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A Father's Day Story

The Power of Forgiveness

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Comment from Wendy G
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A beautiful story, and I am so glad that forgiveness was offered and received before his death. Only then can it be a "good" death. Thank you for sharing this timely piece.
Wendy

 Comment Written 16-Jun-2024


reply by the author on 16-Jun-2024
    Thanks for your review.
Comment from GoWiSt
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"Randy Johnson" Hey, that's the name of a famous American baseball pitcher.
".Ã? When asked if everything was okay" Edit the typo at the beginning of this sentence.
"disowned her nine years ago because she marriedÃ? a man of another race." More typos here--and elsewhere. Read through thoroughly and revise. Also, that attitude is very bigotted of Mr. Johnson.
My goodness, dead at only 58?? Geez!
Interesting tale of forgiveness and eunion.

 Comment Written 15-Jun-2024


reply by the author on 15-Jun-2024
    I had a hard time getting those "A's" out of there. Randy died of Pancreatic cancer. Thanks for the review.
Comment from Jesse James Doty
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Yes, death can be powerful. A good death can be the beginning of a new day for others who have been close to the one who has passed away. This was excellently written with plenty of surprises and examples of how it feels like to be in a hospice. Thanks for sharing this magnificent story for Father's Day.
Jesse

 Comment Written 15-Jun-2024


reply by the author on 15-Jun-2024
    Nice to be back, Jesse, and thanks for the six.
reply by Jesse James Doty on 16-Jun-2024
    Welcome back!
    You're welcome!
    Jesse
Comment from Jodi Ann Anderson
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This made me cry as I read it. What a beautiful moment in time that will never be forgotten. I love this so much! A family reuniting and the forgiveness made this so wonderful to read. Thanks for sharing this!!

 Comment Written 15-Jun-2024


reply by the author on 15-Jun-2024
    Thanks, Jodi, for your generous review and comments.
Comment from jmdg1954
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Wow. Very powerful story as told by you. Nine years is an eternity and I am happy that they both got to see, hug and cry with each other.

What was he dying from at only 58? Not relative to the story, though I'm curious.

Thank you for sharing this with us.

John

 Comment Written 15-Jun-2024


reply by the author on 15-Jun-2024
    Pancreatic cancer.
Comment from patcelaw
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This is a very well written story and I do believe that you're right about him not having all his business taken care of and that's why he couldn't let himself go. My son-in-law is a former emergency ambulance worker, and he has had many cases where he had to talk people into just letting him go to complete the dying process. I'm hoping that I have all of my business finished and so when my time comes in, it may not be all that long because I 86 now I'm hoping that when I go away will be peaceful and my children will be pleasantly relieved. Patricia .

 Comment Written 15-Jun-2024


reply by the author on 15-Jun-2024
    C'mon Pat, let's go out with a bang! I turn 78 in August.
    Nice to be back with FS. Thanks for the review..
Comment from Sharon Elwell
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Beautiful story! Your pacing was good, and your role as observer/participant was well balanced. My only question was why a man so young was dying, and I kept hoping for an explanation.

 Comment Written 15-Jun-2024


reply by the author on 15-Jun-2024
    Pancreatic cancer.
    Thanks, Sharon, for the review.
Comment from Pamusart
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Hi, William

This is a real touching story about a father wanting to make peace with an estranged daughter

That hospice worker is worth her weight in gold. I would call that going above and beyond

The brother seems pretty clueless about the whole thing. He may have been able to do more through the years to get father and daughter together. But maybe it took the father being on his deathbed to allow him to let her back into his life. His grandchildren are more than likely mixed race. So there you go, the cycle of life.

I really enjoyed reading your story

Some gunk in this line. But it is in many other places as well.

" terribly wrong had happened.Ã? When "

Good job. Thank you for sharing.

 Comment Written 15-Jun-2024


reply by the author on 15-Jun-2024
    It wasn't easy, but I got rid of the gunk. Thanks for the review.
Comment from Debbie D'Arcy
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I note this is non-fiction which makes your write all the more powerful in its theme of forgiveness. It's so interesting that, when we're close to death, there can often remain 'unfinished business' that needs to be resolved before the final letting-go. In this case it was important that this reunion take place between father and daughter. I like that simple sentence: "It was a good death." We should learn to see that poorly people are often preparing for their exit but need to feel their work is done. This is beautifully told. Well done! Debbie

 Comment Written 15-Jun-2024


reply by the author on 15-Jun-2024
    Thanks, Debbie, for your review. You are highly respected on the site and I appreciate your comments. I've been gone awhile. New book promotion stuff: Teachable Moments. It's on Amazon.
Comment from royowen
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What a beautiful story, oh yes indeed unfinished business indeed, God made this world to be filled with unconditional love, mercy and grace, not the opposite, such a lovely story Bill, blessings Roy

 Comment Written 15-Jun-2024


reply by the author on 15-Jun-2024
    I was hoping you would check in. Thanks, Roy. i've been hustling my new book, Teachable Moments. it's on Amazon.
reply by royowen on 16-Jun-2024
    Well done