Greed
How much is enough?18 total reviews
Comment from Neonewman
This is a perfect entry for this particular writing prompt, my friend. No Obituary for him, wow, heartwrenching. Thank you for sharing your awesome talent.
God bless,
Steve
reply by the author on 27-Jun-2024
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This is a perfect entry for this particular writing prompt, my friend. No Obituary for him, wow, heartwrenching. Thank you for sharing your awesome talent.
God bless,
Steve
Comment Written 26-Jun-2024
reply by the author on 27-Jun-2024
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Thanks Steve for your kind review.
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My pleasure
Comment from Steve Foreman
A great piece of writing. Excellent use of the language and metaphors that really summed up the subject of the poem.
The second stanza rhyming was a bit shaky with 'reach' and 'appease', but other than that it was great.
reply by the author on 26-Jun-2024
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A great piece of writing. Excellent use of the language and metaphors that really summed up the subject of the poem.
The second stanza rhyming was a bit shaky with 'reach' and 'appease', but other than that it was great.
Comment Written 26-Jun-2024
reply by the author on 26-Jun-2024
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Thanks Steve for your review. Much appreciated.
Comment from Sanku
The poem charts the course of ambition(later becoming greed) that goes from more to much more and more ...When the realisation comes it is too late ..i like the strong imagery especially (echoing the growl of want) greed being suggested as a growling animal...veery well done..
reply by the author on 25-Jun-2024
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The poem charts the course of ambition(later becoming greed) that goes from more to much more and more ...When the realisation comes it is too late ..i like the strong imagery especially (echoing the growl of want) greed being suggested as a growling animal...veery well done..
Comment Written 25-Jun-2024
reply by the author on 25-Jun-2024
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Thank you much for your kind review.
Comment from ESOSTINE
Your poem is complete in bringing to fore, the dangers and pains of greed. I really enjoy the read. The flow and rhymes are superb. Thanks for sharing your inspirations. Well done, dear Shanbreen.
reply by the author on 25-Jun-2024
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Your poem is complete in bringing to fore, the dangers and pains of greed. I really enjoy the read. The flow and rhymes are superb. Thanks for sharing your inspirations. Well done, dear Shanbreen.
Comment Written 25-Jun-2024
reply by the author on 25-Jun-2024
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Thanks, Esostine for your generous rating.
Comment from Dolly'sPoems
Greed can often ruin us in many ways, both emotionally and financially. Your question, "how much is enough" is very poignant and I adored the sentiments, the rhymes and message here, love Dolly x
reply by the author on 25-Jun-2024
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Greed can often ruin us in many ways, both emotionally and financially. Your question, "how much is enough" is very poignant and I adored the sentiments, the rhymes and message here, love Dolly x
Comment Written 25-Jun-2024
reply by the author on 25-Jun-2024
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Thank you, Dolly.
Comment from Pamusart
Hi, Shanbreen. I hope you are well
Excellent effort by you. I can see each phase in the process of his spiritual journey. He chooses the wrong way to go. He's given every chance to do the right thing but he does not bite
So, his soul will not go to heaven.
The last two lines don't rhyme. In case you care
I enjoyed your poem
Good job. Thank you for sharing.
reply by the author on 25-Jun-2024
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Hi, Shanbreen. I hope you are well
Excellent effort by you. I can see each phase in the process of his spiritual journey. He chooses the wrong way to go. He's given every chance to do the right thing but he does not bite
So, his soul will not go to heaven.
The last two lines don't rhyme. In case you care
I enjoyed your poem
Good job. Thank you for sharing.
Comment Written 25-Jun-2024
reply by the author on 25-Jun-2024
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Pam, thank you for your review and bringing to my attention that "claim" and "am" do not rhyme. I do care about the rhyme because it is a rhyming poem. If you have the time or the inclination, would you explain why they do not rhyme. I am definitely going to modify.
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Hi. Shanbreen. We could check the British pronunciation. I think they are the same. Am is pronounced like ram whereas claim is pronounced like aim
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Thanks much Pamusart. I will modify it.
BTW, I tried giving you a six, but it deemsI have already nominated you.
Comment from royowen
Oh yes, as the saying goes, the apple doesn't fall very far from the tree, and unless you want your children to be a reflection of your inadequacies, then you change, and chances are you'll want them to be a better version of you, which is what all parents should want. Beautifully written, and a camera to what the earth is reaping right now, well done superbly scribed, well done, blessings Roy
reply by the author on 25-Jun-2024
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Oh yes, as the saying goes, the apple doesn't fall very far from the tree, and unless you want your children to be a reflection of your inadequacies, then you change, and chances are you'll want them to be a better version of you, which is what all parents should want. Beautifully written, and a camera to what the earth is reaping right now, well done superbly scribed, well done, blessings Roy
Comment Written 24-Jun-2024
reply by the author on 25-Jun-2024
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Thank you, Roy for your kind review.
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Well done
Comment from Reanna Ashburn
Philosophy is one of my favorite topics. I especially enjoy it when met with a poetic form. Having an explanation for the verses was a nice addition. That aspect makes it easier for someone to understand something written within a philosophical state.
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reply by the author on 25-Jun-2024
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Philosophy is one of my favorite topics. I especially enjoy it when met with a poetic form. Having an explanation for the verses was a nice addition. That aspect makes it easier for someone to understand something written within a philosophical state.
This rating does not count towards story rating or author rank.
The highest and the lowest rating are not included in calculations.
Comment Written 24-Jun-2024
reply by the author on 25-Jun-2024
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Thanks, Reanna for your kind review.