The Unwilling Heir
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Comment from Michael Ludwinder
Your writing is like a puzzle, each piece perfectly crafted to draw the reader deeper into the mystery. The intricate plot twists and turns are doing a great job of keeping the suspense up and our interest in the story high. Your ability to weave together multiple storylines and characters is amazing. The dialogue feels natural. Nicely done.
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Your writing is like a puzzle, each piece perfectly crafted to draw the reader deeper into the mystery. The intricate plot twists and turns are doing a great job of keeping the suspense up and our interest in the story high. Your ability to weave together multiple storylines and characters is amazing. The dialogue feels natural. Nicely done.
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reply by the author on 10-May-2024
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Thank you so much, Michael. That is one of the nicest things someone has said to me about my stories. I truly appreciate your kindness. Glad you are enjoying the story.
Smiles, Carol
Comment from barbara.wilkey
Now who took the key, the only other human is Madeline. Of course I don't trust Victoria. I thought the Judge had it in his hand. Maybe I'm mistaken.
James interrupted Ryan. (comma after 'Ryan' Just a suggestion. When it's an interruption, I like to lead with the dialogue, it's an interruption after all.)
He directed his following sentence toward Sandra (comma after 'Sandra,)
Ryan took a deep breath before answering. "I had (comma after 'answering')
James was quick to jump in. "There (comma after 'in')
reply by the author on 10-May-2024
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Now who took the key, the only other human is Madeline. Of course I don't trust Victoria. I thought the Judge had it in his hand. Maybe I'm mistaken.
James interrupted Ryan. (comma after 'Ryan' Just a suggestion. When it's an interruption, I like to lead with the dialogue, it's an interruption after all.)
He directed his following sentence toward Sandra (comma after 'Sandra,)
Ryan took a deep breath before answering. "I had (comma after 'answering')
James was quick to jump in. "There (comma after 'in')
Comment Written 10-May-2024
reply by the author on 10-May-2024
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fixed and thank you!
Yes, the Judge had the key, but I worry that Victoria will somehow get her hands on it, while playing Madeline for it. but you never know, since others want the key too. Thanks as always. Have a great day!
Smiles, Carol
Comment from Sandra Stoner-Mitchell
Oh my word! Carol, you certainly come up with the goods when you get writing. Now, as far as we know, William has the key, is he going to bring it into the room where everyone is talking about why Sandra must stay, and what she must do? Or is he going to take it and stop the others from travelling on to Heaven? Has William got the book? Now there's thought!
You have weaved a fabulous story her, my friend. I hope you start publishing some of these. I'll be first in line to buy them. Well done, and hurry with the next part!! Love you lots! :)) Sandra xxx
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Oh my word! Carol, you certainly come up with the goods when you get writing. Now, as far as we know, William has the key, is he going to bring it into the room where everyone is talking about why Sandra must stay, and what she must do? Or is he going to take it and stop the others from travelling on to Heaven? Has William got the book? Now there's thought!
You have weaved a fabulous story her, my friend. I hope you start publishing some of these. I'll be first in line to buy them. Well done, and hurry with the next part!! Love you lots! :)) Sandra xxx
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Comment Written 10-May-2024
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William has the key , but Victoria might charm him out of it. Will Madeline get blamed since she was seen outside the room? And now Ryan's story cast doubt on whether she was innocent in Noah's death too. What a pot of stew we've got brewing.
Smiles and hugs and of course, all my love, Carol
Comment from Ric Myworld
Now we're playing that universal game of "Now you see, now you don't." The key in the jewelry box. The key gone. And if I had to bet where it is now, I'd say probably in Carol's pocket. LOL. Thanks for sharing another fine chapter.
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Now we're playing that universal game of "Now you see, now you don't." The key in the jewelry box. The key gone. And if I had to bet where it is now, I'd say probably in Carol's pocket. LOL. Thanks for sharing another fine chapter.
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Comment Written 10-May-2024
reply by the author on 10-May-2024
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Sweet innocent me...how could you place the blame in my corner? better watch out..I might send one of these charming ghosts to haunt you, but then you might send Tucker to shoot me so I better think this through a little better. Thanks for stopping by and enjoying the story.
Smiles, Carol