Unfinished Brushstrokes
Viewing comments for Chapter 5 "Unfinished Brushstrokes - Chap 5"story of love, loss, new beginnings and secrets.
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Comment from davisr (Rhonda)
Ahhhh, Carol, the plot thickens!
You were right about the level of action in this chapter. Also, it was easy to follow the plot. I got a lot of clarity on who the characters were and their parts in your story.
Got to meet Garth, a larger than life Cowboy Cop. Well defined character with his act together, including the larger than life steak!!
We see Trevor and Jonathan having something to hide and a use for the diamond necklace. Time for Eleanor to show back up and kick some bootie.
Great job,
Rhonda
reply by the author on 11-Jul-2024
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Ahhhh, Carol, the plot thickens!
You were right about the level of action in this chapter. Also, it was easy to follow the plot. I got a lot of clarity on who the characters were and their parts in your story.
Got to meet Garth, a larger than life Cowboy Cop. Well defined character with his act together, including the larger than life steak!!
We see Trevor and Jonathan having something to hide and a use for the diamond necklace. Time for Eleanor to show back up and kick some bootie.
Great job,
Rhonda
Comment Written 11-Jul-2024
reply by the author on 11-Jul-2024
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Garth is a favorite by the ladies and he's been a star in many of my stories. Eleanor will be back soon. The time line prevented me from having her pop in...but I promise she will be back.
Smiles, Carol
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You're the maestro, make your music!!
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Chapter 7 makes yur wish come true!
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Nice!
Comment from Esther Brown
I really was impressed by the Garth and Dylan and the switch to the Trevor and Jonathan section. Clearly good guys and bad guys, but the way you did it was smooth and each of them have a distinct character. Good writing. Esther
reply by the author on 11-Jul-2024
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I really was impressed by the Garth and Dylan and the switch to the Trevor and Jonathan section. Clearly good guys and bad guys, but the way you did it was smooth and each of them have a distinct character. Good writing. Esther
Comment Written 11-Jul-2024
reply by the author on 11-Jul-2024
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I don't imagine you know that Garth has been in several of my stories before. The ladies seem to favor the Cowboy. As for Trevor and Jonathan I don't think we've heard the last from either one of them.
Smiles, Carol
Comment from prettybluebirds
Oh, what tangled webs you weave, Carol. Your brain must be working overtime to come up with all this stuff. I love it. One more chapter, and I will catch up with you. I read fast.
reply by the author on 11-Jul-2024
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Oh, what tangled webs you weave, Carol. Your brain must be working overtime to come up with all this stuff. I love it. One more chapter, and I will catch up with you. I read fast.
Comment Written 11-Jul-2024
reply by the author on 11-Jul-2024
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I don't know where it comes from but I am glad that my muse is working on overtime. I even wake up already thinking about the story. I might be losing it! LOL
Smiles, Carol
Comment from karenina
I would like to say, for the record, that we faithful readers of your incredible work ought to get a separate stash of "six-stars" dedicated to use whenever (sigh...) GARTH makes an appearance in one of your books!
Did you see the flash of my smile when I read:
"Dylan weaved through the crowd, calling out, "Garth!"
Everything just took a giant step forward. Nothing is ever normal or boring with Garth involved...
Despite one of your reviewers, I found your finely written detail of the airport sequence to be the perfect ambiance to set up both the creepy guy tailing Dylan and the (ta-da!) appearance of Garth.
(I don't like it when someone jumps into one chapter and begins to pick a story apart--)
Trevor's got the integrity of an ant... I'm glad his little ploy was thwarted but somehow think it's not his last attempt to "score" money for his drug habit.
It may be time (for those who "drop in" to begin introducing a little summary as you did in your last book, prior to each chapter)--
Just a thought.
On to the next chapter!
Virtual Garth sixes all around...
Karenina
reply by the author on 11-Jul-2024
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I would like to say, for the record, that we faithful readers of your incredible work ought to get a separate stash of "six-stars" dedicated to use whenever (sigh...) GARTH makes an appearance in one of your books!
Did you see the flash of my smile when I read:
"Dylan weaved through the crowd, calling out, "Garth!"
Everything just took a giant step forward. Nothing is ever normal or boring with Garth involved...
Despite one of your reviewers, I found your finely written detail of the airport sequence to be the perfect ambiance to set up both the creepy guy tailing Dylan and the (ta-da!) appearance of Garth.
(I don't like it when someone jumps into one chapter and begins to pick a story apart--)
Trevor's got the integrity of an ant... I'm glad his little ploy was thwarted but somehow think it's not his last attempt to "score" money for his drug habit.
It may be time (for those who "drop in" to begin introducing a little summary as you did in your last book, prior to each chapter)--
Just a thought.
On to the next chapter!
Virtual Garth sixes all around...
Karenina
Comment Written 11-Jul-2024
reply by the author on 11-Jul-2024
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I've got my own PR representative and I couldn't ask for a better one. I am laughing very hard. thank yo as always.
Love ya, Carol
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Sign me up! I work for free!
:)
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What? What am I signing you up for? Are we robbing a bank? Or what? LOL
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I was riffing of your: "I've got my own PR representative and I couldn't ask for a better one."
LOL
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Riffing? Were you blowing horns announcing your grand entrance? I'll stand next to you and we can proclaim your outstanding achievements and I shall offer accolades upon accolades.
You are the best!
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Oh no. Just making it clear I'm a huge fan and will do anything to help!
Comment from barbara.wilkey
Jonathon is a scum bag. I can't wait to see what happens next. I am enjoying this, especially Gath.
Unbeknownst to Dylan, a pair of cold, calculating eyes followed his every move from a disc (NOT AT ALL GOOD!!!!)
His anxiety eased when he spotted a tall, broad-shouldered man near the coffee kiosk. He spotted a tall, broad-shouldered man near the coffee kiosk, with his black Stetson tipped down over his eyes and his cowboy boots propped against a silver suitcase. (part of this paragraph is repeated and need to be deleted, but I know this this handsome hunk is. YEAH!!!!!!)
Garth chuckled, "If you mean Tango and Poppa, (chuckled.)
Garth sighed, "Alright. This could be a significant lead. If (sighed.)
Jonathan chuckled, "It's the necklace your mother was wearing the other day, right?" (chuckled.)
reply by the author on 11-Jul-2024
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Jonathon is a scum bag. I can't wait to see what happens next. I am enjoying this, especially Gath.
Unbeknownst to Dylan, a pair of cold, calculating eyes followed his every move from a disc (NOT AT ALL GOOD!!!!)
His anxiety eased when he spotted a tall, broad-shouldered man near the coffee kiosk. He spotted a tall, broad-shouldered man near the coffee kiosk, with his black Stetson tipped down over his eyes and his cowboy boots propped against a silver suitcase. (part of this paragraph is repeated and need to be deleted, but I know this this handsome hunk is. YEAH!!!!!!)
Garth chuckled, "If you mean Tango and Poppa, (chuckled.)
Garth sighed, "Alright. This could be a significant lead. If (sighed.)
Jonathan chuckled, "It's the necklace your mother was wearing the other day, right?" (chuckled.)
Comment Written 11-Jul-2024
reply by the author on 11-Jul-2024
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I just answered you with a long thank you....and hit save replies because I wanted to make sure it went through. But here you are! Did you get it?
Comment from BethShelby
Some Garth is getting in on this one. I've been missing him. Did you leave a novel unfinished with him on broad? This is great writing and it good to see the sexy cowbow again with his sidekicks. He hasn't worked with ghosts before, has he?
reply by the author on 11-Jul-2024
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Some Garth is getting in on this one. I've been missing him. Did you leave a novel unfinished with him on broad? This is great writing and it good to see the sexy cowbow again with his sidekicks. He hasn't worked with ghosts before, has he?
Comment Written 11-Jul-2024
reply by the author on 11-Jul-2024
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No he hasn't...I hope he can handle it! LOL I hadn't planned on Garth but he fit in nicely with how the story is going. Hope all the ladies who were asking enjoy the cowboy. I do have an unfinished novel to go back to...just haven't wrapped my head around that one yet. Too busy! This contest will have me tied up...maybe Garth will lasso me. LOL Thanks somuch, Beth.
Smiles, Carol
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Wouldn't it be nice if we could create the perfect man and make him come to life for real. Mine would need to be blind so he could tell how old I am. LOL>
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Me too!
Comment from tfawcus
It's going to take me a while to get my mind around all the characters, Your vivid pen pictures of the help. You created a most authentic airport ambience in the first part of this, and there are several avenues of intrigue being set up. One editing slip you might want to fix: His anxiety eased when he spotted a tall, broad-shouldered man near the coffee kiosk. He spotted a tall, broad-shouldered man near the coffee kiosk,
Looking forward to the next part.
reply by the author on 11-Jul-2024
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It's going to take me a while to get my mind around all the characters, Your vivid pen pictures of the help. You created a most authentic airport ambience in the first part of this, and there are several avenues of intrigue being set up. One editing slip you might want to fix: His anxiety eased when he spotted a tall, broad-shouldered man near the coffee kiosk. He spotted a tall, broad-shouldered man near the coffee kiosk,
Looking forward to the next part.
Comment Written 11-Jul-2024
reply by the author on 11-Jul-2024
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Thanks for catching that oops! Garth is an FBI agent from many of my previous stories and the ladies keep asking me to bring him back. Seemed like a good opportunity. I hope you continue to enjoy the story.
Have a great day!
Smiles, Carol
Comment from Sandra Stoner-Mitchell
What a load of crooks Eleanor had in her family! The only couple I feel sorry for at the art gallery owners. If only Jackson had told Eleanor the truth, of his wife. They wouldn't be in all that trouble. The others, they couldn't care less so long as they get their money. That necklace must be worth a million, if not more! And that SUV, he's obviously wanting the money that Jonathon owes him. (or his boss)
It seems that Charles and Eleanor were an item at one time, but how did she get the Charles painting? She must have known it was his. This is quite a teaser of an investigation. And who is the person following Dylan? And why? I know, I'll have to wait. Another wonderful chapter, my friend. :)) Sandra xx
reply by the author on 11-Jul-2024
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What a load of crooks Eleanor had in her family! The only couple I feel sorry for at the art gallery owners. If only Jackson had told Eleanor the truth, of his wife. They wouldn't be in all that trouble. The others, they couldn't care less so long as they get their money. That necklace must be worth a million, if not more! And that SUV, he's obviously wanting the money that Jonathon owes him. (or his boss)
It seems that Charles and Eleanor were an item at one time, but how did she get the Charles painting? She must have known it was his. This is quite a teaser of an investigation. And who is the person following Dylan? And why? I know, I'll have to wait. Another wonderful chapter, my friend. :)) Sandra xx
Comment Written 11-Jul-2024
reply by the author on 11-Jul-2024
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Good morning, my sweet. I am thrilled to see you are joinging me on this ragtail adventure. Did you like seeing Garth in the airport?
As for Eleanor's painting...remember he helped her with her painting while they sat on the grassy knoll outside the hospital. Did he give it to her? Or did they paint together so it's similar? Or maybe, heaven forbi, she was the art thief? lol All that was in the prologue ..but subtle.
Mystery and intrigue...what a way to start my day. I'm about to cause a heap of more trouble in the chapter I'm writing. Hang on!
Sending smiles, hugs and lots of lovem
Carol
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I've just reread the prologue, and once I started reading, it all came back. I don't know why I didn't remember, that's so unusual for me. Now it all fits together, but Charles will never get to meet his love again. So sad. xxxx
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One never knows! LOL
Comment from iDri.Luv.Jesus
I feel the story line is all too common, from paintings to jewelries suspicious of stolen items with an FBI on a hunt, etc... It got no wow factor to it! The extra descriptive scenery at the airport gate was to a long emphasis that it gives a reader a sense of boredom, and feeling that this story get no where. Once it got to a chasing with the FBI, it got some actions going on and more interesting toward the end.
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reply by the author on 11-Jul-2024
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I feel the story line is all too common, from paintings to jewelries suspicious of stolen items with an FBI on a hunt, etc... It got no wow factor to it! The extra descriptive scenery at the airport gate was to a long emphasis that it gives a reader a sense of boredom, and feeling that this story get no where. Once it got to a chasing with the FBI, it got some actions going on and more interesting toward the end.
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Comment Written 11-Jul-2024
reply by the author on 11-Jul-2024
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I don't think the story line is common, but we each draw our own conclusions. Too bad you didn't catch the first four chapters, you would have learned that the story isn't just about missing paintings. There's an unsolved murder, a dysfunctional family using drugs and gambling, a will will specific tasks before inheritance, an artist's secret life, and much more and that was only four chapters. But thank you for taking the time to read and comment. Have a great day!
Smiles, Carol
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Oh, thanks for the update, and I will check into some more of your previous chapters. I am sure you are a great writer too, and you will win the top best as well❣️
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I don't know about being great or about winning, I just thought you shouldn't judge the book by jumping into one chapter. Sorry if I came off as harsh, I didn't mean to. But the book is about much more than you thought. Have a great day. Smiles, Carol
Comment from royowen
Ah we have our old friends Garth and Tango, our FBI people on the job as it were. These familiar characters are great characters, and they will be able to untangle the mystery surrounding Eleanor and the goings on concerning her death, beautifully written Carol, blessings Roy
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reply by the author on 11-Jul-2024
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Ah we have our old friends Garth and Tango, our FBI people on the job as it were. These familiar characters are great characters, and they will be able to untangle the mystery surrounding Eleanor and the goings on concerning her death, beautifully written Carol, blessings Roy
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Comment Written 11-Jul-2024
reply by the author on 11-Jul-2024
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The readers (particularly the ladies) have been asking for the Cowboy to return to my stories so what could I do...I was compelled to accomodate, right? Thanks so much for the review and your comments.
Smiles, Carol
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