The Unwilling Heir
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Comment from Ric Myworld
Esther can't help much with the clue if they can't find her, and as it looks, someone might have found her first. Dealing with the real world is tough, but throw in ghosts and former lovers and you have a mess. :-) Thanks for sharing.
reply by the author on 05-Jun-2024
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Esther can't help much with the clue if they can't find her, and as it looks, someone might have found her first. Dealing with the real world is tough, but throw in ghosts and former lovers and you have a mess. :-) Thanks for sharing.
Comment Written 05-Jun-2024
reply by the author on 05-Jun-2024
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It's those former lovers that will mess with your head every time...LOL She's got the clue and since the book and key are missing, I hope someone finds her soon before those creepy guys do. Thanks so much and hope you are having a great day!
Smiles, Carol
Comment from barbara.wilkey
Great job of writing their escape, but where are on is Ester. That lady is a pain!!!!! LOL I can't wait to read more.
It will all work out, but we need to escape them." (you can omit 'them' we know who 'them' and it's a little confusing here.)
reply by the author on 05-Jun-2024
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Great job of writing their escape, but where are on is Ester. That lady is a pain!!!!! LOL I can't wait to read more.
It will all work out, but we need to escape them." (you can omit 'them' we know who 'them' and it's a little confusing here.)
Comment Written 05-Jun-2024
reply by the author on 05-Jun-2024
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Thanks for the suggestion, and I have deleted the word them. I appreciate it very much. Dear Esther is fretting over the past and losing William if she gives up the clue. But actually, it will be her assistance that will give her redemption. But we don't know what she will do. Thanks again, as always, Barbara.
Smiles, Carol
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Ester is an interesting character.
Comment from Nicole Schmidt
A colossal black cloud loomed in the distance, its swirling mass spreading a suffocating darkness over the landscape. The air turned frigid, and a chilling silence descended, broken only by the mournful cries carried on the gusting winds.
Love the imagery
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reply by the author on 05-Jun-2024
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A colossal black cloud loomed in the distance, its swirling mass spreading a suffocating darkness over the landscape. The air turned frigid, and a chilling silence descended, broken only by the mournful cries carried on the gusting winds.
Love the imagery
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Comment Written 05-Jun-2024
reply by the author on 05-Jun-2024
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Thank you so much for reading this chapter and for enjoying it. I appreciate your time and thoughtfulness. Have a great day!
Smiles, Carol
Comment from Pamusart
Hi, Carol
An interesting story. I still don't have down which ones of them are ghosts and which ones aren't. But I know Lorri isn't a ghost.
I haven't read all of your previous chapters. But I think I did read one of them.
How could they lose Esther.? How could they lose a ghost? Maybe she just went through them and they didn't notice her. I'm kidding. Seriously , nicely written.
"The ground shuddered under their onslaught, ". I think it was singular. It's onslaught
"Each woman sighed with relief, their thoughts filled with what would come next.". her thoughts
Good job. Thank you for sharing.
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reply by the author on 05-Jun-2024
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Hi, Carol
An interesting story. I still don't have down which ones of them are ghosts and which ones aren't. But I know Lorri isn't a ghost.
I haven't read all of your previous chapters. But I think I did read one of them.
How could they lose Esther.? How could they lose a ghost? Maybe she just went through them and they didn't notice her. I'm kidding. Seriously , nicely written.
"The ground shuddered under their onslaught, ". I think it was singular. It's onslaught
"Each woman sighed with relief, their thoughts filled with what would come next.". her thoughts
Good job. Thank you for sharing.
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Comment Written 05-Jun-2024
reply by the author on 05-Jun-2024
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Thanks for stopping by to read this chapter. It's difficult to grasp a story with so many moving parts, especially one like this. I do appreciate your suggestions, thoughts, and review. Just in case you read further, the only mortals are Sandra (the crime investigating reporter) and Madeline (the once-mistress of the mansion). Lorrie is a ghost, but appears in her eartjly form most of the time (a busy-body grandmother sort).
Have a great day!
Smiles, Carol