Spirited Justice
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Comment from Katherine M. (k-11)
I liked the way you used hefty amounts of dialogue to move the story along. It was particularly noticeable in this chapter. I became a little muddled by the different threads you had running. Perhaps it would have been advantageous to reorganise the plot slightly. kay
reply by the author on 06-Aug-2024
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I liked the way you used hefty amounts of dialogue to move the story along. It was particularly noticeable in this chapter. I became a little muddled by the different threads you had running. Perhaps it would have been advantageous to reorganise the plot slightly. kay
Comment Written 06-Aug-2024
reply by the author on 06-Aug-2024
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Generally, my stories do use a lot of dialogue, but this one has had a rough start. I hope it will smooth out now as I start again. I usually do have more than one thing going at a time though. Thanks for reading this chapter and for the suggestions. I'm just starting the next one so I will try to keep it in mind not to jump around too much.
Smiles, to you, Kay.
Carol
Comment from prettybluebirds
I like this chapter a little better. I needed an Eleanor fix to capture my interest. You write terrific stories, so if this isn't my cup of tea, don't let it bother you. There are so many crime stories that sometimes I get tired of them.
reply by the author on 06-Aug-2024
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I like this chapter a little better. I needed an Eleanor fix to capture my interest. You write terrific stories, so if this isn't my cup of tea, don't let it bother you. There are so many crime stories that sometimes I get tired of them.
Comment Written 06-Aug-2024
reply by the author on 06-Aug-2024
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I hope you give it a bit more chance or let me know what you think it needs. You were such a fan, and I want this story to follow as a sequence, so it needs to be just as interesting. Thanks again, April.smiles, Carol
Comment from Ric Myworld
Well, it's only Tuesday and this cowboy is all out of bullets. I don't understand that someone who reads 100 or 200 posts in a week would get the same allotment of stars as someone who reads 20. I guess, blame it on my narrow mindedness. But I'm sticking to my thoughts. I'm leaving town today and might be gone two weeks. I will try my best to drop in and read what I can, but there is never enough time when dealing with the demanding. Thanks for sharing another great chapter. :-)
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reply by the author on 06-Aug-2024
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Well, it's only Tuesday and this cowboy is all out of bullets. I don't understand that someone who reads 100 or 200 posts in a week would get the same allotment of stars as someone who reads 20. I guess, blame it on my narrow mindedness. But I'm sticking to my thoughts. I'm leaving town today and might be gone two weeks. I will try my best to drop in and read what I can, but there is never enough time when dealing with the demanding. Thanks for sharing another great chapter. :-)
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Comment Written 06-Aug-2024
reply by the author on 06-Aug-2024
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You've become quite the traveler of late. Stay safe and don't be too busy. I'll look forward to your return and that smile of yours. thanks for reading this chapter and for your thoughtfulness.
Smiles and hugs, Carol
Comment from BethShelby
Did you find your missing stories or did you have to write this all over again from stratch. Whatever you did, you you did well. You do good keeping up with all these characters. I'm glad you provide a table of contents so we can keep looking back to see who is doing what.
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Did you find your missing stories or did you have to write this all over again from stratch. Whatever you did, you you did well. You do good keeping up with all these characters. I'm glad you provide a table of contents so we can keep looking back to see who is doing what.
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Comment Written 06-Aug-2024
reply by the author on 06-Aug-2024
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I thought it would be easier now that I am using so many of the same characters...No, I didn't find them and then lost the internet and cell phone tower too. I was told some construction had the signal failing off and on for days before it went completely out so maybe that's when I lost them..not saving. I don't know. But I just channeled that nervous anxiety into writing and here it is. Thanks so much, Beth.
Smiles, Carol