humorous moon poem. Nice, uniform rhymes and a cute story behind it.
The last line of your poem is really fantastic; my dog and I will keep vigil just in case Lick comes to my town.
Excellent entry.
Best wishes,
Cindy
reply by the author on 16-Aug-2024
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Author,
I like your humorous moon poem. Nice, uniform rhymes and a cute story behind it.
The last line of your poem is really fantastic; my dog and I will keep vigil just in case Lick comes to my town.
Excellent entry.
Best wishes,
Cindy
Comment Written 15-Aug-2024
reply by the author on 16-Aug-2024
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Thank you Cindy! I am glad you enjoyed this poem. Please check out the other moon creature named Sandersonbleacher if you have time. It is the sequel to The moon creature. Thanks!
Comment from Debbie D'Arcy
This reminds me a bit of Edward Lear's nonsense verse genre. Yours is really quite wacky but expressed in such delightfully amusing and fluent rhyming verse that I found it very enjoyable (even reading it a second time). The presentation is also excellent. Well done and good luck! Debbie
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Whenever (it's) clever, it'll usually endeavour... (nice internal rhyme too)
reply by the author on 16-Aug-2024
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This reminds me a bit of Edward Lear's nonsense verse genre. Yours is really quite wacky but expressed in such delightfully amusing and fluent rhyming verse that I found it very enjoyable (even reading it a second time). The presentation is also excellent. Well done and good luck! Debbie
Edit below:
Whenever (it's) clever, it'll usually endeavour... (nice internal rhyme too)
Comment Written 15-Aug-2024
reply by the author on 16-Aug-2024
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Thank you! Yes, I wanted to discombobulate the reader immediately and knock them off balance before they could gain their senses and realize what the subject even was. By the time the reader becomes wise, the poem is over, and they are thinking of the possibility of Lick coming to Earth. If you liked this one check out The other space creature named Sandersonbleacher.
Comment from TPAC
Aliens on other planets, definitely something to consider as probable in our realm existence. The ideal suggest, we are not the only form that is in this existence. The nature of others, walking on two legs, with a head above: holds great probabilities.
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Aliens on other planets, definitely something to consider as probable in our realm existence. The ideal suggest, we are not the only form that is in this existence. The nature of others, walking on two legs, with a head above: holds great probabilities.
Comment Written 15-Aug-2024
Comment from Nicki.B
This is a great entry for the writing prompt about the moon. It's fun energetic with lovely rhyme, with great imaginative verses that takes us in different journeys on about the moon.
Well done and good luck
reply by the author on 17-Aug-2024
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This is a great entry for the writing prompt about the moon. It's fun energetic with lovely rhyme, with great imaginative verses that takes us in different journeys on about the moon.
Well done and good luck
Comment Written 15-Aug-2024
reply by the author on 17-Aug-2024
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Thank you for the kind words and feedback. I tried to make it feel like looking directly at a water hose and the shock that soon accompanies the surprise.
Comment from Gypsy Blue Rose
Nice poem about the moon. It's good entry for the prompt. You grasped the form well. Nice  presentation. Your descriptive words flow well expressing clear  mental imagery.
Good luck in the contest.
Gypsy
"The poet waits quietly to paint the unsaid." - Â Atticus
reply by the author on 17-Aug-2024
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Nice poem about the moon. It's good entry for the prompt. You grasped the form well. Nice  presentation. Your descriptive words flow well expressing clear  mental imagery.
Good luck in the contest.
Gypsy
"The poet waits quietly to paint the unsaid." - Â Atticus
Comment Written 15-Aug-2024
reply by the author on 17-Aug-2024
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Thank you for taking a look. I hope you enjoy The Other Moon Creature and will see what happens to our lunar friend Lick next.
Comment from Neonewman
lickspittle dragon-What an image this well-crafted piece offered, my friend. I, for one, hope they didn't leave a trail. Thank you for sharing.
God bless,
Steve
reply by the author on 17-Aug-2024
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lickspittle dragon-What an image this well-crafted piece offered, my friend. I, for one, hope they didn't leave a trail. Thank you for sharing.
God bless,
Steve
Comment Written 15-Aug-2024
reply by the author on 17-Aug-2024
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Yes! I kind of envisioned a monster sitting back, licking his chops, and waiting for spacemen who had run out of breath.
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You conveyed it nicely.
