Foresight
A Free Verse22 total reviews
Comment from estory
Artfully composed. I really like how you handle free verse, there is a great sense of drama in the breaks between stanzas, and the images are fantastic here. "Genius sharp enough to pierce the veil of time." I like how that captures the fact that Einstein was ahead of his time. "The world, once perceived, has shifted" this sense of Einstein's theories rearranging our interpretation of experience. The opening catches our attention right away: "I ponder the echoes of brilliant words." We get that sense of excitement at reading Einstein's theories. Not many can handle subjects like this with such aplomb. estory
reply by the author on 21-May-2024
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Artfully composed. I really like how you handle free verse, there is a great sense of drama in the breaks between stanzas, and the images are fantastic here. "Genius sharp enough to pierce the veil of time." I like how that captures the fact that Einstein was ahead of his time. "The world, once perceived, has shifted" this sense of Einstein's theories rearranging our interpretation of experience. The opening catches our attention right away: "I ponder the echoes of brilliant words." We get that sense of excitement at reading Einstein's theories. Not many can handle subjects like this with such aplomb. estory
Comment Written 21-May-2024
reply by the author on 21-May-2024
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estory, thank you so much. I am thrilled you enjoyed it; you read this perfectly! I'm grateful for your keen eye.
Xo
Jess
Comment from artisart4u
I agree with your poem. To me curious is natural, adults and children have it. It is good to some and harmful to others.
In this case, wanting to extend you knowledge on a particular thing, to me is wanting to learn more about it.
Where would we be without people, like Albert Einstein, who took a chance to gained more knowledge so we can move on as a human race.
Good luck with your poem and your interest in science.
reply by the author on 22-May-2024
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I agree with your poem. To me curious is natural, adults and children have it. It is good to some and harmful to others.
In this case, wanting to extend you knowledge on a particular thing, to me is wanting to learn more about it.
Where would we be without people, like Albert Einstein, who took a chance to gained more knowledge so we can move on as a human race.
Good luck with your poem and your interest in science.
Comment Written 20-May-2024
reply by the author on 22-May-2024
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Thank you so much for your wonderful feedback!!
Xo
Jess
Comment from lyenochka
Thanks for bringing up the spiritual side of Einstein. He must have sensed the fingerprint of God in all the amazing Creation. And God certainly had gifted him (and his first wife - credited with some of his ideas) Best wishes in the contest!
reply by the author on 22-May-2024
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Thanks for bringing up the spiritual side of Einstein. He must have sensed the fingerprint of God in all the amazing Creation. And God certainly had gifted him (and his first wife - credited with some of his ideas) Best wishes in the contest!
Comment Written 20-May-2024
reply by the author on 22-May-2024
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That is so true, Helen! Thank you! Xoxo
Comment from HarryT
In my opinion, this is a brilliant work that seeks to explain how Einstein insights into the universe has touched the writer. The poem flows so well that the reader is lead from one verse to the next. Each word has deep meaning. The structure is perfect for this work. A wonderful job.
reply by the author on 22-May-2024
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In my opinion, this is a brilliant work that seeks to explain how Einstein insights into the universe has touched the writer. The poem flows so well that the reader is lead from one verse to the next. Each word has deep meaning. The structure is perfect for this work. A wonderful job.
Comment Written 20-May-2024
reply by the author on 22-May-2024
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Harry, I'm honored by your wonderful review! Thank you so much! Xoxo
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You are welcome.
Comment from Brenda Strauser
This is such an informative and interesting poem. I was always interested in Einstein. The poem is written well. I like how you added the information at the bottom. Very well done. Good luck in the contest.
reply by the author on 22-May-2024
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This is such an informative and interesting poem. I was always interested in Einstein. The poem is written well. I like how you added the information at the bottom. Very well done. Good luck in the contest.
Comment Written 20-May-2024
reply by the author on 22-May-2024
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Brenda, thank you so much!! Xoxo
Comment from patcelaw
This is very well written, and it's kind of like an ode to a very intelligent scientist. I enjoyed very much listening to it. I have one little story that I'll share with you. My father-in-law was a postal worker in California and he had to hand-deliver a letter to Albert Einstein when Albert Einstein was visiting California. Pat.
reply by the author on 22-May-2024
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This is very well written, and it's kind of like an ode to a very intelligent scientist. I enjoyed very much listening to it. I have one little story that I'll share with you. My father-in-law was a postal worker in California and he had to hand-deliver a letter to Albert Einstein when Albert Einstein was visiting California. Pat.
Comment Written 19-May-2024
reply by the author on 22-May-2024
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That is incredible!!! Thanks so much, Patricia!
Comment from Debbie D'Arcy
What a great subject for this contest, Jess! You've captured your admiration for this genius well in your free verse (the final stanza is the winner for me) and complemented it with a lovely visual and notes worthy of a post in their own right. Thank you for sharing this and good luck! Debbie
reply by the author on 22-May-2024
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What a great subject for this contest, Jess! You've captured your admiration for this genius well in your free verse (the final stanza is the winner for me) and complemented it with a lovely visual and notes worthy of a post in their own right. Thank you for sharing this and good luck! Debbie
Comment Written 19-May-2024
reply by the author on 22-May-2024
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Debbie, that means so much!! Thank you!
Comment from Michael Ludwinder
This poem was beautiful. Wonderful word choices. My favorite was "echoes of brilliant words" and a "universe told upon conception". For me that shows that he has infinite potential. What a nice poem about him. I enjoyed it.
reply by the author on 22-May-2024
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This poem was beautiful. Wonderful word choices. My favorite was "echoes of brilliant words" and a "universe told upon conception". For me that shows that he has infinite potential. What a nice poem about him. I enjoyed it.
Comment Written 19-May-2024
reply by the author on 22-May-2024
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Thank you so much, Michael!!
Comment from Raquel Wadden
I am more of a "freestyle' type poet. I love how not only you can write this style but also do it so amazing and articulately. True talent. Very deep and pondering
reply by the author on 22-May-2024
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I am more of a "freestyle' type poet. I love how not only you can write this style but also do it so amazing and articulately. True talent. Very deep and pondering
Comment Written 19-May-2024
reply by the author on 22-May-2024
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Raquel, that means the world!!! Thank you! Xo
Comment from royowen
I'm afraid the mysteries uncovered by science are only on small blip in the mind of God, therefore I'd rather pore over His incredibly majestic mind, knowing Him is the source of all wisdom and knowledge, because He is science, its master and its creator. That would reveal everything there is to know. Beautifully written, you could teach the prose 'poetry' writers a thing or two. Beautifully written, blessings Roy
reply by the author on 22-May-2024
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I'm afraid the mysteries uncovered by science are only on small blip in the mind of God, therefore I'd rather pore over His incredibly majestic mind, knowing Him is the source of all wisdom and knowledge, because He is science, its master and its creator. That would reveal everything there is to know. Beautifully written, you could teach the prose 'poetry' writers a thing or two. Beautifully written, blessings Roy
Comment Written 19-May-2024
reply by the author on 22-May-2024
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Roy, thanks so much!! Xo
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Most welcome