The Coyote Boys
Viewing comments for Chapter 7 "Dreams"Story about two brothers who change their destiny.
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Comment from Carol Hillebrenner
What a sad problem for the two young men. They awaken knowing their father has to disappear and fear it is something they need to do. Is this knowledge what makes the new day seem better?
reply by the author on 05-Jul-2024
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What a sad problem for the two young men. They awaken knowing their father has to disappear and fear it is something they need to do. Is this knowledge what makes the new day seem better?
Comment Written 04-Jul-2024
reply by the author on 05-Jul-2024
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They confessed to each other, I think that helped lighten things for them. Thank you so much for this excellent review. Gretchen
Comment from Sandra Stoner-Mitchell
I bet it was his father that was peeping through Ms Lynn's window, and I bet it was him who broke the door down, but what else did he do?
Poor Dewey, he has every right to hate his father and wish him dead, so does Huck. Now to wait and see what the scumbag has done. This is a dark, but impelling story. Well done, my friend. :)) Sandra xx
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reply by the author on 05-Jul-2024
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I bet it was his father that was peeping through Ms Lynn's window, and I bet it was him who broke the door down, but what else did he do?
Poor Dewey, he has every right to hate his father and wish him dead, so does Huck. Now to wait and see what the scumbag has done. This is a dark, but impelling story. Well done, my friend. :)) Sandra xx
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Comment Written 04-Jul-2024
reply by the author on 05-Jul-2024
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Thank you, Sandra. I'm so glad you enjoyed this. Your kind review is very much appreciated. Gretchen
Comment from barbara.wilkey
Yes, doing something about it is a problem. I have a feeling it was Huck's father who broke into Lynn's store. When Huck realizes it, he may do something about it.
Good story
I tell my momma exactly what Miss Lynn says. "She said she (says,)
"I dreamed you killed Daddy. I was watching you."
"It was dream, Dew. Just a dream. Your head got things mixed up." (space needed between the two dialogues)
reply by the author on 05-Jul-2024
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Yes, doing something about it is a problem. I have a feeling it was Huck's father who broke into Lynn's store. When Huck realizes it, he may do something about it.
Good story
I tell my momma exactly what Miss Lynn says. "She said she (says,)
"I dreamed you killed Daddy. I was watching you."
"It was dream, Dew. Just a dream. Your head got things mixed up." (space needed between the two dialogues)
Comment Written 04-Jul-2024
reply by the author on 05-Jul-2024
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Thank you so much for this excellent review. Much appreciated. Gretchen
Comment from Debbie D'Arcy
A wonderfully strong chapter as I feel myself endorsing Dewey's plan and wishing Huck would too. Their father is a monster but so credible and well-portrayed. Everyone is on tenterhooks when he's around and that creak of a floorboard even gets me nervous. As ever, Gretchen, excellent dialogue, pace and length of chapter, conveying the intensity of this household scene. One small edit:
He's quiet for a (for a) little bit - duplication.
Take care Debbie
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reply by the author on 05-Jul-2024
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A wonderfully strong chapter as I feel myself endorsing Dewey's plan and wishing Huck would too. Their father is a monster but so credible and well-portrayed. Everyone is on tenterhooks when he's around and that creak of a floorboard even gets me nervous. As ever, Gretchen, excellent dialogue, pace and length of chapter, conveying the intensity of this household scene. One small edit:
He's quiet for a (for a) little bit - duplication.
Take care Debbie
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Comment Written 04-Jul-2024
reply by the author on 05-Jul-2024
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Thank you so much, Debbie. Your kind review is very appreciated. Gretchen