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Unfinished Brushstrokes

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story of love, loss, new beginnings and secrets.

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Comment from davisr (Rhonda)
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Hi Carol,
Another interesting turn in the road. You've gotten Danny involved in solving where Megan has gone and, ultimately, getting her back. I loved the interplay between Eleanor and Danny. It was rather sweet, and now she has him set to help take down the judge and rescue Megan.

Great job,
Hugs,
Rhonda

 Comment Written 21-Jul-2024


reply by the author on 22-Jul-2024
    Wow! Not only are you keeping up with the story, you are sending me awesome gifts. I can't tell you how greateful I am. Thank you!

    I got another gift from the aftermath of the tornado...while clearing things, I managed to play fissy face with poison ivy. My eyes are swollen and my entire face itches. Fun!
    smiles, Carol
reply by davisr (Rhonda) on 23-Jul-2024
    OH my gosh!!!! I'm so sorry!!! I've had it once before and that's all I ever want to. Maybe writing will take your mind off the itchies!!
    Big hugs,
    Rhonda
Comment from Pamusart
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Hi, Carol

So, Danny is going to help Eleanor find Megan and take down Judge Doyle. For me this is the first time I've seen Danny in any of your chapters. I admit I've not read all of them especially not the ones that happened before I rejoined fanstory in May.

Neither Donatelle nor Garth was in this episode. But that's OK. It's hard to have every character in every
chapter nor would you want to.

This way we can monitor developments on the civilian side. Civilian versus law enforcement

I don't know if Eleanor already knows where Megan is. I think that being a ghost she would know but she may just be trying to catch him in the act He'll go to prison and won't be able to kidnap anybody again or kill anybody again

Here it is a little awkward. I think you should say fitting end to my life

" Though being taken out by you would be a fitting factor in my life.""

I enjoyed reading your book chapter

Good job. Thank you for sharing.

 Comment Written 21-Jul-2024


reply by the author on 21-Jul-2024
    danny owns the casino where Jonathan was gambling. He was in the first chapters when he kept driving by, intimidating Jonathan, and when Jonathan was at the casino. He wasn't an important figure until now. If you get to read the next chapter a few more things will become clearer...or at least I hope. thanks so much for yur comments and your time.
    Smiles, Carol
Comment from barbara.wilkey
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Eleanor is working her magic to help Matthew and our favorite Cowboy. I can't wait to read more. This is very good. Thank you for sharing.
Come and sit down. (you can omit 'down' it's understood)

 Comment Written 21-Jul-2024


reply by the author on 21-Jul-2024
    Thanks for another review today, Barbara. I appreciate it so much. I'm totally cross eyed now from writing the two chapters and I have to drive into town for my son John's birthday dinner. thanks again!
    Smiles, Carol
Comment from BethShelby
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It sounds like Eleanor has had two serious romances without marrying either of them. She must be unforgetable since they both or still in love with her. She can't make a lot of things happen but she needs help in order to have her granddaugter returned safely.

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 Comment Written 21-Jul-2024


reply by the author on 21-Jul-2024
    It was puppy love with Danny and he went off to find power and money and she went off to be a nurse and serve in the war. He never forgot her for many reasons. Her heart was truly lost to Charles which she proved over time by never looking for love again. Thanks for the review, Beth.
    Smiles, Carol
Comment from Lindsey Russell
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When I first started reading this story I would have never guessed that it would be a murder mystery and ghost story. I love that twist! Thanks so much for sharing and happy writing and best wishes!

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 Comment Written 21-Jul-2024


reply by the author on 21-Jul-2024
    thanks, Lindsey. My stories always have many twists and turns and never one plot..guess my mind travels in too many directions and I can't pick just one. thanks so much for the review.
    Smiles, Carol