A haiku (barren desert sands)
An Ekphrastic Haiku15 total reviews
Comment from Tom Horonzy
How much can one say with something so small as a 5-7-5 poem? And I wonder why God thought there was a need for a desert and cacti, but here they are and will likely be pleasingly sufficient to say you nailed the challenge.
reply by the author on 05-Jun-2024
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How much can one say with something so small as a 5-7-5 poem? And I wonder why God thought there was a need for a desert and cacti, but here they are and will likely be pleasingly sufficient to say you nailed the challenge.
Comment Written 05-Jun-2024
reply by the author on 05-Jun-2024
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Thank you, Tom, I am trying to improve, your encouraging comments really help, as always very much appreciated****kahpot
Comment from royowen
Although we only really have imported cacti, I'm sure there are such fascination ones in the US, just waiting to be ogled by lovers of those spiky gluteus ones, beautifully written, blessings Roy
reply by the author on 05-Jun-2024
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Although we only really have imported cacti, I'm sure there are such fascination ones in the US, just waiting to be ogled by lovers of those spiky gluteus ones, beautifully written, blessings Roy
Comment Written 05-Jun-2024
reply by the author on 05-Jun-2024
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Thank you, Roy, for your wonderful comments, as always very much appreciated****kahpot
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Comment from Wendy G
Interesting poem! I was surprised at the choice of "soaked" because the barren desert sands are usually so very dry. Perhaps the morning glory gave an illusion of wetness. Thought-provoking therefore. Thanks for sharing.
Wendy
Edit: "baren" should be "barren".
reply by the author on 05-Jun-2024
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Interesting poem! I was surprised at the choice of "soaked" because the barren desert sands are usually so very dry. Perhaps the morning glory gave an illusion of wetness. Thought-provoking therefore. Thanks for sharing.
Wendy
Edit: "baren" should be "barren".
Comment Written 05-Jun-2024
reply by the author on 05-Jun-2024
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Thank you, Wendy, yes, i was trying to describe "covered" with one syllable, I know there is a word out there, I thought soaked might do, as always very much appreciated****kahpot
Comment from patcelaw
Since I live in Arizona, we have lots of cactus in our neighborhood and I get to see many of them as I'm out on my walk many gardens in the area have cactus blooming and they are absolutely wonderful when they bloom. Patricia .
reply by the author on 05-Jun-2024
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Since I live in Arizona, we have lots of cactus in our neighborhood and I get to see many of them as I'm out on my walk many gardens in the area have cactus blooming and they are absolutely wonderful when they bloom. Patricia .
Comment Written 05-Jun-2024
reply by the author on 05-Jun-2024
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Thank you, Patricia, for your wonderful comments, as always very much appreciated****kahpot
Comment from lyenochka
Thanks for writing this ekphrastic poem about this interesting picture. I enjoyed thinking about the power of the cactus growing through the "barren desert sands." (We use two r's - is it different in Aussie English?)
I also liked " groundbreaking glory" !
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reply by the author on 05-Jun-2024
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Thanks for writing this ekphrastic poem about this interesting picture. I enjoyed thinking about the power of the cactus growing through the "barren desert sands." (We use two r's - is it different in Aussie English?)
I also liked " groundbreaking glory" !
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The highest and the lowest rating are not included in calculations.
Comment Written 05-Jun-2024
reply by the author on 05-Jun-2024
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Thank you very much, I meant to post as a haiku, after reading your review I remembered ekphrastic, many thanks, as always very much appreciated****kahpot
