Breathe My Last
A poem26 total reviews
Comment from Colorado Owl
This is a wonderful poem! Your words in the last stanza express the feeling that we all should hold onto when grieving for a loved one. Very well done.
reply by the author on 23-Sep-2024
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This is a wonderful poem! Your words in the last stanza express the feeling that we all should hold onto when grieving for a loved one. Very well done.
Comment Written 06-Sep-2024
reply by the author on 23-Sep-2024
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Thank you
Comment from gansach
This is a poem that provides an opportunity to ponder one's feelings on the ending of life. Opinions may change as one ages and gains wisdom, that last breath may now appear as a next step, a natural progression, the reaching of a goal rather than something to be sad or afraid of. The uneven construct of the lines and rhythm do not detract or distract, but work together. Good rhyming. Nicely done!
reply by the author on 23-Sep-2024
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This is a poem that provides an opportunity to ponder one's feelings on the ending of life. Opinions may change as one ages and gains wisdom, that last breath may now appear as a next step, a natural progression, the reaching of a goal rather than something to be sad or afraid of. The uneven construct of the lines and rhythm do not detract or distract, but work together. Good rhyming. Nicely done!
Comment Written 05-Sep-2024
reply by the author on 23-Sep-2024
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Thank you
Comment from Katiemae1977
Your final line is so awesome. Yes, we change and grow with every breath we take no matter how old. Being grateful is what's important.
Great poem with good strong rhymes and a lovely message.
Take care!
Luv&stuff
Katiemae1977
reply by the author on 23-Sep-2024
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Your final line is so awesome. Yes, we change and grow with every breath we take no matter how old. Being grateful is what's important.
Great poem with good strong rhymes and a lovely message.
Take care!
Luv&stuff
Katiemae1977
Comment Written 05-Sep-2024
reply by the author on 23-Sep-2024
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Thank you
Comment from estory
This seemed above average to me, so I'm giving it six stars. I liked the rhythm you put together, even with the unusual stops at the end of every line. It kind of built a rhythm like climbing a ladder rung by rung, and that underscored this theme of climbing out of this world and into the next one. I always like it when the framework enhances the theme. There's a great, modest, self depreciating tone the voice here, a resignation with the natural progression of things, of death being a part of life rather than an eraser. The opening line grabbed me right away: "To breathe my last would be a curiosity." Right away I could tell it was different and went beyond the average pale. Nice imagination and effort in the construction of this. estory
reply by the author on 23-Sep-2024
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This seemed above average to me, so I'm giving it six stars. I liked the rhythm you put together, even with the unusual stops at the end of every line. It kind of built a rhythm like climbing a ladder rung by rung, and that underscored this theme of climbing out of this world and into the next one. I always like it when the framework enhances the theme. There's a great, modest, self depreciating tone the voice here, a resignation with the natural progression of things, of death being a part of life rather than an eraser. The opening line grabbed me right away: "To breathe my last would be a curiosity." Right away I could tell it was different and went beyond the average pale. Nice imagination and effort in the construction of this. estory
Comment Written 05-Sep-2024
reply by the author on 23-Sep-2024
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Thank you very much
Comment from Begin Again
I celebrated my 76th birthday yesterday, and I can't deny that thoughts of how many more I would ever be around to see did drift through my mind. I have witnessed the loss of many before me, and I know that I am fortunate to be alive. There are regrets and sad times, but the good memories warm my final days. When the door opens and I am called, I know I will go joyously to the arms of those who left me behind.
Smiles, Carol
reply by the author on 23-Sep-2024
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I celebrated my 76th birthday yesterday, and I can't deny that thoughts of how many more I would ever be around to see did drift through my mind. I have witnessed the loss of many before me, and I know that I am fortunate to be alive. There are regrets and sad times, but the good memories warm my final days. When the door opens and I am called, I know I will go joyously to the arms of those who left me behind.
Smiles, Carol
Comment Written 05-Sep-2024
reply by the author on 23-Sep-2024
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Comment from Cindy Decker 3
Author,
Your poem is really beautiful. I'm 66 and wondering what my legacy on earth will be. I hope for a better world in the afterlife. But I might go kicking and screaming. Lol .
You take a realistic approach about dying, and ascending to new heights.
Best wishes,
Cindy
reply by the author on 23-Sep-2024
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Author,
Your poem is really beautiful. I'm 66 and wondering what my legacy on earth will be. I hope for a better world in the afterlife. But I might go kicking and screaming. Lol .
You take a realistic approach about dying, and ascending to new heights.
Best wishes,
Cindy
Comment Written 05-Sep-2024
reply by the author on 23-Sep-2024
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Thank you
Comment from Harry Craft
Great poem! I loved the meaning and the message. I liked the rhyming scheme. I felt like it fit perfectly with what you were writing for this poem. Nice. Keep up the good work!
reply by the author on 23-Sep-2024
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Great poem! I loved the meaning and the message. I liked the rhyming scheme. I felt like it fit perfectly with what you were writing for this poem. Nice. Keep up the good work!
Comment Written 05-Sep-2024
reply by the author on 23-Sep-2024
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Thank you
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You are so welcome!
Comment from MissMerri
I found the theme of this poem most intriguing. I think you have wonderfully captured the thoughts of many older folks, in your lines, and while the meter seemed unusual, the rhymes were original and clever. I did enjoy reading this. MM
reply by the author on 23-Sep-2024
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I found the theme of this poem most intriguing. I think you have wonderfully captured the thoughts of many older folks, in your lines, and while the meter seemed unusual, the rhymes were original and clever. I did enjoy reading this. MM
Comment Written 05-Sep-2024
reply by the author on 23-Sep-2024
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Thank you
Comment from Jacob1395
This is quite a sad piece, but I think I too would like to be in a position where I look back on my life and realise that it is has been a life well lived. A well written piece, I really enjoyed reading it.
reply by the author on 23-Sep-2024
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This is quite a sad piece, but I think I too would like to be in a position where I look back on my life and realise that it is has been a life well lived. A well written piece, I really enjoyed reading it.
Comment Written 05-Sep-2024
reply by the author on 23-Sep-2024
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Thank you
Comment from Wendy G
An interesting perspective. Yes, every breath brings us closer to being completed, where completeness is the full sun of our breraths and our time on earth. Death is the end of this life, but is the doorway into the next. A fine and thoughtful poem.
Wendy
reply by the author on 23-Sep-2024
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An interesting perspective. Yes, every breath brings us closer to being completed, where completeness is the full sun of our breraths and our time on earth. Death is the end of this life, but is the doorway into the next. A fine and thoughtful poem.
Wendy
Comment Written 05-Sep-2024
reply by the author on 23-Sep-2024
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