Spiffy Up
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Comment from DonandVicki
I can see that this would appeal to the younger set. I think that children don't need much encouragement, they are ready to set the world on fire with their enthusiasm.
reply by the author on 07-Dec-2024
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I can see that this would appeal to the younger set. I think that children don't need much encouragement, they are ready to set the world on fire with their enthusiasm.
Comment Written 06-Dec-2024
reply by the author on 07-Dec-2024
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You are right....bundle up, waddle on over and give it go......Thanks and Godspeed to you and yours....Stu Harrell
Comment from Dolly'sPoems
I loved your uplifting words here Stu and I rode on your poem full of positive vibes as you brightened my evening with your warmth, a great poem for the contest, love Dolly x x x
reply by the author on 06-Dec-2024
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I loved your uplifting words here Stu and I rode on your poem full of positive vibes as you brightened my evening with your warmth, a great poem for the contest, love Dolly x x x
Comment Written 06-Dec-2024
reply by the author on 06-Dec-2024
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Thaks so very much.....you are still my hero....Godspeed......Stu Harrell
Comment from Shanbreen
I like this kiddies motivational poem. It is very inspiring. However, I wasn't quite sure about your crisscrossing the age-difference from one stanza to the other.
For example:
"Think of all the pretty girls
That said flatly no to me", seems more for older children. But
"...Poke your tummy too
Dream up a fancy pony..." seems to be for much younger children. Just a thought. It's still a very good motivational poem.
reply by the author on 06-Dec-2024
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I like this kiddies motivational poem. It is very inspiring. However, I wasn't quite sure about your crisscrossing the age-difference from one stanza to the other.
For example:
"Think of all the pretty girls
That said flatly no to me", seems more for older children. But
"...Poke your tummy too
Dream up a fancy pony..." seems to be for much younger children. Just a thought. It's still a very good motivational poem.
Comment Written 06-Dec-2024
reply by the author on 06-Dec-2024
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Thanks very much....you are right....this is a little sloppy wiggling between ages etc....will do better....
Godspeed to you and yours and thanks....Stu Harrell
Comment from Gayla putnam
This poem is inspiring, funny, witty, and engaging. I wish it were a contest entry. I liked every stanza, and it flowed flawlessly. You could use your poem for motivational talks. gayla
reply by the author on 06-Dec-2024
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This poem is inspiring, funny, witty, and engaging. I wish it were a contest entry. I liked every stanza, and it flowed flawlessly. You could use your poem for motivational talks. gayla
Comment Written 06-Dec-2024
reply by the author on 06-Dec-2024
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Thanks so very much.....I am a skitter, skatter verse writer who loves this silly stuff....Godspeed to you and yours...Stu Harrell
Comment from nancyjam
This is a great entry to the "kiddies motivational poem contest.
It's cleverly worded with positive suggestions tomato their life happy and pleasant.
Good luck in the contest.
Nancy
reply by the author on 18-Jun-2024
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This is a great entry to the "kiddies motivational poem contest.
It's cleverly worded with positive suggestions tomato their life happy and pleasant.
Good luck in the contest.
Nancy
Comment Written 17-Jun-2024
reply by the author on 18-Jun-2024
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Thanks so very much...This is obviously light, slap dash verse....but they are fun to squiggle, wiggle together....Best Wishes to you and yours.....Stu Harrell
Comment from Brad Dancer
I generally loved this - some really impactful lines for me "often close enough is good enough" and "giggle out a light tune daily" and "be fiesty on your way" - cute and memorable and appealing.
If i would make a suggestion its on the pretty girls line- i definitely know (and feel!) where you are going, but it took me out of more of a younger kids feel to a much older feel - at least for me. The verse itself is fine, just, for me, felt like a slightly different poem.
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reply by the author on 15-Jun-2024
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I generally loved this - some really impactful lines for me "often close enough is good enough" and "giggle out a light tune daily" and "be fiesty on your way" - cute and memorable and appealing.
If i would make a suggestion its on the pretty girls line- i definitely know (and feel!) where you are going, but it took me out of more of a younger kids feel to a much older feel - at least for me. The verse itself is fine, just, for me, felt like a slightly different poem.
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Comment Written 15-Jun-2024
reply by the author on 15-Jun-2024
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You are exactly right...I wrote that as a "don't be afraid to hear a NO" line
As a little guy...I always hoped the girls would play elsewhere...
Thanks and Godspeed
Comment from Cindy Decker 3
Author,
I like the sweetness and positivity of your poem.
The rhyme flows, and what a great message to kids who might be on one side of bullying (stick up for all your classmates).
Great poem.
Good luck,
Cindy
reply by the author on 15-Jun-2024
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Author,
I like the sweetness and positivity of your poem.
The rhyme flows, and what a great message to kids who might be on one side of bullying (stick up for all your classmates).
Great poem.
Good luck,
Cindy
Comment Written 15-Jun-2024
reply by the author on 15-Jun-2024
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Thanks so much...these are fun to stitch together...
All the very best to you....and yours.....
Comment from royowen
I particularly like Snuggle up between the raindrops, a great line, I think it's good when one appears on the page as if by magic, the whole poem was quite an achievement, beautifully written, blessings Roy
reply by the author on 15-Jun-2024
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I particularly like Snuggle up between the raindrops, a great line, I think it's good when one appears on the page as if by magic, the whole poem was quite an achievement, beautifully written, blessings Roy
Comment Written 15-Jun-2024
reply by the author on 15-Jun-2024
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Yo Trooper....Jus' tryin' to keep up with you young fellow....lots of fun to squiggle these together......
All the best....
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Well done
Comment from gansach
This is a lighthearted, happy poem with good advice for children and makes a nice entry for the Kiddie Poem competition. I enjoyed reading it very much and wish you luck!
reply by the author on 15-Jun-2024
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This is a lighthearted, happy poem with good advice for children and makes a nice entry for the Kiddie Poem competition. I enjoyed reading it very much and wish you luck!
Comment Written 15-Jun-2024
reply by the author on 15-Jun-2024
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These are admittedly a little skitchy, witchy....but nonetheless fun to glue together.....Thanks so very much for your kind thoughts Best wishes to you and yours
Comment from prettybluebirds
You have done an excellent job with the writing prompt. This poem should certainly motivate any child who reads it. It is well-written, and I like the way it rhymes. Best of luck in the contest.
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reply by the author on 15-Jun-2024
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You have done an excellent job with the writing prompt. This poem should certainly motivate any child who reads it. It is well-written, and I like the way it rhymes. Best of luck in the contest.
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Comment Written 14-Jun-2024
reply by the author on 15-Jun-2024
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Thanks so very much.....you can tell that these are a little slapped together...but they are fun to scribble out......Best Wishes to you and yours