Spirited Justice
Viewing comments for Chapter 6 "Spirited Justice Chap 6"Mystery, crime and ghostly high jinks
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Comment from Wendy G
It's developing quickly into a most intriguing read, full of international goings-on. It must be disconcerting for those who see and interact with Eleanor, and she is enjoying her new role a lot! Well written.
Wendy
Carlo's abrupt send-off. and also Carlo's underlying threats (Carlos's)
as he departed the Villa. (villa)
reply by the author on 11-Aug-2024
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It's developing quickly into a most intriguing read, full of international goings-on. It must be disconcerting for those who see and interact with Eleanor, and she is enjoying her new role a lot! Well written.
Wendy
Carlo's abrupt send-off. and also Carlo's underlying threats (Carlos's)
as he departed the Villa. (villa)
Comment Written 09-Aug-2024
reply by the author on 11-Aug-2024
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Sorry I am so behind in getting to my reviews. Friday was Mike's anniversary (5 years) and I've been struggling. I appreciate your thoughts and comments on the story. thank you so much.
Smiles and hugs, Carol
Comment from Katherine M. (k-11)
So the plot thickens relatively early in the story, and you chose a fine cliff-hangar to end this chapter on... where will you be taking us to next? An equally interesting destination I hope, kay
reply by the author on 09-Aug-2024
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So the plot thickens relatively early in the story, and you chose a fine cliff-hangar to end this chapter on... where will you be taking us to next? An equally interesting destination I hope, kay
Comment Written 09-Aug-2024
reply by the author on 09-Aug-2024
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Thanks Kay! I like to keep my reader guessing and wanting to come back... I am happy that it worked! thanks for the read and the review. I appreciate it very much. Smiles, Carol
Comment from barbara.wilkey
And the plot continues to thicken. I am curious about the papers and exactly who these guys are. Eleanor is getting in really deep, but of course, she's a ghost. I am enjoying this story.
"You're the one that needs to be careful. Please promise me you aren't going to get involved."
"Last call for Flight 2354 to San Francisco. Now boarding at Gate 18." (Two dialogues together, need a space between them)
The suit spoke next. "He was found murdered outside (next,)
My father's concerns have nothing to do with you." Jose snapped. (you,")
reply by the author on 09-Aug-2024
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And the plot continues to thicken. I am curious about the papers and exactly who these guys are. Eleanor is getting in really deep, but of course, she's a ghost. I am enjoying this story.
"You're the one that needs to be careful. Please promise me you aren't going to get involved."
"Last call for Flight 2354 to San Francisco. Now boarding at Gate 18." (Two dialogues together, need a space between them)
The suit spoke next. "He was found murdered outside (next,)
My father's concerns have nothing to do with you." Jose snapped. (you,")
Comment Written 09-Aug-2024
reply by the author on 09-Aug-2024
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Yes, Eleanor didn't go to the airport lokking for trouble but she found it and had no problem jumping right in. Wait till she tells Donatelli and Danni..... Or maybe she should just contact Garth.... "BOMBS EXPLODING!" Fireworks everywhere. LOL
Thanks for the usual great help and I appreciate it all the time. I guess three or four people haven't been able to post to my site...they messaged me instead. tom told me to have them message him instead.
Smiles, Carol
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It does seem to be going international so maybe hunky Garth is the answer. Mattew will be pleased. LOL
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I miss Garth too, but I haven't quite figured out how to work him into the story unless I introduce something from a past pageant that ties into this one. Or maybe if a contestant from overseas is injured or killed. I am not sure. Open to suggestions!!!!
Smiles, Carol
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I figure between the artwork and the pageant there's got to be an overseas connection. There's already a Mexico connection and with Charles nephew being there, Dylon, right? There's an art overseas connection.
Comment from Sandra Stoner-Mitchell
I love it when Eleanor just disappears and scares the heebie-jeebies out of people. she is a fabulous ghost, she has nothing to be scared of, she is already dead. I'm glad she is going to help Angelo whether he likes it or not. I've decided when I die I'm going to terrorise all the people smugglers and child abusers. If Eleanor can do it, so can I! Love this chapter! Love and hugs, my friend. :)) Sandra xxx
reply by the author on 09-Aug-2024
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I love it when Eleanor just disappears and scares the heebie-jeebies out of people. she is a fabulous ghost, she has nothing to be scared of, she is already dead. I'm glad she is going to help Angelo whether he likes it or not. I've decided when I die I'm going to terrorise all the people smugglers and child abusers. If Eleanor can do it, so can I! Love this chapter! Love and hugs, my friend. :)) Sandra xxx
Comment Written 09-Aug-2024
reply by the author on 09-Aug-2024
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Me too! I would love to go around and give payback to all the people who did horrible rotten things to others. and they couldn't do anything about it. Guess that's why I love Eleanor.
Just a question...I've had three or four people tell me that they can't post a review to my stories. Have you had any difficulty. I messaged Tom and so did Wendy, but so far nothing.
Sending my thanks and my love as always, Carol
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No, I've not had a problem. My only problem is waiting for your next chapter! Lol. Have they given the results of the novel in a month contest yet? 🥰
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No...it says five to seven days. I just a message from Tom and all he said is I should have people notify him if they have problems posting to my site. That's about four reviews that I lost out on.
Comment from Marilyn Hamilton
I have come to realize, while reading your stories, that I want to be a ghost detective! I would be great at it and who wouldn't enjoy being able to fade in and out like that. You handle those interactions very well. Enjoying the story very much.
reply by the author on 09-Aug-2024
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I have come to realize, while reading your stories, that I want to be a ghost detective! I would be great at it and who wouldn't enjoy being able to fade in and out like that. You handle those interactions very well. Enjoying the story very much.
Comment Written 09-Aug-2024
reply by the author on 09-Aug-2024
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Thanks, Marilyn! I think it would be hysterical to be able to surprise people when they least expect it and put them in there place. Thanks for the review.
Smiles,Carol
Comment from BethShelby
So Eleanor is going to help Angelo whether or not he realizes he need her. He desides he is seeing thing when she vanishing into the group. You're doing a great job with a complicated story.
reply by the author on 09-Aug-2024
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So Eleanor is going to help Angelo whether or not he realizes he need her. He desides he is seeing thing when she vanishing into the group. You're doing a great job with a complicated story.
Comment Written 09-Aug-2024
reply by the author on 09-Aug-2024
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Eleanor can't let Danni have all the fun and when she sees trouble, she's there. Thanks for reading and commenting. Appreciate it very much.
Smiles, Carol
Comment from Jacob1395
That was definitely a great line to end your chapter on. It's definitely made me want to read on to find out what happens next. I thought you did a brilliant job of setting the scene here, particularly when Carlos' private jet landed at the airport. I loved how you described the runway lights as twinkling like diamonds, I could really picture it. An excellent chapter, I'm looking forward to reading more.
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reply by the author on 09-Aug-2024
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That was definitely a great line to end your chapter on. It's definitely made me want to read on to find out what happens next. I thought you did a brilliant job of setting the scene here, particularly when Carlos' private jet landed at the airport. I loved how you described the runway lights as twinkling like diamonds, I could really picture it. An excellent chapter, I'm looking forward to reading more.
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Comment Written 09-Aug-2024
reply by the author on 09-Aug-2024
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Thank you so much for stopping by to check out my new novel. I appreciate any and all input so I can improve and also to learn what the reader enjoys. I hope you stick with me and continue to enjoy the story.
smiles, Carol
Comment from Sally Law
Thank goodness I refreshed this. More importantly, you moved quickly to resolve the formatting issues and the squirrels. Amazing. My Apple reader was having trouble, but now--smooth as silk! Great story and addition to the book. Jose is an interesting character and has an aura of mystery. Power and money typically come with a price. I look forward to the next.
Sending you my best today as always and a virtual six for the recoup!
Sal Xos
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reply by the author on 09-Aug-2024
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Thank goodness I refreshed this. More importantly, you moved quickly to resolve the formatting issues and the squirrels. Amazing. My Apple reader was having trouble, but now--smooth as silk! Great story and addition to the book. Jose is an interesting character and has an aura of mystery. Power and money typically come with a price. I look forward to the next.
Sending you my best today as always and a virtual six for the recoup!
Sal Xos
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Comment Written 09-Aug-2024
reply by the author on 09-Aug-2024
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Thanks so much, Sally. My computer or the internet tower are still having trouble so I never know what's going to happen...luckily it posted. thanks for the thoughts and wishes... I need a little extra hug today. It's the fifth anniversary of Mike's passing.... I miss him so much.