Missing Him
Moonlight brings memories of sweeter nights.27 total reviews
Comment from Ginda Simpson
This five line poem is packed with exquisite visual and emotional content, both painting and song at the same time. This should definitely do well in the contest. It has my vote. I wish I had six stars for it.
reply by the author on 29-Jun-2024
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This five line poem is packed with exquisite visual and emotional content, both painting and song at the same time. This should definitely do well in the contest. It has my vote. I wish I had six stars for it.
Comment Written 29-Jun-2024
reply by the author on 29-Jun-2024
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Thank you so much Ginda. I'm gla you like it. I'm pleased you found the emotion I hoped to put there.
Beth
Comment from Pam Lonsdale
I think these poems are hard to write (being a non-poet, I especially marvel at those who can). I like how the first two lines complement each other, than lines 3 and 4 do the same; finally, the last line sums up what the four lines bring to memory.
I'm sure it's hard sometimes, Beth.
Thank you for sharing this excellent post.
xo
Pam
reply by the author on 29-Jun-2024
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I think these poems are hard to write (being a non-poet, I especially marvel at those who can). I like how the first two lines complement each other, than lines 3 and 4 do the same; finally, the last line sums up what the four lines bring to memory.
I'm sure it's hard sometimes, Beth.
Thank you for sharing this excellent post.
xo
Pam
Comment Written 29-Jun-2024
reply by the author on 29-Jun-2024
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Thank Pam. Yes i find writing these very hard and I'm not sure why. I'd much rather write a longer rhymed poem.
Beth
Comment from Dolly'sPoems
An ambient scene to remind us of someone missing and there is an eerie loneliness in your words here Beth and I know that feeling well, a fine poem for the contest, love, Dolly x
reply by the author on 01-Jul-2024
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An ambient scene to remind us of someone missing and there is an eerie loneliness in your words here Beth and I know that feeling well, a fine poem for the contest, love, Dolly x
Comment Written 29-Jun-2024
reply by the author on 01-Jul-2024
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Thank you Dolly,
I appreciate your cfomment on my little poem.
Beth
Comment from Rachelle Allen
This gave me such an ache in my heart, Beth. It's my worst nightmare, and it's such an important reminder to make the most of the time we have together still. Thank you for the opportunity to read these gorgeous words of yours. Good luc in the 5-Line Poem contest. xoxo
reply by the author on 29-Jun-2024
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This gave me such an ache in my heart, Beth. It's my worst nightmare, and it's such an important reminder to make the most of the time we have together still. Thank you for the opportunity to read these gorgeous words of yours. Good luc in the 5-Line Poem contest. xoxo
Comment Written 28-Jun-2024
reply by the author on 29-Jun-2024
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Thank you Rachelle. I'm glad people seem to being feeling the emotion I hoped to express in this poem.
B
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Well, you ARE a good writer, after all. So, for that reason, I'm not at all surprised. xo
Comment from Teri7
Beth, This is a very lovely and very well written 5-line poem you have penned for the contest. You used very lovely imagery; lovely words and the font was perfect for this poem. Best wishes in the contest. love and blessings, Teri
reply by the author on 30-Jun-2024
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Beth, This is a very lovely and very well written 5-line poem you have penned for the contest. You used very lovely imagery; lovely words and the font was perfect for this poem. Best wishes in the contest. love and blessings, Teri
Comment Written 28-Jun-2024
reply by the author on 30-Jun-2024
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Thank you Teri. I'm glad you liked my poem.
Love,
Beth
Comment from jim vecchio
A precious five liner that, unfortunately, I and many FS writers can identify with. Best wishes for the contest and count yourself fortunate that The Lord granted you such a good husband.
reply by the author on 29-Jun-2024
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A precious five liner that, unfortunately, I and many FS writers can identify with. Best wishes for the contest and count yourself fortunate that The Lord granted you such a good husband.
Comment Written 28-Jun-2024
reply by the author on 29-Jun-2024
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Thank you Jim, I know you can identify with me in missing that part of your life that has moved on. I was fortunated to have a wonderful husband for 61 years and I know I will see him again.
Beth
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Had I not been a fool for my younger wife, I possibly would have enjoyed that number of years, as well. But, I'm thankful for 31!
Comment from davisr (Rhonda)
A beautiful, but haunting poem about lost love. I'm sure there are many moments that make you think of the one you lost. Your poem was very well written,
Rhonda
reply by the author on 01-Jul-2024
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A beautiful, but haunting poem about lost love. I'm sure there are many moments that make you think of the one you lost. Your poem was very well written,
Rhonda
Comment Written 28-Jun-2024
reply by the author on 01-Jul-2024
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Thank you Rhonda, I appreciate your comments on my little poem.
Beth
Comment from karenina
Your heart is on the page, and you've expressed yourself poignantly, Beth.
Evan is awaiting you in God's good time. That is my belief and I truly hope it comforts you. That does not mean grief is not a persistent visitor. I'm certain you miss him every day!
Karenina
reply by the author on 01-Jul-2024
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Your heart is on the page, and you've expressed yourself poignantly, Beth.
Evan is awaiting you in God's good time. That is my belief and I truly hope it comforts you. That does not mean grief is not a persistent visitor. I'm certain you miss him every day!
Karenina
Comment Written 28-Jun-2024
reply by the author on 01-Jul-2024
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Thank you Karenina. Yes, I know we will be together again. Of course, I live in here and now and I still miss him. I appreciate your comments.
Beth
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Precisely what I was trying to say.
Comment from Wendy G
There is a quiet melancholy about this beautifully presented poem. It portrays quiet grief and loneliness after loss. Well done. Best wishes for the contest.
Wendy
reply by the author on 29-Jun-2024
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There is a quiet melancholy about this beautifully presented poem. It portrays quiet grief and loneliness after loss. Well done. Best wishes for the contest.
Wendy
Comment Written 28-Jun-2024
reply by the author on 29-Jun-2024
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Thank you Wendy. I really appreciate the review and comments.
Beth
Comment from Debbie D'Arcy
Lovely, Beth! This is very atmospheric and I can almost feel the sensation of that moonlight filtering through. I like your use of the word 'subdued' to describe the scene but also the emotion of the narrator. Well done and good luck! Debbie
reply by the author on 29-Jun-2024
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Lovely, Beth! This is very atmospheric and I can almost feel the sensation of that moonlight filtering through. I like your use of the word 'subdued' to describe the scene but also the emotion of the narrator. Well done and good luck! Debbie
Comment Written 28-Jun-2024
reply by the author on 29-Jun-2024
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Thank you Debbie. I'm pleased you like my poem. I find these short poems much harder to write than the longer rhymed ones.
Beth