The Unwilling Heir
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Comment from royowen
The demononic realm is a very strong one, and even today Satan is not hiding anymore he's asserting his power over the darkness that is all around, ultimately he has lost because the cross has taken away his authority, but we need men and women of faith to push the darkness, it is faith in Christ that does, so the faith of even those here can do it, not Sebastian alone, well done Carol, blessings Roy
reply by the author on 10-Jun-2024
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The demononic realm is a very strong one, and even today Satan is not hiding anymore he's asserting his power over the darkness that is all around, ultimately he has lost because the cross has taken away his authority, but we need men and women of faith to push the darkness, it is faith in Christ that does, so the faith of even those here can do it, not Sebastian alone, well done Carol, blessings Roy
Comment Written 09-Jun-2024
reply by the author on 10-Jun-2024
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You are right, Roy! Sebastian was not sent as the Savior, but as guidance to show them how to work together to find what they need and to understand how sacred their lives are in the eyes of the Lord. Thanks again!
Smiles, Carol
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Well done
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Thank you as always!
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Bless you
Comment from BethShelby
Well, I hape the demons can't hurt a celestial being although he hadn't been given power to save al of th ghosts. This was an intense chapter and I glad most of them got out. THis is really good writing.
reply by the author on 10-Jun-2024
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Well, I hape the demons can't hurt a celestial being although he hadn't been given power to save al of th ghosts. This was an intense chapter and I glad most of them got out. THis is really good writing.
Comment Written 09-Jun-2024
reply by the author on 10-Jun-2024
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thanks so much Beth. I am thrilled that the tension and desperate need to find the portrait and get out came through in my writing. Sometimes I see and feel it in my head but worry I don't get it across to the reader. Thanks again.
Smiles, Carol
Comment from Teri7
This is another great six-star chapter you have penned. I was so glad to have six stars to give you. You used great descriptive words and very good imagery from your words. love and blessings, teri
reply by the author on 10-Jun-2024
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This is another great six-star chapter you have penned. I was so glad to have six stars to give you. You used great descriptive words and very good imagery from your words. love and blessings, teri
Comment Written 09-Jun-2024
reply by the author on 10-Jun-2024
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I appreciate your time, thoughts and of course the stars! It means you truly enjoyed the story and that means so much to me. Thank you!
Smiles, Carol
Comment from barbara.wilkey
Sebastian needs to return safely. He has the power of God behind him. You did a great job writing this chapter. I could feel the tension and the fear. The ballroom was described perfectly. This is a good write.
reply by the author on 10-Jun-2024
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Sebastian needs to return safely. He has the power of God behind him. You did a great job writing this chapter. I could feel the tension and the fear. The ballroom was described perfectly. This is a good write.
Comment Written 09-Jun-2024
reply by the author on 10-Jun-2024
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Awesome! I hoped you would sense the tension and also Sebastian's role in the finding of the portrait. His power was failing....Is he able to get out? We shall see!
Smiles, Carol
Comment from Michael Ludwinder
Your writing is so enjoyable. This chapter is filled with intense drama. I thought you did an excellent job of sharing the urgency of the group's mission. The dialogue is natural. Your descriptions bring the scenes to life. The mix of supernatural elements with the human struggles creates a unique and enjoyable atmosphere. I particularly enjoyed the way you portrayed the protective nature of Sebastian and the group's determination to support each other despite the overwhelming danger.
reply by the author on 09-Jun-2024
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Your writing is so enjoyable. This chapter is filled with intense drama. I thought you did an excellent job of sharing the urgency of the group's mission. The dialogue is natural. Your descriptions bring the scenes to life. The mix of supernatural elements with the human struggles creates a unique and enjoyable atmosphere. I particularly enjoyed the way you portrayed the protective nature of Sebastian and the group's determination to support each other despite the overwhelming danger.
Comment Written 09-Jun-2024
reply by the author on 09-Jun-2024
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Thank you so much Michael for reading this chapter and enjoying my efforts. Your comments were great and meant a lot to me. Have a great day!
Smiles, Carol
Comment from Ric Myworld
I sincerely wish they gave us enough sixes to go around and it doesn't seem fair that those who read many more posts would receive the same amount as those who read few. Our numbers should be determined by a system where we earn sixes by how many stories we read and review. This chapter definitely deserves a six with its good as it gets descriptive sentences. But a cowboy's bullets are soon gone when he only has a six shooter. Thanks for sharing another fine chapter.
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reply by the author on 09-Jun-2024
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I sincerely wish they gave us enough sixes to go around and it doesn't seem fair that those who read many more posts would receive the same amount as those who read few. Our numbers should be determined by a system where we earn sixes by how many stories we read and review. This chapter definitely deserves a six with its good as it gets descriptive sentences. But a cowboy's bullets are soon gone when he only has a six shooter. Thanks for sharing another fine chapter.
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Comment Written 09-Jun-2024
reply by the author on 09-Jun-2024
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Not a problem! JUust knowing that you thought it was good enough and you enjoyed it makes me happy. I just wish I could get more followers, but I don't see it happening. When I first started in 2009 I had tons, but now I am lucky if I stay between 15 or 20. It's not about the score, for me it's about knowing that others see the same vision that I do and they find enjoyment in it. Have a great day......
Smiles and hugs, Carol
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Yes, I'm with you in that it's hard to get readers these days if we aren't writing religious based stories or something about a family member or someone on the site. I enjoy those stories; but personally, I prefer well written, imaginative and creative fiction. And, my dear, there is no one on this site who does it better than you!
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Awww! You send shivers through me... I was thinking of leaving the site because it's such a struggle to get anyone to read the stories, but I would miss you and a few others that have become good friends. You always put a smile on my face and warm my heart.
smiles, Carol
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The feeling is mutual, Carol. I mulled over leaving the site for months before deciding to stay and read you and a few others. I mostly read, and write very little, and I could sure use the time for something more constructive. But we have to do something we enjoy every now and then. I think the site could be greatly improved and even made more profitable for Tom, plus more enjoyable for us users, but I can't blame anyone for not fixing what they don't think is broke. We are all mostly creatures of habit, but those unwilling to seek change for the greater good miss out on a lot. I've learned a lot from you, even if I can't put it all into practice. But most of all, I just like you! Hugs, Ric
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Thank you...I like you too!
Smiles and hugs, Carol
Comment from Nicole Schmidt
Having remained quiet during their discussion, Esther finally found her voice and asked, "What about you, Sebastian? You said five for six minutes. What happens if you are protecting us and --" Her voice quivered, and she stopped, unable to put her thoughts into words.
Great from beginning to end
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reply by the author on 09-Jun-2024
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Having remained quiet during their discussion, Esther finally found her voice and asked, "What about you, Sebastian? You said five for six minutes. What happens if you are protecting us and --" Her voice quivered, and she stopped, unable to put her thoughts into words.
Great from beginning to end
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Comment Written 09-Jun-2024
reply by the author on 09-Jun-2024
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Thanks again for reading and reviewing. I hope you continue to enjoy the story.
Smiles, Carol
Comment from davisr (Rhonda)
Hi Carol,
I'm cheating, and slipping ahead to this chapter. I wasn't going to as I'm trying to read in order, but it kept coming up in the feed and I saw it in my message box a few times. It's okay, I'll probably forget most of it before I get to it again, lol, but I'm glad I dropped in on it. Your writing style is exciting and intense. You use action and suspense masterfully. Love that most of your characters are ghosts, lol. As with my Greek gods, you can bend rules to develop characters as they aren't subject to the same laws regular humans are.
Well done,
Hugs,
Rhonda
reply by the author on 09-Jun-2024
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Hi Carol,
I'm cheating, and slipping ahead to this chapter. I wasn't going to as I'm trying to read in order, but it kept coming up in the feed and I saw it in my message box a few times. It's okay, I'll probably forget most of it before I get to it again, lol, but I'm glad I dropped in on it. Your writing style is exciting and intense. You use action and suspense masterfully. Love that most of your characters are ghosts, lol. As with my Greek gods, you can bend rules to develop characters as they aren't subject to the same laws regular humans are.
Well done,
Hugs,
Rhonda
Comment Written 09-Jun-2024
reply by the author on 09-Jun-2024
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I posted the chapter vefore this one today as well if you want to grab the money. Thanks so much for reading and enjoying this chapter. Have a great day!
Smiles, Carol
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I felt guilty enough for jumping ahead in the story, lol. I'll look back on it, though.
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It's posted on the front page... I know how tough it is to read and write and those $$ are hard to come by. I used my own money today just because I wanted to post the two chapters together.
Smiles, Carol
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Yeah, I've had to do that before as well. I'll check it out, thank you!