View from Land
Two friends on a beach come face to face with a dead man21 total reviews
Comment from Neonewman
Wow, I love spending time on the coast, but I never want a body to wash ashore. That is an image one would never forget. Thank you for sharing your talent and artwork my friend.
God bless.
Steve
reply by the author on 25-May-2024
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Wow, I love spending time on the coast, but I never want a body to wash ashore. That is an image one would never forget. Thank you for sharing your talent and artwork my friend.
God bless.
Steve
Comment Written 23-May-2024
reply by the author on 25-May-2024
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Thank you STEVE for getting immersed in the poem and for a great review
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My pleasure.
Comment from LJbutterfly
I enjoyed the mystery of the story told in this very creative and descriptive poem. The rhythmic flow and details of your well-chosen words adds to the overall enjoyment of the story told.
reply by the author on 25-May-2024
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I enjoyed the mystery of the story told in this very creative and descriptive poem. The rhythmic flow and details of your well-chosen words adds to the overall enjoyment of the story told.
Comment Written 23-May-2024
reply by the author on 25-May-2024
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Thank you, LJ for a very nice review
Comment from tempeste
Ciao,
lost of things wash up on shore.. this time it was a dead captain. I like that you didn't explain what happened only that he was killed.
Seems the doctor can't determine the cause of death. So it's open to each reader to decide what happen. Who knows at sea lots of things can happen.
Your rhymed poem reads smoothly like a sailboat on a steady breeze.
I hope you figured out how to upload your own artwork.
Dolly's poems , a member here, for many months used her own drawings .. they were for her series on birds.
reply by the author on 25-May-2024
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Ciao,
lost of things wash up on shore.. this time it was a dead captain. I like that you didn't explain what happened only that he was killed.
Seems the doctor can't determine the cause of death. So it's open to each reader to decide what happen. Who knows at sea lots of things can happen.
Your rhymed poem reads smoothly like a sailboat on a steady breeze.
I hope you figured out how to upload your own artwork.
Dolly's poems , a member here, for many months used her own drawings .. they were for her series on birds.
Comment Written 23-May-2024
reply by the author on 25-May-2024
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Thank you, tempeste for a fine review. I did not know that Dolly is a visual artist. Wow. She has many talents
Comment from Dolly'sPoems
The Captain often goes down with the ship and this is a tragic tale of death at sea here Pam, fine rhymes and I wasn't expecting to read this tale from the title, love Dolly x x x
reply by the author on 25-May-2024
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The Captain often goes down with the ship and this is a tragic tale of death at sea here Pam, fine rhymes and I wasn't expecting to read this tale from the title, love Dolly x x x
Comment Written 23-May-2024
reply by the author on 25-May-2024
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Hi, Dolly I did not know that you were a fellow visual artist. I heard that on your bird stories you posted your own work. I might?ve missed that because I had been gone for five years before I just started it up again.
I?m curious what you mean you weren?t expecting to read the tale from the title
Thanks for the great review
Comment from lyenochka
I would have liked to see your own artwork, Pam. I like your storytelling in this poem. It's sad that the news doesn't tell what really happened - a natural death doesn't wash up on shore. That would be traumatic for kids to witness something like that.
reply by the author on 25-May-2024
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I would have liked to see your own artwork, Pam. I like your storytelling in this poem. It's sad that the news doesn't tell what really happened - a natural death doesn't wash up on shore. That would be traumatic for kids to witness something like that.
Comment Written 23-May-2024
reply by the author on 25-May-2024
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Thank you for your great review, Helen
Comment from jenintorre
This is such a sad and beautifully written story in a poem. I really enjoyed reading it. Th illustration that you have chosen is fabulous. God Bless. Jen. X
reply by the author on 25-May-2024
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This is such a sad and beautifully written story in a poem. I really enjoyed reading it. Th illustration that you have chosen is fabulous. God Bless. Jen. X
Comment Written 23-May-2024
reply by the author on 25-May-2024
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Thank you, Jen for a great review
Comment from kahpot
This would have been a terrible thing to witness, or even be close to, yes, the skippers of these boats/ships do take and have good knowledge of the conditions, love the rhyme in this wonderful story in a poem, very well done****kahpot
reply by the author on 25-May-2024
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This would have been a terrible thing to witness, or even be close to, yes, the skippers of these boats/ships do take and have good knowledge of the conditions, love the rhyme in this wonderful story in a poem, very well done****kahpot
Comment Written 23-May-2024
reply by the author on 25-May-2024
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Thank you, kaput for a great review
Comment from gansach
This is a haunting poem thanks to the last stanza. Before that it's relating a death at sea which puts it distant to anyone on land, but the discovery of the body by two beach-goers gives it that heartstopping little moment that brings it right into their world and sends that chill down the spine. Great atmosphere, good rhyme and meter. Well done!
reply by the author on 25-May-2024
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This is a haunting poem thanks to the last stanza. Before that it's relating a death at sea which puts it distant to anyone on land, but the discovery of the body by two beach-goers gives it that heartstopping little moment that brings it right into their world and sends that chill down the spine. Great atmosphere, good rhyme and meter. Well done!
Comment Written 22-May-2024
reply by the author on 25-May-2024
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Thank you, gansach for your wonderful comments and great review
Comment from Julie Helms
What an excellent story! We see the captains daily routine (beautifully described), and the unaware beach goers getting a surprise. The doctors tie it together but without much conclusion. So the mystery remains. Great story elements, poetically told. I really enjoyed it!
Julie
reply by the author on 25-May-2024
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What an excellent story! We see the captains daily routine (beautifully described), and the unaware beach goers getting a surprise. The doctors tie it together but without much conclusion. So the mystery remains. Great story elements, poetically told. I really enjoyed it!
Julie
Comment Written 22-May-2024
reply by the author on 25-May-2024
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Thank you so much, Julie for that extra star. Sorry for the delay. I?m glad you liked is that much. Thank you for the wonderful comments and the great review
Comment from Douglas Goff
This descriptive stanza sets the scene from the start:
The sailboat on the crested wave
Is knocked about by ocean spray
The captain's killed; so very brave
So many times, he's saved the day
Very well done!
D
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reply by the author on 25-May-2024
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This descriptive stanza sets the scene from the start:
The sailboat on the crested wave
Is knocked about by ocean spray
The captain's killed; so very brave
So many times, he's saved the day
Very well done!
D
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The highest and the lowest rating are not included in calculations.
Comment Written 22-May-2024
reply by the author on 25-May-2024
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Thank you, Douglas for a complimentary and encouraging review